The Heavens Beginning with Sekiro

I couldn't stand it anymore, I gave up, I was bored to death, and I didn't bother to follow the latest chapters. I can only say that the original plot made me sleepy, and it didn't attract me at all. I'm sorry.

Brother, your protagonist's journey into other worlds has neither super-expanded nor changed any plot. Damn, deserve, live, succeed or fail, everything remains the same. What is the meaning of your protagonist's existence? Is there any problem if I delete it and watch the original work directly? Let's work harder on the next book

As long as you are strong enough, there won't be any problems with Ashina. In Sekiro, isn't it because Isshin is old and seriously ill, and Ichiro cannot carry Ashina, so there is a crisis of annihilation?

The last few chapters feel like there are really big flaws. The author doesn't have to be so blinded by lard when he wants to save Eri. Eri doesn't want to leave when she sees a man, and the protagonist forcefully stops her. I feel like this is not Eri. It's meaningless for the author to force a match like this. It's just another person carrying Eri's name.

I just watched The Holy Grail War, and I have to complain that the author has written too many original plots that have little to do with the protagonist. I can just brush these things off. Because we are here to see the protagonist, not a replay of the original work, which will greatly affect the reader's perception. At the beginning of a new book, the most taboo thing is that the protagonist disappears for a few chapters and is not seen. It is necessary to combine the details and the key points.

It's just a self-pleasure work. No, I might not be able to get high even if I'm self-pleasure Pure water plot. The character portrayal is very average and the plot description is very stiff.

Water plot, small changes. Two or three chapters have no protagonist.

Except for the writing style, everything else is not good. The setting is very different. Is the protagonist a time traveler or an experienced player? All you can do is chop, chop, chop? Sekiro is like a running account, he can't stop peeing, and the golden finger settings are not good enough. Your game data panel has no sense of existence at all. You also set the protagonist to kill too many people and incarnate as Shura, directly poisoning.

I vomited in Torch City. It's so boring that I paid for it. Just show me this.

I'm not saying that, the writing is not long and the content is not attractive enough. Besides, traveling through the world is still a Japanese style. Except for those who have watched the corresponding anime, others have no idea what you are writing and have no idea about the content.

Pay money to read anecdotes, but also write about the world of niche people? 6

I could have watched it, but the system's self-intelligence and Shenlong are too poisonous.

He said he wanted to cover it with fire, but he still holds the knife.

Ashina Yu, isn't this a strange name? You've made a lot of sense of the novel's plot, so why don't you call it Ashina Soichiro? This is like his younger brother's name.

Why write so many original scenes from Holy Grail in such detail? Does it reflect how stupid and crazy the characters and plots here are?

The beginning is okay, but there are so many original plots in Xingyue that I have watched it to death. I wish that all four chapters were the original plot, and the pig's feet didn't even appear. What else could it be called a fanfic?

To be honest, it doesn't look good, which doesn't mean it's ugly (to be precise, I didn't see what I wanted to see, it didn't have any highlights, and I didn't have the desire to keep watching) I feel like the author didn't want to change the plot, or why the protagonist was wearing something but it seemed like he wasn't wearing it, so it didn't have much effect. It's as if the protagonist is either a time traveler or simply a native with a golden finger. Especially for the dungeon, I was really looking forward to the plot of Fate. As a result, the plot has not changed much (not that it has not changed, but that it has changed as if it has not changed) and the original plot has not been used at all. My evaluation is that it is better not to write it. Various fan fiction has already written the original plot to pieces. How can you attract readers if you don't do some extra work to attract readers? Are you afraid that changing the original plot will make it difficult to write? The result is that it just slowly rots away. Can you use more imagination? Don't blame me for putting this aside. It's actually because I had great expectations and faced huge disappointment when watching the results. I used this to vent the discomfort caused by the sense of disparity. The subject matter is good but the plot...(=′ー`)

You have to jump to read it, there are too many original plots, and the protagonist's appearance rate in some chapters is zero

Sure enough, not many of the Fate series are well-written. From the beginning of Fatezero, the plot is very weak. The battle with the spearmen is almost brushed off, but the emphasis is on describing the perspective of passers-by. There is also a large section of the original story that is still very poorly described. Can it be focused a little more? 😅😅😅

I've read a hundred chapters! The protagonist has not even formed his own power system! There weren't even any signs! After all, he is a food-hungry protagonist. How much can he eat without digesting it? Or did two or three hundred chapters suddenly form its own system? Or does it take two to three hundred chapters to start digesting it?

... Although I saved Ashina... But the Tang Dynasty, Torch City, and Swordsman are a bit weird...

It's too confusing and complicated. I'll leave after reading a few chapters.