From the Beginning of the Storm, It Penetrated the Heavens

The writing is good and fluent, but it's a little lacking. The main character either wields a sword or a knife. Don't play left-handed or right-handed.

You commit a taboo right from the start. The most taboo thing about online writing is setting up a character. You start with a murderous character. What's the result? I don't know how to write at all, what is the killer? Ruthless, ruthless, murderous, but not too much. This is the character of a "killer" in my eyes and even in the eyes of most people. You are a killer. You can make others feel warm in their hearts with just a casual sentence. Such simple people are rare. If ordinary people were okay and were killers, the grass on their graves would have been several feet tall.

It's such a badass, and it has penetrated all the worlds. The book is good, but the protagonist is obviously a badass.

I suggest removing the background that the protagonist was the killer's second-in-command before time travel and was betrayed by others. It's useless and disgusting. It's a routine from a long time ago.

It's better to pay attention to the logic to avoid being too embarrassed. The protagonist is afraid of Bu Jingyun, but when he encounters Duan Lang whose strength is superior to Bu Jingyun, he can overpower Duan Lang. . .

I remember that there was also a Tathagata Divine Palm in Fengyun, and the later evolution into the Great Sun Tathagata Sutra was awesome.

This Kong Ci is really awesome, he belongs to the senior brother! The body belongs to the second senior brother! ❤️It belongs to the third junior brother!

Strength is six times that of agility. Isn't the protagonist practicing Holy Spirit Sword Technique and Dragon Subduing Kick Technique? And it might as well be changed to physical fitness and mental strength, there are only two items.

Today is another day to lose money

Isn't the protagonist a killer? Why do you have the same mentality as an ordinary person?

If your guess is correct, the author should be called Liu Ming. Otherwise, if you want to write a time-travel novel, you have to use the name of your predecessor? It's obviously a show! ! !

The protagonist is cheating, but he is still passive in everything. I have read so many books like this, and I am already tired of reading them. Since you are cheating, you have to take the initiative, push violently, and flip the table. Just keep doing it before you have the strength to lift the table

Fengyun has only watched the TV series, not the movie. So I feel a bit weird about the Ming family's grandma who is against Wushuang City. Secondly, her physical data is a bit outrageous. The result of practicing swordsmanship and kicking is that the agility attribute is much worse than the strength. The key is that I am a first-rate master, and my own strength is only a thousand catties. A horse can run more than a thousand catties. With this master, he can't even run. Even the horse couldn't be stopped. Grandma's domineering fist broke the big tree, and then she beat the protagonist, which I have never beaten before. This situation is a low-level version of martial arts, and the background of the protagonist's second-in-command killer was not reflected at all. It feels like the background was written N years ago, such as the domineering king of soldiers in the city, "I am a killer in the rebirth" and so on.

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There must be a pattern. Isn't there a long river of time and space behind the storm? Possessing the past and the future, you are not yet (pseudo) omniscient and omnipotent. You might be able to meet Pangu when you reach the upper reaches of time and space. When he falls from the sky, you can slowly approach with a blood pump [Manual Funny]

They've all time traveled to someone else, and they still haven't changed their names. It's disgusting to watch.

Which version of the plot background is this based on? Apart from the movie, the others are all from Nie Fengjin's Wushuang City. And Grandma Mingyue is also a loyal person to the point of foolishness.

Fengyun personally feels that it is already a fantasy. I don't know how much better than Zhu Xiandu. After that, there is no need to go to the God Condor Yitian Slaying Dragon Swordsman because there is no need.

Are there any protagonists who are not enemies? This is too urgent. This is to offend everyone. He was under constant pressure of life and death and could not even breathe. It's so depressing and boring.

It's so poisonous. I'd like to give you a suggestion. Since you've traveled through time, don't use two names. I can't bear it.

After reading dozens of chapters, I'm honestly getting bored! He knew that he had the opportunity to play tricks in Wushuang City! It's really getting annoying the more I look at it! It's poisonous, bye bye!

Isn't he good at the top ten martial arts? Wu Wudi can defeat Xu Fuji at the age of several decades, so what kind of sword can he learn?

The writing needs to be more detailed. For example, I was just talking to Mingyue about the engagement, and before I finished talking about it later, I suddenly had an epiphany while practicing swordsmanship.

A fantasy feeling written with the same force value as Huang Feihong and Huo Yuanjia

When writing 1 million words for a data flow plug-in, only one page of data and information can be written. The probability of crash is high, it is easy to make mistakes, and the description of martial arts will be very awkward.

Don't you mean the heavens? Are you still in Novice Village?

I like the writing style very much. Those born in the 1980s said that they have never watched Fengyun and they don't feel immersed in it.

Chapter 1: There are so many poisonous points that I can't stand it anymore

The fire unicorn flesh and blood has the same powerful effect 😁 but has a negative curse status 😁. Correspondingly, the body materials are precious 😁 while the other three mythical beasts have no negative status but their bodies are worthless 😁

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