The Guardian's Inherited Will

Okay, now that I've read them all, let me share some of my, um, opinions. The book's imagination is quite good, and I noticed that your worldview is still quite broad. It depends on how wonderful you can write it. First of all, I have read a lot about the paragraph problem in the chapters, and your paragraph problem is still very obvious. Some paragraphs are too long, which looks very hard on the eyes. You can divide them into paragraphs. I noticed that the paragraphs in some places can actually be divided into several paragraphs, but you did not divide them. And I can't say anything directly. I can only continue to read. Well, in general, my eyes are a little tired now. Other than that, the problem is the article itself. Considering that you are a new author, it doesn't seem to be a big deal. My feeling when reading the whole film is that it is interesting at the beginning, but after that it becomes a bit boring [Of course, this is my personal feeling, it depends on other people's experience too] There are a lot of dialogues in your chapter, not only many, but also relatively long. Then there is the description. It can be seen that your description is still a bit lacking. Maybe my wording is not accurate, but to put it bluntly, it lacks internal flavor, lacks atmosphere, and does not render it well. These lead to the fact that when you read the article, you may be thinking of a scene in your mind, but when we read it, it is a bit dry. When you should use words to describe, describe it. Just the right words can make your article go to a higher level [and there will be more words]. However, I think your writing style is concise, so keep it. You don't need too much description, but it can't be too little. Yes, for example, personally, I am a noob. You can see the change in my writing style by reading my posts, such as "Dream of Killing" and "Travel in the World". The vocabulary is more gorgeous than before, but it lacks some flavor and is nondescript. This is the lesson that I failed when I tried to pile up vocabulary but ended up with insufficient vocabulary and poor writing skills. Not only that, there are too many dialogues, but the content is covered up. In some places, I know that you want to start laying out the world view and setting, but it is a bit boring and does not create a very interesting feeling. You don't need it. Every time a new thing is released, it has to go through the protagonist's mouth, or when a scene comes out. Come on, you must describe it. You can add settings little by little according to the progress of the plot, making the whole transition more natural and more fun. Mentioning the names of some scenes, and then describing them later in the writing, will actually make readers feel like, ah, I remember the name of this scene. It appeared before, filled in the pit, and has not forgotten it. The above are some of my suggestions, which are very simple. And because I am not a big boss myself, but also a rookie, so just take a look and don't spray [face covering. Jpg]

After reading one chapter, I feel pretty good, but there is an indescribable weird feeling. The author must be a novice. Oh, by the way, here is what I felt was a little weird when I read it. I suggest you modify the transition. Uh, it's just a personal opinion For example: Wait, how many decades? Having said this, Luo Yu was dumbfounded. Did he meet someone of the same kind, or was he deceived by a liar who was a genuine immortal?

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That's it. If there is a second volume, remember to cue me. I'm a little reluctant to keep this one.

Received, original writing is difficult to write, personal opinion, the first chapter should focus on the protagonist's goal, so that it can be expanded later

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The writing is okay, but the title is a bit discouraging and feels like a series.

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The world still needs more guardians to watch over us. Don't be discouraged. Just consider it popular. Even the platform of Qidian has been developed step by step, not to mention the small authors like us who are attached to it. We still have to take one step at a time. If it is too big, it will be easily pulled.

When I saw the introduction, I thought it was about the Way of Gou, but when I saw that, I realized that it was about a thousand-year-old monster. But I'm a little bit surprised. He's experienced so much and lived for so long, but why does the protagonist have a sense of déjà vu?

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It's well written, but the dialogue is too correct and lacks a little plot description. Come on.

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There are so many places to submit articles, why do you have to lock yourself with him?

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