The Supreme Controller Who Devours the Starry Sky

Here are some thoughts: 1. If a mentalist comes by casually, it is easy to control your mind. However, if you vomit blood, you will feel the price has dropped. 2. In the low realm of the human race in the universe, the most important thing is actually resources. To put it bluntly, it is money. If the protagonist wants to cultivate talents, he must purchase a large amount of resources. 3. It is written in the style of a martial arts novel, which is fresh, but don't forget the background of the universe. 4. The understanding of the law is shared, there is no separate understanding, just like memory. If these are separated, then we are not the same person. In the same way, the Kingdom of God is also unique. 5. Without the golden-horned behemoth and the protagonist's halo, even Babata can only guarantee that he will enter the stellar level in fifty years and the cosmic level in five hundred years. That Grandmaster Leng's qualifications based on a secret technique are average. It would be good if he could reach the ninth level in two to three hundred years and enter the stellar level in another two to three hundred years.

The appearance of the Realm Lord is too unreasonable. Tens of millions of years have passed and we are just waiting for the protagonist to appear and die? And judging from the death rate of more than 95% on the battlefield outside the territory, the people who devour the world are basically not afraid of death. It is a bit ridiculous to surrender to the enemy after they have cultivated to the point where the world lord can't beat them.

Laws and gods can be received independently. The derivative body can completely take the image of an earthling, relying on strong mental power to hypnotize it, making it look like a golden-eyed person in the eyes of golden-eyed people, and a blue-blooded person in the eyes of blue-blooded people. This is more conducive to the development of local forces and has a strong character.

There is something wrong with a person who is almost immortal at the peak of his realm and builds a knight island on a small planet to practice martial arts and cultivate himself! Looking for a qualified apprentice, I don't believe you can't find one if you scan the entire planet with your consciousness!

In fact, the idea of ​​​​starting is still okay, but your starting point is that the world master is equivalent to the immortal fighting tree, but the story development is completely out of character. To the protagonist, if you are lower than the world master, you are an ant, and you are not of the same race, and you will not even look at it.

The writing is quite good, but Swallowing the Stars is a fantasy and sci-fi novel, and you put it in a martial arts style, and the quality suddenly dropped.

The Knight Island is placed in the world of Devouring Starry Sky. I am speechless. Goodbye to the author.

A real world master with immortal combat power and a domain master in his clones is actually called a planet-level "planet-level powerhouse"! I still need a "visit", I'm really speechless! Shouldn't a Domain Lord be able to cover the entire planet with just one thought? It stands to reason that for the protagonist's level, wouldn't it be enough to just forcibly detain all the planet-level ones? Isn't it too low to visit one by one?

If you select some disciples, you can definitely make waves. Why do we need to engage in this kind of martial arts style hydrology? First, the whole world is armed, and then the cosmic-level powerhouse suppresses the whole world, and then every ten years there is a poison-raising style deletion. The rest are all good talents, luck, and perseverance. Isn't this delicious? Look at what the hell you wrote. Thirty years of salty fish, thirty chapters of pretentiousness and slap in the face, nothing accomplished.

The background of the star-devouring sky is written in the shape of a bird🐤. Is this a martial arts film?

It's not necessary. A person at the level of the original ancestor will pay attention to you, a small realm master? Besides, you yourself have traveled through time to seize the body. Seizing the body does not mean that you are no longer human. Otherwise, Luo Feng in the original work would have been killed by the Chaos City Lord when he went to the original universe!

Do you still need to take action to reach the planet level with pig's feet that are comparable to immortality? Pretending for the sake of showing off. Immortality itself has the suppression of the life level, and those at the planet level probably don't even have the guts to take a look.

Repeatedly reminding the Devouring fandom not to go beyond 2 major levels, I think it is cool, but in fact the extremes will turn readers away The Domain Lord can move up to 10,000 kilometers per second The Lord of the Universe can move 100 times the speed of light The True God can reach a million times the speed of light Do you think the True God of Void is faster than the Lord of the Universe Some Devouring The fan author writes a self-deprecating article, if you don't want to be the same, don't do it Picture 1-2 The master of the universe kills the true God of the Void Picture 3-6 The master of the domain kills the immortal in a second Picture 7-10 The master of the domain kills the venerable and threatens to die if the true god comes over

There are a lot of bugs in your book. If you change it, you have to make a big change. If you don't change it, not many people will read it. People who read the original book will even have a headache.

The starting point is too high, the quality is too low, and the style of painting is wrong, dooming the eunuch. Have I summed it up properly?

You might as well write martial arts novels

The eunuch controller who swallows the stars

The setting is good, but the author's writing is not strong enough. The protagonist and supporting characters have low IQs. They are afraid that others will not know that there is a special plant life here. Even if the soul slave is killed, he still has to tell others the reason. Aren't you afraid that it will be spread through the virtual universe? If I had the skills to speak, I would have already spread the word about the special plant life.

Speechless. What kind of fantasy novel should I write about Swallowing Starry Sky System?

I would like to ask, isn't it true that one person in the original work is immortal, and all the clones are also immortal?