Dora's Appointment

It's great to read so many high-quality book reviews! Thank you everyone! I have carefully read all the encouragement and criticism, and it feels a little better than I expected. Maybe everyone is showing mercy! My writing style is indeed a bit like a running account, bland and not eye-catching. I need to hone this slowly and work hard. As for the protagonist's character design, I originally wanted it to be a story about a heroine. The boys are all supporting characters, which may be different from the style of the online novel that you have seen. I don't pursue any principles for online writing. I just do whatever I like. If I have a story in my mind, I just want to express it. It's that simple. After reading everyone's comments, I have an obvious feeling that everyone is from the perspective of how to sign a contract, and I am the same. We are all being gradually worn away by increasingly fixed standards. For some people, it's something they want, and they long to integrate. A few people, like me, still find it quite sad. Tell the truth! I used to be very unwilling to not meet QY standards, but now I have begun to accept the reality. My story just doesn't meet the standards of online writing, so I won't force it. I don't read enough, and I don't know enough to support my imagination, but I still insist on writing when I have an idea, and I feel that my story is not as bad as I imagined. The whole creative process is enjoyable, so there is no need for perseverance or persistence. I have been writing stories intermittently since 2016. This year is my sixth year, and I have just over one million words. It's early! Charge towards ten million words. For all the authors who have written serious book reviews for me, I will read and think about them carefully, and write down my own thoughts. If there are too many works, it will be slower. Please wait for me in the book review area. Thank you all!

This story is set in a parallel world, an imagination of symbiosis between humans and AI, and a future where the two worlds merge together. What will it look like when AI products continue to develop and eventually integrate with humans. Human beings can use AI to gain power beyond themselves, and AI can use human entities to realize their greater value. This process must be accompanied by various disputes, struggles and even revolutions. When AI develops autonomous consciousness, and some humans co-exist with AI and become AI new humans, how will they get along with ordinary humans? Expand your imagination!

I think the author can appropriately add some psychological activities from the first perspective of the characters in the text, which will make the characters more substantial. To be honest, after reading more than 20 chapters, the characters still feel very monotonous. For example, Dora held the wall and cried helplessly, and Zug came up and gave her a loving hug. Listen to the whisper of crying in your ears, feel the girl's shrugged shoulders, and her chest is soaked with her tears. Zug couldn't help but feel a sense of pity. He didn't know why his tough heartstrings, which had been tempered as a detective, softened when he faced Dora. My thoughts seemed to become confused as the girl cried. The experienced detective was actually a little confused by a girl. Zug didn't know how to comfort the crying Dora, he just held her arms a little tighter. After a long time, Dora stopped crying and whispered: "Thank you." At this time, she realized that the scene was a bit ambiguous, her face turned red and she broke away from Zug's arms. "Well, are you okay." Zug said, with a calm face. However, the moment the girl broke away from her arms, she felt a little disappointed. ...... I like this kind of love story😁, it is for reference only by the author, if you don't like it, please don't comment😁

After reading the first three chapters, maybe I am a straight man and have no expectations for this kind of emotional drama. I also flipped through the table of contents to the chapter on the Black Box Project and the chapter at the end of the first volume, but I could not find a plot I liked. This is a shortcoming in my opinion - the plot is not attractive enough. But the author's writing style is very good, the characters are described naturally, and his words and actions can echo the psychology of the characters without being stereotyped. This is an advantage - being able to tell a story well is great. The plot can be conceived, and writing is the foundation. Some suggestions. I personally think that the reason for the unattractiveness is that the conflicts are not strong enough. When I patiently read the first three chapters, I was always expecting the author to explain the more terrifying aspects of AI. However, you just wrote that AI will make most people unemployed. If the scarier aspects of AI are explained in the first chapter, the boy appears in the second chapter and talks about the black box, and the police officer appears in the third chapter and tells from the side some phenomena he has learned about the implementation of the black box plan, and some terrible impacts on the real world, which will then affect the heroine's work or certain interests, making the heroine have a sense of expectation for the boy, doubts in her heart, and looking forward to the next encounter. If she has many questions to ask him, it feels like this will be better.

After a brief look, I personally don't watch female videos and I don't have any special suggestions. Come on! I'm really a stand-alone player, I'm a bit lazy and don't want to move anymore.

The story is very sweet and romantic! The male and female protagonists are both interesting, come on! Author, please don't stop updating! 🤓🤓🤓

A very interesting story, very delicate events, but the only drawback is some writing skills. Literature is like looking at mountains and not liking the plains. Art comes from life but is higher than life. If the plot design is more ups and downs and the story is more bizarre and twists, I think it will be more popular. This book is like a very attractive science beauty who is dedicated and serious but doesn't like to dress up. Of course, I can't write it myself, just like a diner who can comment on whether a dish is delicious but can't do it well😂.

The assistant came and read the first three chapters. It feels like I used to read serials in magazines. Personally, I think it's pretty good, but I feel like it's still missing something. The first chapter has a good rhythm. I think it's a good beginning. But in the second chapter, I don't think it is necessary to describe the meeting with AI so clearly in the form of a dialogue? Readers actually don't like such a long dialogue. It is enough to leave Dora to perform the "rating" action and the AI ​​needs to be rated before it can come out, or make the dialogue more interesting. Inducing customers to give high scores, and then finding out after the customers complained that the complaints had been ignored is an interesting plot in itself, but the description of the process makes people feel a bit bland. In Chapter 3, the way to go back and investigate with Zug is to ask the heroine to write it down with pen and paper. Will this be inconsistent with the "future" setting? Even if a modern police officer makes a confession, he or she must write it himself. There is no way for the suspect to write it. And from the perspective of Dora and AI from Zug, you will feel that the relationship between the two is a bit strange, and the readers are the same. From our perspective, the two people have just met each other. Dora is even the one being teased. Is her attitude of protecting the other just because the other is just a child? Do you need to lay some groundwork? I have read relatively few books on female channels, and some of the suggestions may not be useful.

Hello, I have been reading the first three chapters of your work very carefully. I dare not comment on the story because I have read too few chapters. The author subconsciously typed "" and "LE" when writing, which affected reading fluency. In addition, the order of some sentences or the sentence itself seems to be a bit unfluent, so I always get stuck on how to express this paragraph better when I am immersed in reading. The above is my humble opinion. Another tip from My Blood and Tears: After writing, you can read the entire article first, and read it again during the day and night the next day, because different reading times have different reading perceptions, which may be helpful for revision. My novel: [Guidance System for Becoming a God], comments are welcome, and I am very grateful for the comment.

I came here with a writer's assistant. After reading the first three chapters, the writing is really good. The descriptions such as details are excellent. I can't do this. The subject matter is also good. I am a fan of ww. (It's not perfunctory, it's just that my vocabulary is a bit insufficient) The shortcoming is that I saw that there are many long paragraphs in the second chapter. It may be a problem with my reading habits. I think it is better to cut it. It does not mean to let the characters speak in two sentences, but to divide it into layout. Maybe it's because of environmental issues? For example, if you read this in a paper book, you won't feel strange, but if you read it online, you will feel that the paragraph is too long.

Today I re-read everyone's comments and reflected on it. I feel that all the shortcomings that were picked out are due to the storyline not being exciting enough. I don't know about other people, but when I read novels, if the storyline conforms to my imagination and expectations, I will ignore many obvious shortcomings. Of course I will work hard to improve my writing skills, but the first priority is the readability of the story. I will work hard! Thank you very much to all the authors and readers who found fault. You not only cured my glassy heart, but also gave me more fighting spirit! Let's work hard together! 😘

I've always wanted to write a story with warmth, rather than a simple cool story, but of course I couldn't write it. Probably because the author's life is monotonous and down-to-earth, he doesn't know how to make readers feel happy, and he himself can't read refreshing articles. Therefore, readers who are looking for something refreshing will definitely be disappointed. Sweet or sad, together or parting, simple and beautiful feelings, some small creativity, a little suspense, all elements are a new attempt, try to weave your favorite story. If you like it too, you are my best friend.

The first three chapters will not be modified, otherwise everyone's comments will be deleted! That is the treasure of this book! 😘😘😘 I didn't expect so many people to read it, thank you! Reading your first three chapters is also very inspiring. I feel that there is something worth learning in each of them. I suggest that everyone also read and review each other's books. It's really helpful, and you may come across books you like. Let's work hard together! 🤗🤗🤗

There are many views on love, not just the one you have in mind. Feeling that other people's views on love are childish is actually a sign of immaturity. You do not believe in the diversity of the world, nor do you believe in pure love. You firmly believe that only your own worldview is normal in this world. No one forces you to accept other people's views on love, so what are you afraid of? Busy to deny others. Negging others will not show that you are right. It just shows a kind of narrow-mindedness.

The work has been transferred to a female channel, can I be single?

No comments, do it yourself. The opening chapter is old-fashioned, the storyline is too bland, the writing is average, and it is not very attractive. I was supposed to be on the women's channel, but I clicked on the essay submission and went to the men's channel. Another stand-alone start, I wish the author good luck! 😂😂😂

Let's just say that every time I am chasing the first place! Therefore, my own works are still my favorite! It's so cold! 😅😅😅

A back view, use your imagination and make up your mind☺️

Continue reading today, good evening (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

Everyone who invested has received 500 points! 😜😜😜

After reading the first three chapters of many authors, I suddenly felt that for authors who are true to their own feelings, the so-called dull start is not a problem at all. Not every novel I like to read has an earth-shattering beginning. As long as a feeling touches my heart, I want to continue reading. Novel and readers are two-way choices, two-way rushes. A blind start is not a bad start, it just doesn't suit your taste. As an author, you can choose to please your readers or please yourself. I choose to please myself. If I can't please myself by writing a novel, why should I write it? Be true to your feelings! Come on! 😘😘😘

The author is great, more people will see it, come on~~ From a big-blooded idiot

Is the author female? Why write male videos.

Returning from a night run😘

The pace at the beginning is a bit flat, but it's not a fun story after all, so it doesn't matter if it starts slowly. I also like stories with warmth, because such words have tension. The writing is good, surpassing that of most authors. However, if you want to sign a contract, you must scan the rankings. (Also, the author must be tough, and what he thinks is good is good)

The character description has always been flawed, but I will work hard. Kyubey feels like a slightly dark boy to me.

Enjoy jogging😘

Come onｸﾞｯ!(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧

One chapter is too little, I have to have two chapters every day, come on! 💪

Boss, please bring a pound of beef, two ounces of white wine, and two plates of peanuts!