Travel to Another World and Become the God of Thunder

Rating of this book: Highly recommended. 9.7 Points (out of ten) Advantages 1. As a subject of interstellar fantasy, this book is very novel in its topic selection. 2. The author and I are the same age. Also a minor. But his writing style is particularly good. Whether it is the logical ideas of the book, or the experiences, backgrounds, character traits, artifact skills, etc. Of the protagonist and various characters, they are all described very well. In this type of subject matter, he can be regarded as one of the best. 3. The most important thing is originality. A sixth-grade primary school student can construct such a huge story line in just one year. There is fineness within the roughness: the plot is described smoothly but without losing detail. It is no exaggeration to say that such writing style and ideas will not even be lost to some junior high school students and high school students. 4. The theme is classic but not cliched. As the saying goes, "establish the foundation and innovate", the author not only maintains the refreshing point of the novel, but also can greatly attract the attention of underage readers, which is very attractive. Although it is a bit refreshing, it is not a simple white text. There are a lot of foreshadowings and hidden lines in the article. Every character has his reason for appearing, and reading is as smooth as watching TV. There is no large jump in information. Even if you only read it occasionally, you can quickly fall in love with this book in a short period of time. 5. For the novelty of the setting. The setting of artifacts is relatively common in the online literature world, but the author has taken artifacts to a new level, dividing artifacts into different realms, different skills, and even different artifacts have spawned different families. For example, the Bright Family in the book uses the Light Cross Halberd as the representative artifact, which can make readers shine. Give suggestions 1. The protagonist's growth history is too shallow. Although I am only a novice author, I have read dozens of online articles. Menye's growth in the article is very simple. When I read it, I felt like I was gifted. I felt that the author could write more about the sufferings of the protagonist, such as the death of friends, the deprivation of artifacts, amnesia, entering a place of trial (such as the Fallen Ink Star in the starry sky or the ruins of ancient civilizations), etc. Such tribulations can more concretely and vividly reflect the protagonist's growth process. 2. There are too few family classifications in the book. The author can divide out some more families that mainly focus on artifacts, and writing about the games between such families is often more exciting.

Let's build a building here. I don't know how many people are watching "Thor", I just know that the collection score is very average~... If you like "Thor", please reply in the comment area. To express my sincerity, if I get 100 collections within one month, I will update ten times! One more thing to say, I have refined the first few chapters of Thor, which are the three golden chapters. You can read it again.

If I hadn't known that the author was really a primary school student, I would have thought that the comments were talking about advanced black people.

A fantasy novel written by a ten-year-old child. I recommend it to everyone to take a look at the fantasy world in the eyes of a child.

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Ah, the author writes so well. Highly recommended. The content is great!

Congratulations to the young writer for breaking the 100,000-word mark 🌹🌹🌹🎁🎁🎁

In fact, I am also a novice. I wrote four books, each costing tens of thousands, but I didn't sign a contract until I opened the fifth book. So I don't know much about the specific standards. I just read the Golden Three Chapters from the Internet. In addition, I learned some knowledge about talismans and read them for a while before I opened my book. In your case, maybe the three golden cards were not written well, and the features are not that outstanding. But the writing style is better than mine and the writing is smoother.

Thanks to book friend 0581 for your praise, I will continue to write.

Not bad, very well written, interstellar fantasy, and written by a primary school student👍👍👍

This novel can be called a fantasy fairy tale. The plot is simple, but sometimes wild and eclectic. The description is clear, but there are also occasional loopholes. Children like it. A new genre can be given: fantasy fairy tales.

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I've come back for a visit. After reading part of it, let's talk about my feelings. Classic fantasy writing style, unsystematic time traveler + seemingly ordinary but awesome opportunity in the body + guidance from an old man. This type of writing has been refined in the world of online literature, and the method is very mature. The author's setting and outline of this book are quite specific, but it is a pity that he has not signed a contract, so he has some immature suggestions. The editor usually focuses on the first three to five chapters. This part is a bit slow to write. There is no need to introduce so much before the Galaxy Emperor kills people. It would be better to leave the suspense and reveal it slowly later. Then the theme was not thrown out quickly enough. The theme of "Thor" was not seen in the previous chapters. The author's ideas and settings are outstanding, and his perseverance and mentality are also very good. I hope it will take off and rise to the top.

The second time I read it, I took a look and found it pretty good. These little mistakes may affect your performance. The first is that your paragraph assignment is a bit complicated. Punctuation marks and sentence segmentation are a bit messy. The second thing is that your current text does not look smooth on a mobile phone. Please don't underestimate this, most readers are now mobile readers. There is something wrong with your font layout and density. This needs to be changed. End a paragraph with a clear period to shorten it and make it less wordy. You can explain it clearly in three words, so don't describe it too much. Just leave the rest to the readers to figure out. Don't worry about not having enough words. As long as you have an outline, just write whatever you want. But you don't have an outline, and it feels like it's more troublesome to think about it when you write it. Then I suggest you establish a theme when writing each chapter. This theme often only requires a few words. What you write is what the protagonist of your picture mainly does? Which thing? There are usually 1 to 3 storylines on one page. As long as you can do this, there is basically no possibility of outage.

This is a work written by a student. It is a fantasy novel. Although the writing style is average, it seems to be quite interesting for people under the age of 18. It involves settings such as artifacts, gods, energy values, universes, etc. It also improves the world view. Let's see how a little person who travels through another world can be proud of the world! Become a world tyrant!

Is this what you learned from Jiuzi? The difference in writing styles is a bit big.

A treasure for a newbie, the writing is good and readable. It's a pity that the subject matter is a bit old. It would be better if it matches the current trend of the starting point. In my opinion, the debut works of some great masters may be of the same level.

Give it to the author as a favorite, thank you

The book friends are so awesome. In the blink of an eye, the collection has reached more than 140~

It is said that the comments are back to normal, I will give it a try

Support, support, the writing is very good, the writing style and ideas are very good

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I wish you a happy new year, good health and prosperity!

Good morning to Meng Da❤️