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Already fully ordered. I hope the author writes better and better.

How well written, monthly ticket support

I just read the first few chapters, and I still have quite a personal problem. It is recommended that the author show it to real friends before posting it. There are too few books of this type. I hope the author can write better and better. The following are only personal opinions and friendly discussions are welcome: ① Lack of foreshadowing. Water Margin does not just start with the plot of birth, the story should unfold bit by bit, the characters should appear one by one, and the readers should know who is who. Even if many of them are original characters, they cannot be just named, at least they must be briefly introduced with a certain description. There are a thousand Hamlets in the eyes of a thousand people, and each reader has a different impression of the same character. The description of the character is the process of the author unifying the impression on the readers. ② Flashback and narrative openings are not recommended for novices to use. If used well, they have limited advantages and disadvantages. On the other hand, this opening should be short and intense, creating a strong impact and a strong impression. The first few chapters of this book are not like this. It feels more like writing them in a normal way, and then abruptly putting the following paragraph directly at the front. ③Dialogue is not the only thing that drives the plot, description is also very important. I can feel that the author wanted to write a powerful movie, but without characterization, the dialogue alone would give people a very confusing feeling. A large amount of information in movies and television is conveyed through the characters' manners, performances, and movements and expressions. Novels do not have pictures to show these, so they need to be supported by descriptions, such as the tone of voice, demeanor, and movements. Even the role of a minor player is still needed. For example, simple descriptions of the role of the minor player such as "order the soldiers to come in" and "tell the adjutant beside you". ④Although most readers have read (part of) these original works, it is recommended that when writing, the default reader is at the level of "heard of but not read the original works". In this way, when describing the characters, it will not be too detailed and watery as if the readers do not know them, nor will they lack necessary descriptions as if they think that the readers know everyone.

It's very well written, and the storyline keeps getting mixed up. After reading more than ten or twenty chapters, I still don't understand the main plot. Promise me, I'll keep writing it well😅😅😅 to trick more people into trying the poison.

The author may have some doubts about why some books are not popular, but for a reader with nearly twenty years of experience in reading online articles, a problem can be seen after reading the first chapter. Readers in this era have too many online novels and they are uneven, so they will not have much patience for a less well-known online article author. Heart, if the first chapter of a book makes readers unhappy, many readers will basically pass it by. If you say you want to write about time travel, just write about time travel. At the beginning, it is pointed out that the protagonist and his wife were on the same plane that crashed before time travel. What are you doing, author? What are you trying to hint to the readers? What kind of foreshadowing is there in the first chapter? Is it superfluous? From my personal understanding, when reading time-travel novels, firstly, I don't like the idea of ​​setting up a strange heroine prematurely in the first chapter, and the protagonist wears whatever she wants. Readers hope that the protagonist has a new beginning, with less regrets and concerns. Secondly, if the protagonist after time-traveling fails to meet his wife in his previous life, the following terms will appear: regret, cuckold, concern, a strange novel with a strange author, author, why do you make readers produce these unpleasant terms? Because what you wrote later is very exciting? All in all, your book is probably defeated by the background setting of the protagonist in the first chapter. Simply put, it is superfluous.

Is anyone watching? Give me some advice, even though I might not listen?

Like this?

It looks good, but I personally don't like the integrated world. Personally, I like to watch it and travel through worlds one by one.

No wonder no one is watching it. The beginning is about finding a wife and directly creating a military company. Do you understand that people now like to watch it from scratch? There are dozens of group portraits at the beginning, and finally there is a bitch who sacrifices her life to save the people. You are the one who takes the lead in things that are not profitable. Haha, watch whoever you like.

Next time, don't let the pig's feet come up with a good background family background. You are writing Chinese Internet articles, not neon comic scripts. This is a points reduction item for feeding poison.

Gao Wen

The three golden chapters are written in detail, and various characters appear all at once. Have you ever thought that not everyone has seen it? It makes my head hurt.

If nothing else, I envy you who read the book yourself because you were unhappy with it 😁😁😁The most important thing is that you can code more than five million words, 🐂approval

He also specifically quit to take a look, entertainment? I just want to ask tmd which entertainment company are you from? What did you do for entertainment?

The writing is very fascinating. The plot makes my head spin. I can't figure out who is who. I am still learning addition, subtraction, multiplication and division. You actually stuffed me with a lot of college entrance examination papers. How do you want me to read it? Farewell

The first few chapters were so confusing. It was so confusing that I couldn't stand it anymore. Why don't you write it from scratch? With everything laid out at once, who can tell who is who? I can't stand it anymore, so I ran away.

I can read it, but it's very hard to watch... It's difficult to break in continuously. It's normal to break in occasionally, especially in the first few chapters. Even if you've played them all and read them all, you still have to look up the information and think about who it is if you want to recall them continuously… The reading experience is very poor, bro 😅

3 Million for a new book is outrageous

After reading more than ten chapters, I was confused. I even wondered if I hadn't read the beginning and missed dozens of chapters. The identity of the protagonist has not been revealed. Why the protagonist is so awesome compared to his subordinates is not mentioned. I don't know what the protagonist's purpose is. The protagonist seems to be very powerful, but there is no system. Why he is so powerful is not explained I don't know what the author wrote.

I have read nearly 100 chapters and I don't know what the author is writing. There is no main plot. He just wanders around the battlefield all day long to quell the riots?

I have been reading books for decades. Every time I read more than ten chapters of this book, I really can't stand it anymore. How confident was the author at that time that he could write the beginning of an article that summarizes the tactics of persuading people to quit 😅

No, why are you still serializing it? It's been a year and it's not finished yet?

Can't stand it. Where is the entertainment?

It's too strenuous to watch the plot, maybe I'm not the audience.

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