Survival Starts with Red Dead Redemption 2

Toxic article Things like hypnosis suddenly appeared out of nowhere. It's really poisonous that kills people. Brother, you might as well go out and meet Wolverine, and fight Thanos in the end. Realistic article, you can do it for me. Magic-like hypnosis suddenly appears, and acupoints are a hundred times more reliable. You can smell the poison from 800 meters away. You are still feeding poison here. Shennong is dead. Abandon the book in Chapter 40. I suggest you run away when you see this comment.

I read 40 chapters in one go. I wanted to see what it would be like to write "poisonous" in the introduction, but the result... That's it? (Mobile phone of the old man on the subway. Jpg) I don't know whether my next words will encourage the author or depress the author. Anyway, I will just say this and you will just listen to it (there are spoilers below, read with caution): From Chapter 1 After reading Chapter 1 and Chapter 40, I once again deeply realized the huge difference between my "poisonous points" and the vast majority of starting people - let's put it this way, the places where you, the author, have been criticized the most are precisely the places where I personally think the concept is clever and the characters are well created. First of all, the description of several dreams. I don't know if readers have degenerated over the years to the point where they have to say "this is a dream" before they can tell that it is a dream. At least as far as my own reading experience is concerned, the description of these dreams shows the protagonist's past very well, and the subsequent plot that echoes this and reveals that the protagonist and Dai Ping'an exchange identities is also really subtle. I like it very much. Secondly, there is the revenge action around Chapter 24. Many people say that the protagonist is too reckless, has no precise plan, and lacks a cool head. I can't say that what they said is wrong. I can only say that I express my love for this type of protagonist on my own behalf, because I think this is a living person with troubles, anger, sadness, and impulses, rather than a writing tool that can make the optimal solution in any situation, maximize benefits, and will never make irrational choices. And, the following blessings are given to those who see these blessings: "May you never encounter anything that makes you anxious, grief-stricken, angry, or emotionally out of control in this life; may you be able to spend this life smoothly; may you There won't be any unbearable accidents in our lives; I hope you can always keep a cool head, always make rational choices, and always be able to achieve the expected goals. Amen🙏" - Really, this is my sincere blessing, and there is absolutely no weirdness. Finally, there is Chapter 40, which the author himself admits is "extremely poisonous". My opinion has been stated at the beginning. As a person who can watch the movie "The Master of Hypnotism" with great interest, in fact, in Chapter 39, I roughly guessed what kind of explanations the author might give. The final result made me a little disappointed. It was not my favorite type-superpowers, or something similar. It's fascinating to think about the appearance of such strange abilities in the world of Red Dead Redemption, but I respect the author's work, and I think this explanation is pretty good. Overall, I am very satisfied with the first 40 chapters. The daily guides are sometimes quite reliable (´-ω-`). But, finally, the but, the author must pay attention to this but: I deeply know that my personal reading habits and reading tastes are quite different from those of the general public -Yes, I actually like the literary youth, In their words, it is a novel that "abuses the protagonist" (although I personally don't think that this level can be considered a abuse of the protagonist, not even a literary youth) - Therefore, the book you wrote has been "favored" by me, is it a kind of luck or misfortune? 😏 Finally, I still want to advise the author. As a pure newcomer, if you can make the protagonist smooth sailing, don't let him suffer setbacks - no matter how strict your logic is, under the secret method of "picking bones in the eggs" of the majority of netizens, all the setbacks you write will become avoidable plots of literary youth abuse - and you don't have the protection of great fans. , So your book friend circle will soon be filled with posts such as "extremely poisonous", "retreating from pitfalls", "reducing wisdom", and then... In short, the best way to avoid the above problems is not to write about setbacks, and then make up a smooth sailing story with as much logic as possible - although you may lose me this way, you are more likely to gain many more readers than me, gentlemen, and that's all money! 😎 （Wow, I wrote so much⊙▽⊙）

I died in Chapter 40. I was a bit messy at the beginning, but I was really just writing in random at the back. The original plot was too long. That Mayor Valentine, that hypnosis... Ugh, it slipped away.

Please explain why it wasn't John. John was injured in Plow Village. How could there be any medicine as everyone was in short supply of medical treatment and didn't even have food? The pastor got high after he came to Valentine. By that time, John was almost recovered and there was no need to take medicine, so he was not John. How about this explanation? Does it make sense?

I just read some, and I don't know how the author wanted to write Dutch. Generally speaking, Dutch was a good leader in the early stage, but he gradually became crazy after Hosea died. This is probably the view of most people, including me. But the last mission before Arthur's death overturned all this. Arthur would send the black girl and Abigail away before going to the camp to confront him, and Abigail would give Arthur a key and tell him one thing, that Dutch had deceived them. In fact, the money was enough, but the specific amount was unclear. Abigail took a look before stealing the key. The money was enough for them to go to the so-called Tahiti to start a new life. In other words, they could have washed their hands in a golden basin a long time ago, but Dutch hid the money and no one knew it, including Hosea and Arthur. Because the two of them had always hoped to escape from this outlaw life after they had enough money, but Dutch didn't want to do that. So every time he said that one more last grab would be enough, and one last big grab would be enough, but in fact the money was already enough. In this case, even if the people in the gang are very loyal, they cannot gain the trust of Dutch, because they and Dutch already have ideological differences. Arthur and others are tired of the life of outlaws. The reason why they robbed everywhere is to prepare for the golden basin to wash their hands. But Darcy is different. He probably really enjoys this feeling of causing trouble, so in the gang, only Daka and Dachi are of the same mind. So even Arthur and John had already seen that there was something wrong with Macca, but Dutch didn't care. And Arthur witnessed all this. At first, he always lamented that Dutch had changed. Until the end of the plot, Arthur finally saw Dutch clearly. "Maybe Dutch has never changed, he just gradually exposed his true nature."

I just saw the author said that there is no outline. I am actually quite worried. I started reading novels when I was 13 and am now 32. I have been reading for almost 20 years. I have written some things. Of course, I have thrown myself into the dust. But the secrets of winners may not be copied, but the lessons of losers will always have some effect. I make a small suggestion. If you offend, I hope Haihan I suggest that the author must have an outline. For example, if the author is compared to Dutch, the outline will be your Hosea. I know very well how many fantastic ideas a novice will have in his mind while sitting, but if they are not curbed, it will only make this book become the Van der Linde Gang A detailed outline will keep you on the right path. Even the outline of each character and the change of ideas at each stage must be prepared in advance In fact, there is still a lot to say, but let's forget it after thinking about it. The greatest joy of writing a novel is actually the pleasure of creating a world with my own hands. When I write, I hate my wife giving advice next to me. Big Trouble The last request is Arthur Lenny, Hosea must be saved Micah must die! ! ! !

Your opening was so fun that I skipped the snowy mountain chapter.      13，，，，80%， There is also a new idea of ​​starting from Tumbleweed Town in the west and becoming a tycoon. I don't know how you wrote your outline. Well, I hope you can take into account more easter eggs, branch plots and other things. It would be great if you break away from the main plot and re-write a new story according to your own ideas. Ghost trains, UFOs, Indians, witch potions, the Chinese who built railways, Java, the Grim Reaper, giants, and so many more. It would be great if it can be developed all the way to the point where gangsters transform into evil capital companies, and cowboys with horses, guns, and freedom are free and unrestrained. I have always wanted to see this aspect of the plot. Everyone is stable and no one died, except Micah. Dutch is not half crazy, and he can continue to dream of being a cowboy with everyone. Be a business tycoon, be a cowboy, be a gangster, live a chic western life, and develop your power step by step. On the one hand, they occupy American capital and even become the number one predator company. On the other hand, the gang owners hold parties and go out for adventures together. We can establish many villain gangs and villain companies. In the end, they even directly replaced Detective Pinkson, and Arthur and his gang became the FBI. Anyway, it is an imaginary world and does not involve reality. And so many colorful eggs show that there are many mysteries in this world. I can't say enough, it's really great.

This book feels a bit hazy, and the fandom is too serious. The author also likes to write flashbacks. He writes what he did first and then why. As a casual reader who does not know the plot of the game, many plots will be confused. For example, the chapter where the protagonist delivers medicine to the Indians. As a player who has played the game, I was confused when I saw the howling of wolves and so on. I only understood it after it was explained later. There is also the man under the Rhodes gun shop, which is even more inexplicable to passers-by. As a player, I know that the owner of the gun shop became crazy because he accidentally killed his son, but passers-by readers don't know, and they will only think that the protagonist somehow saved someone, including the most basic food and drink to restore health. Passer-by readers don't know this setting, and the protagonist's special abilities are not mentioned in the front, so they just eat Heise's injuries. If the author wants to achieve better results, he must pay attention to this. The reader base of casual readers is larger than that of fans. Especially judging from the title of the book, this is a multi-world novel. Fans of Red Dead Redemption may not have played or read the next world, and they will still be confused about it. There is another point that I find inexplicable, which is the identity of the protagonist, soul travel or rebirth? What does the dream mean? I like the sense of immersion when reading novels, but it's hard to be immersed in it if you don't even know the identity of the protagonist.

How should I put it, a good story about survival in another world, but it is extremely poisonous because of your own imagination. You just honestly promoted the story of the big prostitute. At most, you can say that you have no innovation, but first you reflected the low status of Chinese people in the United States, and then you used the unrealistic skill of hypnosis. What is this called? Do it to death. Eighty percent of the time it is because the author has looked up too much information and wants to reflect too much, and the result is a failure. Being able to do one thing well is already very good. Why not just write an enjoyable article? From my point of view, this book will not last long.

I think it's well written, but I don't know what the protagonist's obsession is, and I can't understand the motivations of some of his actions. As for time travellers, there are some who make up for their regrets, some who are just a salty fish, some who seek to survive, some who go against the will of heaven and change their lives, and some who get rich and pick up girls. What does the protagonist want to do? He must want revenge, but to whom? Is it the person who bullied him, this unfair society? There are also game plots and character settings that you game players tacitly understand, leaving casual readers confused.

It's always a damn oppressive feeling! Can't you beat him to death? Gotta wait for him to jump! The plot is inexplicable! It's like the whole world is targeting the protagonist! Are you disgusted? ! !

It's a pity that a novel with such good writing and plot concept has been stopped...

I only read about ten chapters and gave up. The author's strange literary writing method is incomprehensible, and he likes flashbacks. He doesn't explain how the protagonist traveled through time, what abilities he has, and he doesn't know his purpose in Red Dead Redemption. In one chapter, I remember taking Lanny out, and then Lanny was frightened. The whole process was incomprehensible, and where did he go? There is a description of the mysterious howling of a wolf, which frightens Lanni, and then returns to the camp. It is said that Lanny was frightened, but the protagonist did not want to explain and was too lazy to explain. As for the way the Riddler is written, why don't you explain that we're just watching a ball?

The struggle between the Chinese slaves sent to the United States by the Qing Dynasty and the colonists was a line that I did not expect. It's a bit surprising. I didn't expect the author to slowly lay out this line in the plot of the eldest cousin. It's just that the layout seems a bit too big and the author can't grasp it.

Today I was surprised to receive an invitation from the editor! ! ! I will continue to work hard! ! ! This novel doesn't have an outline yet, just a few ideas. If you have any good ideas, suggestions and comments, you can leave a message. Thank you all.

The writing style is good, but not cool enough. After reading more than a dozen chapters, I felt like I was about to torture the main character. The protagonist doesn't have to deal with the Van der Linde gang at all in the beginning. Since he has so much foresight and wealth, he can completely recuperate on his own, make his own wealth, then bribe officials and infiltrate the police chief, and then collude with gangs to take advantage of both inside and outside, and at the same time cultivate a group of gangs himself. Next, start a company and take the business to Saint-Denis. In this way, a stable triangular structure of officials, bandits and merchants was constructed.

This book deserves its poor performance, because the author wrote about the sissy protagonist, who would like to read it! Why do you have to rely on your enemies when you meet them? Just torture him to death and he will live!

The entire novel is logically confusing and incomprehensible!

I was a little confused when I first read it, but the more I read it, the more interesting it became. The protagonist's mental journey is written very delicately. From the beginning, he was a little conservative and muddle along, but later he became steady and ruthless. Underneath his calm face, there was a ferocity carved into his bones by reality. The writing became more and more flavorful, and it was completely different from other novels of the same type. It was very good, and it was well written.

Tell the truth. . The writing is very good. I just don't have a clear mind. .

I don't know why I feel so depressed watching it, my personal opinion

After persisting until forty-one chapters, the author's condition worsened and he gave up.