Swallowing the Starry Sky's Rebirth

I found that you can actually write, but the direction and method are wrong. If you want to write a system, you can't just suppress the protagonist. You have to understand what the readers want to see? What do you really want to see? Read more comments from readers so that you know how to write later. Otherwise, the more you write, the more poisonous you will become. No one will read it in the end. Moreover, your feelings are caused by the female protagonist. The writing is too rubbish, like Tiancan Tudou, Ling Qingzhu in Wu Dong Qian Kun, and Yuan Zun. Zhou Xiaoyao, if you portray the characters like this, your work will be much better. Moreover, your character portrayal is too low, and the settings of your system cannot blindly suppress the protagonist. You have to look at the overall situation. Since you have an outline, you You should know what to do in the later stages of the system. The previous system settings have already begun to collapse. Otherwise, you can write out all the later aspects of the system. Anyway, it will reduce the drama that suppresses the development of the protagonist. In Tomato's works, the heroine does not need to be too portrayed, and Tomato's protagonists are relatively recognized by readers. Small opportunities can be grabbed, but big opportunities should not be grabbed. It is easy for readers to abandon books. I am also an old bookworm for 8 or almost 9 years. I hope you can refer to these suggestions.

Subscribed and asked your questions. First, the writing style is indeed a bit average. Second, the plot is quite good so far, and the system text should not be too broken. Thirdly, let's just brush off the emotional scenes, it's not interesting. Fourth, that poisonous woman Venina? When will you die? This is a poisonous point. The results are really bad. I saw that there were only dozens of students who were pursuing the exam at the end! Tip 5 yuan to support! 300,000 words, reward 50 fast. 500,000 words reward 50. 800,000 words reward 50. If the author can persist in reaching 1 million words, I will give you a big reward. If the author is a eunuch, I can only express regret. Don't be too young. I am 30 years old like you and my income is not high. As you said, just treat it as a favor to Hua Zi! From beginning to end, the author's views are indeed very correct! I like this very much. The plot concept is okay and you can watch it. The update is too slow! Too slow! Too slow! But when I see the author's profile... I understand. Finally, come on! Author!

Brother, if you don't know how to do emotional scenes, don't do pictures. It's really embarrassing 🤫🤫🤫

Author, you are really good, even if you make a green dragon, you also have a Tang Rat. It can be regarded as an enhanced version of Lin Lei's talent. After all, the protagonist is the mythical beast Qinglong. Tang Shu can use Beirut's resources for free, and his mentality is much stronger than Beibei's. In the future, his cultivation speed will be much faster than Beibei's.

It feels a bit messy. The world has too little plot in your main world and the dungeon is too long.

Since you don't want to seize Luo Feng's opportunity, why not just start from another planet?

What the hell is the Pope of Light "Hayens"? The original work is clearly called "Haytings" 😅

I don't know why, I just don't like books that have cheats and try to steal Luo Feng's chance!

Let's talk about it specifically! The protagonist will not take Luo Feng's opportunity! Up to now, Luo Hua and Luo Feng's parents have reached the level of God of War under the hug of the protagonist. Because Luo Feng is the protagonist's most important brother and friend!

Well, you are a diaosi who just traveled through time and space, and your parents have been changed, but your heart actually melts. . Hehe

Please sort out the priority, whether it is swallowing or coiling dragon. I have subscribed to all the chapters, but I can't stand half of them. Bad review.

Author, please read this: Regarding the issue of comprehension, every time the protagonist has something that he can't figure out, he adds a little bit of comprehension. This is true, but the way it feels is a bit wrong and seems unsatisfactory. Since sooner or later, he has to add more, why not add more at once? Is this possible, just for the sake of word count, or are you not even aware of the problem? It makes me sad to see this, and I wonder if anyone else feels the same way as me. To add a question, this is something I personally feel bad about, that is, there are too many things added. To a certain extent, soul and understanding can be treated as one thing, and there is also the need to absorb the law points of other people's cultivation places. I don't know how you will arrange it later. If the protagonist goes to Chaos City, won't he become rich in a wave? Almost every strong person from the human race in Chaos City has practiced there. If you follow your previous algorithm, the protagonist can reach the sky in one step! I don't know whether you will patch it later or increase the value of the law points. Anyway, this is not a good solution. The above is my humble opinion. It may be useful to you (the author), or it may be a bunch of nonsense. Since I wrote it in a hurry, there may be some problems in the expression. In short, I hope the author will take a look and at least take a look. Come on, I hope it will be better in the future.

Swallow the fan, say nothing and like it

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Has the author read the original work? There are many contradictions.

The routine is too old and bad, and people can't stand it.

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The writing is pretty good, but the dialogue feels weird. It seems a bit too colloquial. It doesn't read smoothly, and there are some problems with the paragraphing. I hope the author will write better and better, stick to the completion of the book, and have a beginning and an end.

These two worlds are too grand, and the writing is naturally less detailed and refreshing. The power system is so high that you can't grasp it at all. The original author also has no obvious divisions in the power system. For example, the Dou Master in Dou Po has Dou Qi armor, the Dou King has Dou Qi transformed wings, and Devouring means that the world master has a piece of land, and the immortal life span is almost infinite. The specific power gap is not mentioned. Let's practice in a world with a small power system.

When will we return to Panlong World?

I've finished reading Chapter 16. Why do you still need me to resubscribe?

Once the reward reaches 100 points, the boss will check it and use it. Friends who are in a book shortage can go and read another book on the theme of "Star Martial Age", which is about devouring the starry sky. It is also well written and I am also following it. It has a very devouring taste and is not a fanfiction.

Go to your place to advertise, "Douluo Zhizhi Shanhe", haha, shameless, welcome to come and criticize, I never delete comments, mainly because there are too few, both good and bad, haha There are many female protagonists, some are original and some are indigenous.