Original God Template in Dragon King

It is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away.

It is not suitable for you to create a female protagonist for this kind of fanfic. The beginning is not very attractive, and an inexplicable original character is introduced, which gives a bad impression to all parties. The writing style is a bit green. If it is to be right, I think it needs an overhaul. . . (Personal opinion, if you think what I said is wrong, ignore it.)

This start looks very strange. You have to rely on others to feed you. If you don't have anyone to help you, you will be hungry for nine times in three days. You will definitely be malnourished and have a sallow complexion. Even if you have a good foundation and no nutritional support, you will not look good. Take Tang Wulin for example. Although his family is poor, he has been good-looking since he was a child. This is because his adoptive parents at least did not treat him badly in terms of food and drink. Your mental strength will be very good in your two lives, but your physical fitness will not be supported by nutrition. No matter how hard you exercise, it is just empty talk. It cannot be good. You will be much worse than ordinary people of the same age.

Also, before Golden Finger came out, he was still full of the arrogance of a time traveler. Chapter 2: He still disdains others to talk nicely to him. When Wuhun awakens, he still refuses when being solicited by the Spirit Transferring Tower. He has no ability to judge the situation at all. Is this a person who entered society early and was poor in his previous life? I really want to watch it, but there are too many flaws.

How should I put it, the protagonist in this book is not indifferent but has no emotional intelligence at all. Not long after you awakened your martial spirit, you directly said that the other party at level 67 was not capable of teaching you? Couldn't you be a little more tactful? There is also a six-year-old child! Do you need to put pressure on the fire? Oh my god, this protagonist has the makings of a stallion. When I was malnourished, I added another ten pounds. (Kg?) Of training equipment. Author, the subject matter you choose can indeed bring you good traffic, but you really need to consider the readers' senses. Let me talk about the basic logic. Half a step to poisonous weed, confirmed.

Is this the way to beat up Tang 50 or to join in with Tang 50? If you are interested, please tell me no.

Author, several heroines. Who is the heroine? (Let's reveal the heroine first and then think about whether to watch it or not)

There will probably be templates for those Genshin Impact characters.

Although Dou San can bring some heat, the original heroine is too poisonous. . . You have to use resources to cultivate, and you have to do what you want. It feels like a drama... If the supporting role is good and the protagonist is good, it will be easy to create a drama...

Then I wish you success immediately

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To be honest, if you don't make a character card like yours, it's really hard to improve your reading index. I want to send you a fanart, but I can't even send it. It's too difficult.

I am speechless.

Brothers, I wrote a book myself. If you are interested, you can read it

Single heroine Xu Xiaoyan, the author, please

I was thinking about giving you a monthly pass, but it turned out that I didn't have a monthly pass at all, so I just gave a reward of 1,500. After all, it's not easy to find a fanfic that I like. The author must not be a eunuch.

Who are the heroines? Can the author tell me something?

I borrow the building to promote books, but I don't like to delete comments. "Legend of the Dragon King: My Name is Zhongli"

The soup is changed without changing the medicine. Compared with all kinds of Douluo colleagues, there is not much difference. Even flaws that should not be found can be found. There is nothing that makes people shine.

I feel that the theme of Genshen in Douluo is pretty good, but why are they all Douluo, Douluo, and Douluo? Isn't it difficult to write about Douluo?

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

How fast is this

Since the author said that Shrek students often go out for training, he also used the fact that Tang Wulin went to Star Luo in his second year as proof. Then why not say that Shrek students are often attacked outside? Tang Wulin encountered evil soul masters again and again when he went out... Wouldn't the Holy Spirit Church pay attention to the heroine, a genius with innate soul power?

This author is too good, and my writing is not good either.

Excluding Gu Yuena, it has two heroines and the main protagonist is Xu Xiaoyan; it incorporates some elements from the game