Dark Light Chaser

The main plot is too long, there are too many group scenes, the writing is very good, but the main character has been missing for too long. Internet writing is about a sense of immersion. When the protagonist disappears, the audience's sense of immersion will be reduced. It's not that the writing is bad, I just hope that the protagonist will appear more and participate more. There are too many group scenes, which was difficult to accept at the beginning. The general environment is like this, and it is difficult for you to change it. If you can, I hope you can slightly adjust the plot distribution. Your second chapter is said to allow the protagonist to adjust psychologically, but what the audience sees more is the plot and psychological activities of other characters. Moreover, you also used a double for the protagonist, whose name didn't match up, and you didn't tell the audience from the beginning that he was the protagonist. It's a bit thankless, to be honest. You have tasted the consequences of this yourself. You should want to make everyone flesh and blood, so that each character's behavior has its own internal logic. The problem is, you have to consider cost-effectiveness. You have spent so much writing on the characters in this chapter, how many will appear in subsequent chapters. You have to do the math in your own mind. The online literary world is different and you can't bear to spend an entire article laying the groundwork. In an environment where the protagonist will scold you for disappearing for a chapter, but you have laid so much groundwork, aren't you throwing your flattery at the blind man?

To be honest, in my opinion, this book does not look like an "online article", but has a stronger physical book feel Group portrait description, long foreshadowing, and fragments that are not disconnected from each other are very well written and very to my liking I hope the author will never be a eunuch and write more

Overall, it is considered to be on the average passing line, and it also has some bright spots of its own. But when I got to high school, I felt that there was too much content about campus, youth, and daily life, and it was not like Hidden Kill, which can better combine daily life with the so-called "refreshing" or "watching points". In other words, the plots of a lot of youth love campus plots are not interesting enough. The online literature industry has been there for so many years, and there are a lot of them that do not have the advantages of love light novels and are not written to the level of interest. It just cannot make the innocent little C man look like his aunt laughs, but cannot make his LSP full of blood. To put it slightly exaggerated, this kind of plot is not as attractive as the bloody TV series at 8 o'clock in the evening in the early years. At least the bloody TV series can make most people want to watch it while scolding it. However, this part of the plot of youth campus love does not leave any impression after watching it. To be specific, the writing of the two female classmates is too thin. If you want to use the characters to write a love story without plot or story, wouldn't it be the same as falling in love with an inflatable doll? As a reader, I am not telling you how to write, I am just giving feedback. Whether the author listens to some reasonable feedback or dares to dare next time, which one is better, will be judged by the score of the book

It's really well written🤭

When I saw this title, I didn't want to read it, but after thinking about it, there were a lot of books with not-so-good titles but good ones, so I decided to give it a try and then I found a treasure. It's very impressive, and I've already rewarded 5,000, and I plan to reward it once a week (mainly because I'm afraid of eunuchs, and there are too few books that resonate with my taste).

It's very good, but I think it's too bland. There are a lot of foreshadowings that I really like. It's very tempting, but I can't keep reading. I rarely write reviews, but this is one of the books that I feel is particularly good in the past five years. Maybe I have read less books or I am not good at reading, so I say this, but author, I personally feel that this book is really great! ! ! ! I hope the author will work hard💪💪💪

It's pretty good. I've been reading for three or four years, and I've read a lot of books. But this book really appealed to me, not only did the characters have distinct personalities, but the plot was also very rich.

The monthly vote has been cast to support the author. I don't understand why the data is so bad. I read all the chapters in three days. I can't say it's particularly amazing, and it didn't give me a particularly shocking feeling. But it can also be said to be very beautiful. The main author's logic is clear, and the uncomfortable parts are usually foreshadowing. For me, the foreshadowing was taken back within three days, which is completely acceptable. The same goes for the love part. Although it is not comparable to the love masterpiece, it can be said to be outstanding and not surprising at all. The books written by some people have very interesting plots, but the female characters are all the same. If you didn't read who said it, you would think that one person's books are really too many. All in all, it is excellent in all aspects, but the pace is relatively slow, which may not suit those who are impatient. Personally highly recommend. ps: Although I haven't followed up on updates, I heard that the author updates once a day. I personally feel that the author works very hard, and I hope everyone can understand the author. Okay, it's been a long time since the last update. Author, I advise you not to be ignorant and update quickly. No one in the production team will be lazy

I don't know if it will be completed in my lifetime

I want to know how many people are reading this book. If you are not busy, you can check in here. If you have any opinions and suggestions on the plot, you can also put forward (cross out), thank you (if you see something unreasonable, asking is just foreshadowing, I write too slowly)

Authors should stop asking readers for their opinions all the time. What you write is really good. Don't make the plot simple and cliched just because of some readers' opinions! You can also say it directly like the book "Chief Inspector": If you think a plot is wrong or poisonous, it must be foreshadowing. 🐶Please don't give any spoilers, we readers can just discuss the plot ourselves.

Now that I have read Chapter 16, I have a lot of emotions. The writing style is very good, I admire it very much. In particular, the description of Wang Zi's psychology and actions when he was alone at home and thinking anxiously was very accurate and expressive. I could immediately imagine Wang Zi's anxiety, and then I could really feel Wang Zi's anxiety. Your words are very expressive. It is rare for me to see any online author portray the characters' images and emotions so vividly and expressively. This is really amazing. To be honest, some of the novels before yours on the monthly popular list just took advantage of the popularity of the fans, and their actual literary quality was very average. As for the plot, I saw some people talking about water, and I felt that some of the supporting characters were described as water. I feel that these people have not calmed down to look at it seriously and appreciate it. A good-looking novel cannot just follow the protagonist and have fun and be done with it. The upper limit is too low. I think a good novel must have a very complete and vivid world. With the plot line as the backbone, it acts as a stabilizing needle, and with logic as the skeleton, it supports the whole world. Then, through complex exchanges between various characters, a variety of plots, emotions, concepts, etc. Are born to enrich the world. To be honest, I have always felt that many people's positioning of the heroine is rather one-sided. Simply put, the one who has a male-female relationship with the male protagonist and has a higher appearance rate is the female protagonist. I don't think so. I think the heroine not only has the most roles, but also has the deepest connection with the protagonist and the greatest impact. It has nothing to do with the relationship between men and women. As for the protagonist's mentality, many people, after bringing their own three views into the protagonist's position, gave the author suggestions, thinking that the protagonist should be stronger, more mature, more positive, and should not be like in the book. How should I put it? It is your own three views, or to be more precise, it is your feeling after reading it. It is your feedback after you put yourself into the protagonist's position and immersed yourself in the world of the novel. I don't think this can be taken as advice, but it can be used for discussion. After I put myself in the protagonist's shoes, I gained a strong resonance. Because I am the same. If I suddenly gained powerful power like the protagonist, I would be confused and would not use my abilities immediately and frequently. Instead, I will seriously think about what my abilities can do, what I can bring to society and the world, and once again think about my position and the possible consequences of various actions. Different people get different answers in the same protagonist's position and the same novel world. I think this is the charm of good novels. Just like there are a thousand Hamlets for a thousand people. As for the character's personality, behavior, etc., As long as they are logical. I think the protagonist's mentality is logical. I have come across people in a family environment similar to that of the protagonist, and they are really cold towards interpersonal relationships. Maybe they have never felt the warmth brought by emotions. But it's hard for me to empathize with it because my family is quite happy. Moreover, the protagonist was only in his twenties in his previous life, and he is only in his teens in this life. With little experience, it is normal to be confused. In reality, many college students are still confused after graduation. The author's portrayal of human nature is also very profound. Not only because the author has an accurate grasp of the characters' psychology, but also because the author's description of the characters and scenes is very vivid. Especially the campus scenes are described very clearly and realistically. So much so that I was blindly guessing whether the author was a middle school student, because when I think about my middle school life, I don't think so clearly and truly. But I also feel that middle school students may not be able to write such profound and realistic novels. Nothing else, just because the experience is not there yet. The portrayal of human nature is on par with "Trafford Buyers Club". As for the setting, I've only read sixteen chapters, so I don't have a deep impression. However, from the comments, it seems that there is a final BOSS set? I personally don't like this setting. On the one hand, it is cliche. On the other hand, a narrative that feels human and focuses on emotions is still like "Natsume's Book of Friends". With in-depth communication with each character, the protagonist also enriches his experience and grows after seeing it. Of course, this is just my suggestion, and the author has to make his own judgment.

I would like to ask 1. The female protagonist = the male protagonist's wife, or the male protagonist's wife = the female protagonist. Are these two equations necessarily true? 2. Does being redeemed have to be through love? I hope the author will stick to his own ideas. I haven't encountered such a satisfying book in a long time.

It's well written, it can't be the work of some great god making matryoshka dolls. . Haha, just kidding, come on 😁{"NickName":"R-san","UserId":330430169}

The book is called Monster I Am Redeemed, not a police story. At the end of the writing, it's all about police stories, and the protagonists recede into the background. Who would read a book without a main plot? It can have branch plots, but there are too many. Dozens of chapters are all branch plots. Then the question of the protagonist is that the protagonist is a very contradictory person. He obviously wants to regain his humanity, but he keeps hiding his memories in the memory bank.

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Good book. Those who clicked in should ignore the messages in the comment area and try to read a few more chapters. Don't miss this book 😁

Dark Light Chaser(x) Monster I am Redeemed(✓)

Indifferent, lonely. 🙂🙂

The writing is very good, why are the grades so poor? 🙄 A novel with no clear poisonous points and clear narrative is not even a high-quality novel, and it doesn't even have a three-thousand-dollar order. . .

Author, do you have to be so realistic? After reading too much, I feel that human existence is a sin. A little brilliance cannot hide the rot of the group. It looks good, but it is frustrating to watch. It is the same as reality. I can't stop what is happening. I still can't stop it in the novel.

I feel like I have found a book of fairy grass. The golden three chapters trigger a small climax. The rhythm and writing are also great. I am very much looking forward to the follow-up development!

It's not like it was written by one person, just like cheating money. The quality after it is put on the shelves is not as good as before it is put on the shelves. It will last for a long time.

I finally got rid of the author. When I first read this book, I liked the main character's emotions about campus life. The various social plots were well written, but I just didn't like reading it. I personally felt that the positioning of this book was quite strange.

After reading the two chapters after it was released, it felt good to read it in one go. The rhythm of the light novel is well controlled, the story is coherent, the ideas are clear, and the plot obviously follows the outline. The three views and characters established by the author are all okay. Even if one or two points are inconsistent, I believe most readers can accept it. The core of my experience is the protagonist, and everything else is a tool or turning point for the protagonist, no matter who the heroine is. The protagonist is well established and does not shy away from talking about his own dark side. The character transformation after the relaxation in the middle is also described relatively conservatively. On this point, I dare say that it will definitely attract fans as long as the rhythm can be maintained. But after changing the map, the pace was too fast. Reading it in one breath didn't feel as great as reading a book bit by bit. But the pace difference is too big, and the character insertions seem stiff. I just want to say slow down. Looking at the book review messages and the number of pages per chapter, it can be seen that the number of updates is not high. It is most likely that those who follow the outline will write less casually. Be careful not to eat too quickly. Overall, it's a good book. At least it's the best one I've read in the past few issues of Sanjiang. I'll take care of it for a while, author, come on. (PS: Pay attention to Jin Ping'an. I personally think he is too similar to Xia Qinian. The individual plots are different in each individual version, but together... The setting of Xingyue has caused many readers to have opinions. I can accept it, but if I add another person, I have to be careful.)

Please don't write spoilers in chapter reviews, as this will affect the reading experience of other book lovers.

When will it be updated? Even if it's a mess, I'll accept it. At least give this story an ending.

I originally wanted to put Batman, but it still looked more like Black

The content is rich, the writing is excellent, and the rhythm is very comfortable ~ available soon ~

The author greatly wishes to improve it.