National Football All-Star

The national football team is brilliant? Why is the category of your novel not fantasy but sports? ? ?

You are so brave, author. The title of this book made me gasp!

Good guy, I don't even dare to think this way in my fantasy novels, the national football team? Find an electronics factory

Sure enough, it can still be seen that he is a newbie, unlike those old monsters who pretend to be cute, even if the cool articles are already almost to the sky, they still pretend to be cute. Let's put it this way, First of all, the top taboo in all online articles these days: the protagonist Brother Pig, thinks with his lower body when he sees a woman. Writing about lust usually does not show it, or at least it is not dirty Secondly, the heroine of a football novel usually does not appear very early. You, the protagonist, have not yet grown up and become happy. You are only sixteen years old, and you have already started picking up girls in just five chapters. People who still watch football these days are basically middle-aged. Can you afford a boy like the protagonist who is frivolous and can't control his hormones? Not to mention that the protagonist is still reborn? ? ? Three major questions in football articles, Have you got the golden boot? Champions League? Won the World Cup? How many football players get married early? You wouldn't decide on a heroine so early and then wait to change her later, would you? Then, at the age of sixteen, I started chasing after girls. Does this mean that when I become the main force, I will start to hold the baby and breastfeed? Let's put it this way, this is simply a layout error, because readers are not here for this at all. If your selling point is the rise of the national football team, you should write about this aspect, or even directly write that you are a youth training, and then rise from a micro perspective to a macro perspective on how to become a football power. Why so many current novels start with the best start, for fear of being late, is because readers are very impatient these days. Secondly, people can just read more books and be casual. You can tell your level based on your beginning, In other words, if you don't give your best at the beginning, you will have no chance. And mistakes are not allowed at the beginning. The heroine appears inexplicably in the fifth chapter and the protagonist's character collapses. It can correct more poisonous points Let's put it this way, It can be seen from just a few chapters. The author has not grasped the core of this book well. Although you have been describing the Chinese players from the side at the beginning, you have not turned it into refreshing points and shining points at all to stimulate the reader's perception or make the reader have a good impression. On the contrary, in my opinion, there are some inexplicable feelings, because I have read so many There are, although not many, football novels that write about the national football team, but they are either criticized for being evil, or they are too unreasonable to stand. Even for a long time, everyone is willing to read that the protagonist is a foreigner - because once the protagonist is Chinese, there will be controversy - Do you want to help? If you can't afford to pay, if you don't support, you will be called a national traitor, This is why everyone has paid attention to Chinese players in that era, and how much do they still remember? You have come up with so many characters in such a big way, but it's not likely that you can control the scenes of multiple characters appearing at the same time. You just brush it off in a rough way. Even if you don't know how to shape characters, you still have to work hard to portray a few core characters, because you will have to play with these people in the national team later. Not to mention, if you want to write about the chemical reaction between the characters, it is definitely better to be compatriots, We don't know much about them, so it's fine if you write whatever you want. They all died anyway. You have to write more Chinese people, or you can write something as individual as foreign players, Gangster, cool, or reliable, or Being too honest (to write a punchline), but also damaging to being sincere or high-spirited (this aspect can reflect the mentality of each player from the international status, because they really can't stand up, it will make everyone below them worse and worse) (Don't write villains, don't write them, and don't create villains for more than three chapters after they die, football writing is not popular This) And looking at the beginning, your writing is too bland and has no ups and downs. And in the larger direction, the rise of Chinese football alone is not enough to support the content of your book. In other words, this is just a selling point, not the core. Because a very critical point is that the rise of Chinese football has nothing to do with the protagonist? The protagonist is just the beneficiary, there is no causal relationship between the two, let alone inevitable connection. If the protagonist can single-handedly promote the rise of sports, and write like the sports of a big country, it can also be written as the center, but you don't have that kind of thinking. Let's put it this way, write about football, A few can be the core, hard work, hard work, success, the passion of the competition itself, growth, a team The reaction of the football culture of teams from all over the world, The first four are the fundamentals of how many people will face a TV late at night and yell crazily for a goal, which is basically impossible to lose. Football articles cannot be written in an invincible style, because no matter how awesome the goal is, it will be finished sooner or later, so growth is also necessary. The last point is a matter of opinion. I don't think many people write it, but It can completely support a book (probably too difficult to write). In addition, there are characters and various things as the core, but they are not very suitable for football articles. Enjoyment and laughter are all selling points. You cannot put the cart before the horse, Because once you want to make the writing enjoyable and funny, you will make the protagonist fail in various ways, or make the protagonist have no self-discipline at all, or score goals depends on his mood. You're done, because you are not Wang Dabu and can just go against the trend. There are too many details in it, and you need to find a new way without making readers disgusted. Proportion is difficult for most authors to write. And the fun and funny points, unless you can make a book so good from beginning to end that readers can take care of themselves, the fun and funny points need to be buried (not suppressed) Except for the beginning.

Not targeting the author. No matter how big your imagination is, you can't imagine that there is any hope of saving the Chinese men's football team. I really don't want to lose all my dignity. I will watch it at the beginning, but as long as I start in China, I won't be able to read it.

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After identification, this is a fantasy novel, finished!

Don't stop updating. Come on, author.

Name + position + European team I want to play for + technical characteristics. As long as there are no conflicts or duplicate players, I will try to find a suitable opportunity to write it in.