Tokyo Law Enforcement Officer

The content was good at the beginning, and the author downplayed the protagonist's desire for money. The content is interesting, the protagonist is positive, I identify with it highly, and the plot is fresh. But! ! ! ! I hope the author will stop using fancy names to make fun of people. What kind of washing machine? Who knows who you are talking about? Please write the plot, characters, etc. Clearly. I often encounter problems in your works that I can't understand (I haven't read some of them). Because the work itself is a hodgepodge, but not every reader of comics has read it, or they have read it but it has been too long and they have completely forgotten the plot. Therefore, the author is too simple in describing the characters. Sometimes he only gives a name, and sometimes he uses a flower name. Sakuragi Hanamichi is Sakuragi Hanamichi. Don't be mysterious, the devil knows who he is. The plot is the same, full of arrogance that I don't need to say, you should know (must read). Even readers who have read comics sometimes feel that this kind of inadequate description is abrupt or has no beginning or end. This is a common problem among many fan authors, who do not consider whether readers still remember the character or have read the work. For example, Banton in Chapter 91, who is this? Is it a human or a ghost? What does it look like? There is no introduction, no explanation, it is very abrupt, and it is inserted into the dialogue between the protagonists without beginning or end. There are many situations that the author thinks readers will understand.

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It looks very awkward. The main reason is probably that the supernatural power was introduced too early, and then in order to give the protagonist some self-protection, a treasure was given in exchange for power. This led to two very awkward points: 1. I was used to seeing treasures worth millions and tens of millions of order points at the beginning. Who else wants to see you solve a case and collect 100 order points while working for a group of happy people in your daily life. 2. Because of the treasure hanging at the beginning, you will see a very "interesting" scene. The protagonist has kaleidoscope eyes, the Senju and Uchiha's all-encompassing power, senjutsu chakra, dust release in the left hand, flying thunder god in the right hand, and a lot of messy ninjutsu and illusions. Even in the later stages of Naruto's battle power, he is considered a character. Then you can see such a person who can destroy the world, discussing very seriously how to deal with the black organization, and treating it as a formidable enemy. He even said euphemistically: There is no way to guard against thieves for a thousand days. They can't deal with me and target women. What to do with friends' families (I said your illusions are just decorations, right? Give Gin an illusion, Rum an illusion, Belmod an illusion, and give those messy real and fake wines an illusion. Is it really difficult to uproot the black organization?)

The author is Hokage Buki. I won't talk about a police system that can be exchanged for various extraordinary items and abilities. If you exchange a lot of things for Hokage when you know that there are ghosts and gods in this world, can chakra kill ghosts? This is not mentioned in the original work. Shouldn't normal people first find the ability to kill ghosts? Also, chakra is not easy to use in modern society. First of all, the movement is too great. Although Naruto is set as a ninja, all their ninjutsu are very noisy. Illusions and so on also interfere with chakra and are not clearly effective against ordinary people. To be honest, the ability of White Zetsu is easier to use. If you really want to change to extraordinary abilities, Shanari's Feng Jue would be a good choice. In a word, the Naruto system has its advantages, but it is really stupid to replace them all at once. There are also problems with the understanding of various abilities. The most difficult thing to accept is that it is obviously a police system but it is written as an exchange system.

It's outrageous, and it's not a harem story. As a result, the top management of a unit are all women. It doesn't matter if they are excellent, they are all passers-by, with no merit at all. 😂Let it go and you can't write nonsense The list is even more hilarious. There are more than 20 policemen and only Takagi is a male policeman😂 Takagi is still a well-connected person, forget it, the author can be happy with the writing, sooner or later the harem episode

I need fan points to speak, so I can only bear the pain of wasting my monthly ticket. I can only say that I can read it if I can, and run away as soon as possible. I saw a few more chapters introducing the redemption items and left first. Introducing the system to my girlfriend is a poison that I can't stand. I always feel like I share a system before I have fully explored it. The more I look at it, the more awkward it becomes, and I run away.

Ordinary skills are also ridiculously expensive, simply.

The title of the book "Tokyo Enforcers" starts with donations and extraordinary abilities. Without handling some ordinary cases in the early stage, there is no sense of substitution and foreshadowing, and it also wastes the opportunity to have a low number of words.

The author can be less politically correct. I know there are many minefields when writing about Ni Hongguo, but there is no need to stress that you have not forgotten your original intention. This is a joke. After all, the main character in the book is a police officer. As long as you don't write anything that crosses the line, it basically has nothing to do with politics. Isn't it good to just treat yourself as a character in Conan? I found that when it comes to traveling through the Neon Kingdom, it becomes a disadvantage. Basically, it's all about traveling to China.

If the protagonist wants to establish his own "Uesugi Group" in the Metropolitan Police Department, it is best to include these people under his command...

There are currently two issues. First, the daily life is too little and the span is too big. I only wrote two or three articles about Ke Xue's daily life and then jumped directly to the supernatural chapter. Most of the time, I was cheating or on the way to cheating, as if I was reading an instruction manual. Second, following the previous point, when there is too little daily content, new characters appear like a spurt. A new character is a different world view. Such treatment in the early stage of a new book will undoubtedly cause great reading difficulties for readers. It is recommended to keep it steady.

It's a weird feeling that I can't describe, well, it's weird.

The title of the book is Tokyo Law Enforcement. As a result, the case was dealt with in a few paragraphs. Even though I had the ability, I didn't slay the demons. I could not stop writing so many chapters about the office struggles. There was a flash of food spirits at the beginning, and not long after Naruto had acquired all his abilities, I thought he was getting excited, but in the end, he was quarreling with the team in the office next door after seventy chapters. Author, you might as well not add super powers and monsters, and write an urban novel honestly.

It's too poisonous. Only by participating in cases can there be order, and only by donating can there be order. You say it's order, but do you know what order is? It's better to call the police system a krypton gold system. I pressed too hard and found that I couldn't write it, so I added a few more worlds to forcibly improve the protagonist's strength. Then he shared the system with the team mode, which was hilarious. Why didn't he just say he was the main god? There is no outline, I just go here and there, and the result is nonsense. It's all about writing whatever comes to mind as soon as you're interested. The setting has not been set yet. A case has dozens of points, and a proficient in English requires a million points. According to what you wrote, is it the police system to maintain order? You just want the world to be in chaos. The more people die, the more cases you participate in, the happier you will be. After all, the more dead people there are and the more cases there are, the more order you can have, right? How many order points do you get for keeping the streets safe for a day?

I want to laugh when I see the Afraid Brewery Karasuma Ren. Your system is the police and you are a time traveler. Your system can exchange for things. You can be cowardly or stubborn but don't be afraid. As a police officer, you can find someone to do side work for you. The system can exchange for black technology, Gundam Starfighter Warhammer, etc. You can form a consortium. Physically, Saint Seiya VIII Dragon Ball Qi, Soul Zanker Blade, Kamen Rider, Ultraman Titan of Light and magic, the body is resistant to nuclear bombs, and the soul search is returned to the winery. I slapped Karasumaren in the face to give him face. I was so unhappy that I immediately ashes. I wanted to find him and directly search the memory from the soul brain below and control it, and cut off his offline bit by bit, just like a cat eating a mouse, starting from playing with it.

It is unwise to exchange for the Hokage system, a training system with a low upper limit, without a sacred tree and companions. The eye skills in the Hokage are not very powerful. If you have money, you can exchange for the copy eye. And the development of the priest system or the onmyoji system in the island country is much better than the ninja system that has never appeared before, and there are organizations involved in the system. The Wizard The Wizard took the route of Koizumi Anko and went to the West to develop. Onmyoji The priest takes the strategy route. (Killing Stone) The Chakra system is not a cultivation system, it does not cultivate the soul! The three great immortals are non-human races, so they are immortal. Even in the setting, the immortal chakra does not cultivate the soul. You can't survive soul decay, and the chakra system that combines spiritual power, physical power, and natural power is exclusive and cannot coexist with other systems. The witch clan is better than him and has many methods. They are proficient in yin and yang and the five elements. They are great witches, witch weapons, and ancestral witches.

Let's complain, 1. Didn't the protagonist kill a foreigner at the airport? Why did he later say that he had never killed anyone, so he was different from other time travellers? What kind of psychological process does it take to make up your mind after being frightened by a winery? 2. I thought that the protagonist exchanged his bloodline to practice magical chakra, a bunch of attack skills, a bunch of sealing skills, and a bunch of spiritual skills, which was very powerful, but he was still afraid of being attacked by mortal dark organizations. What should I say? I feel that Naruto is a bit out of character. Although the author said that the protagonist is afraid that his girlfriend will be in danger and his parents will be in danger (aren't his parents dead?), But this means that Naruto's extraordinary ability cannot protect ordinary people, and the protagonist's physical defense is also insufficient. Although the reflex nerve reaction speed is fast enough, it cannot be on alert in real time, so the physical defense ability needs to be exchanged, the danger sensing needs to be exchanged, and the ability to protect ordinary people such as amulets needs to be exchanged, just these small problems.

It must be cool, the title of the book can also be cashed out, the main focus is Conan, but if you come up with a few ninjutsu, it is already very poisonous, especially the ninjutsu in Naruto. You said that multi-world fusion is almost enough. The system only needs to provide some self-defense items to guard against supernatural ghosts. You also have to master the art of Thunder God, right?

Why, after writing so much, you haven't captured important criminals or fought against ghosts and monsters, but just come to the Fantasy Self-Defense Force?

It's rare for someone to write an arrest warrant. Although it's good for me, the plot keeps talking about how to cheat. The daily plot is not only pitiful but also boring. The characterization of the heroine Miyuki is also pitiful. She seems to be a dull tool. The cheating is to assist the plot, not the plot to assist how to cheat.

Although the world is stitched together, the writing style and plot are eye-catching. You can see between the lines that the author is very careful, and the plot logic is also carefully considered. There are four types of novel quality: good, medium, and poor. This novel is probably of good quality among good products. If you want to go further, you should probably strive for the unfolding of the plot: fascinating (it's so interesting to watch that you can't help but continue), ups and downs (the plot is brain-burning, or you can peel off layers of cocoons), lsp ecstasy (you can understand everything you know). There are three directions, choose one to make the novel the icing on the cake. For now, the intensity is okay, but the stimulation is lacking. 🙂

When the water was pressed, there were too many poison points, and the krypton gold exchange was unreasonable. I ordered Senju Uchiha constitution, Senjutsu Chakra, Eternal Kaleidoscope, and a bunch of S-level ninjutsu. I was almost scared to death when I touched gin.

The story has collapsed since we started looking for national treasures in the United States. I don't even want to talk about how big the so-called Ninja War is, or whether the level of Naruto's power system is that high, which brings the author and editor into a fight. Since you use US dollars as the value measure of system abilities, then compare this set of standards in the worldview. Since the world government you used is similar to reality, I will default to some data from the real world. There are more than 200 tons of gold in the Twilight Pavilion, and the 10% system identifies it as about 200 million US dollars. The gold converted into the national treasure is worth nearly 30 billion US dollars, which is nearly 3,000 tons of gold. The strength transformed by the system cannot be said to be superior to the others, it can also be said to be a man with his tail between his legs. So guess what 3,000 tons of gold is? Germany, the country with the second largest gold reserves in the world, only has 3,300 tons of gold reserves in its national treasury. In other words, emptying out all the gold reserves of a world power has just entered the supernatural world. This means that either your system resource conversion rate is so low that even calling it exploitative is beautifying its behavior; or the value of gold in this world is not that high. But if it's the latter, then it's impossible to apply the concept of parallel worlds to the economy of your worldview.

I read dozens of chapters in one go and am about to start reading again. Can the author give me some help? How about living in my basement?

I have only read Conan in the Japanese comics, but I will not read any novels that are "How I Was in Tokyo" or have Japanese elements. I am curious, do you enjoy reading this kind of book?

Even though he has extraordinary abilities, his mentality is still that of a mortal. When he saw the winery, he actually gave up. . . The foresight made you eat it back. Speechless

The logic of the writing is very messy. The author speaks for himself without considering the actual situation. The writing is mediocre. The key is that the plot logic cannot be self-consistent. As mentioned in the previous two chapters, the Metropolitan Police Department, as an administrative agency, cannot accept donations from individuals, especially serving police officers. Even if it is in the name of retired or disabled police officers, Japan has a multi-party parliamentary system, and accepting donations will be questioned by the parliament. Only graduates from prestigious universities are eligible to apply for Japan's Class I Civil Service Examination. The protagonist is not eligible if he attends a further training school. The protagonist sacrifices his family at the age of 16. If he wants to inherit two houses, he needs to pay a huge inheritance tax. The protagonist is just an ordinary person. At that time, Japan had an economic bubble and restricted foreign exchange exchange. US$200,000 was not a small amount in that era. Miyano Akemi robbed the bank for one billion yen, which is equivalent to about 10 million U. S. Dollars. The protagonist has to donate one billion yen a year to the Metropolitan Police Department... Let's not talk about the cost of acquiring the protagonist's treasure. The Japanese police need to disclose their income, and the source of the huge wealth is unknown. Just declaring tax deductions can kill the protagonist, not to mention the various forces in the comic world, and this is another high-profile work.

Makes me speechless. A close-up of how the protagonist strengthens their investment in superpowers without using them. The main plot is like no other, with a large number of cumbersome descriptions that fail to capture the focus of the story.

Multiple worldviews, combat power has collapsed to the extreme, and the strength system is in chaos

I saw the arrest warrant coming in.