Journey to the West: Teaching Tang Monk the Great Power of Tianlong at the Beginning

Of course, I won't stop you from writing about Jin Chanzi, but there is a problem with your timeline. If Jin Chanzi was reincarnated into Chen Zhuangyuan's family, it would be his last life 500 years later. If you want to write about the last time, then you can't write about Ao Lie, the Holy Infant King. Characters, first of all, Ao Lie, he just cut off the three flowers on the top on the Dragon Slaying Platform, he did not die, he was demoted to Ying Ku Splash, the Holy Infant King, he was born when Sun Wukong first turned over the Bagua furnace, the three-flavored true fire is not an innate magical power, it is acquired.

I haven't read it, but the introduction is interesting. The number of words is too few, young people need to write more! A house loan, a car loan, a wife, a child, a daughter, and retirement money.

Refresh the Novice Village dungeon with Tang Monk at full level

The only highlight of the book is the setting of Journey to the West Academy, but other... The most basic timeline has been changed beyond recognition. Not to mention that a mortal butcher with many years of experience in slaughtering cattle can actually create a master of gods and demons, let me ask you, the cows in the world of Journey to the West actually reach adulthood at the age of 3? Red Boy is tall and strong at the age of one and has a body full of gada meat? The Bull Demon King actually celebrated his 8,000th birthday? Isn't this insulting? Wait, wait, wait, etc., If you throw away the background of Journey to the West, it may be much better than now. However, have you watched "Journey to the West"? No matter what version?

It does work, it feels a little bit strong, but the impact is not big.

It does not conform to the normal journey to the west and is illogical. The protagonist did not specifically search for it, and then all the important characters in the journey to the west turned into ghosts, so you accepted it in advance? Coincidence or not, you say?

The Golden Finger is not very powerful. Jin Chanzi is given random exercises at the beginning, and the subsequent disciples have no skills at the beginning. The protagonist has no special skills, so he just teaches the disciples some cultural knowledge and gives ideas. I feel that this Golden Finger is a bit low.

Did the red boy come after Tang Monk was born? Wrong time

Jade Faced Fox

It's well written, nothing sinister. Come on!

It's so bald

When writing a fanfic, don't make random changes. If you want to make major changes, just write one yourself! Even the timeline is so messed up.

Fahai was born a little early

I typed a lot and deleted it, but I still want to make a small suggestion. The disciples should not jump too much when the protagonist has not yet competed with the big guys like Tathagata Guanyin. The Three Realms are all within the sight of those big guys. Moreover, the disciples are important figures in Journey to the West and are the focus of observation. If there are too many variables, they will be nipped in the bud.

. . . . The soul also has a golden bone. Dog head. Jpg

What kind of version is this about the Eight Thousandth Birthday of the Bull Demon King? The prehistoric novel is looking for death by writing it like this.

The introduction is very graphic, you have to read it just for this reason

Completed three novels with 350,000 words

I just want to ask, does the protagonist have a physical body or is he a ghost? Even if it's a yin error, it doesn't have a physical body? Day by day, my blood is surging and my muscles and bones are getting stronger. Where is the dream? You can hardly say that the soul is strong. Qi and blood? Muscles? Soul blood? Soul bone? How about a hundred thousand year soul ring?

The author is so awesome. Completed 3 books with 350,000 words.