Nonsense Yin Yang 1

Improvement The writing in Chapter 39 is much smoother, and the improvement in writing style is visible to the naked eye. The dialogue in Chapter 49 has become standardized, and most dialogues are no longer split into two paragraphs. Although it still exists in the later stages (such as the nine-tailed fox demon at the beginning of Chapter 91), it is much missing. Disadvantages (1) The coherence and correlation of some plots are not strong. Simply put, the logic needs to be deepened. Fortunately, this kind of problem occurs in very few parts, only in individual places or in one chapter. (2) The problem with dialogue is that a complete sentence is divided into two parts, which makes readers feel awkward when reading. This problem has basically been solved after Chapter 49. Suggestion: The rectification of this problem can be placed on paragraphing. For example, if you want to separate the words, you can directly segment them with semicolons. Using paragraphs instead of semicolons may not work in theory, but it works well in practice. (3) The characters' actions are repeated, which is also a serious problem. For example, Lin Qingxian always retreats subconsciously, the big golden cat digs holes subconsciously, etc. These are originally very good points for characterizing characters, but once or twice they are very effective. Once they occur too many times, or even multiple times in a chapter, they will appear to be very cheap, and the advantages will turn into disadvantages. (4) Lin Qingxian's wavering is actually a very real point. But this is a novel after all, and Qingxian is still the protagonist. The protagonist is always wavering, and readers will feel very uncomfortable and gradually lose confidence in the characterization, leading to a loss of readers. (5) When describing a character's words, it is always written directly, saying:... Without the modification of adjectives, making it difficult for readers to accurately grasp the most intuitive changes in the character's emotions at that time. Of course, as an author, the biggest impact must be on the word count. Therefore, it is recommended to add adjectives to achieve multiple purposes. Advantages (1) The sense of reality is relatively strong, and the background and situation of the times are described in detail in the plot. The detailed description of the characters is also relatively complete, which can reflect the characteristics and identity of each character. For the use of many items, ritual methods, and professional terms. The grasp is very accurate and the content of the novel has been greatly improved. (2) The emotional grasp of the characters is relatively good. Whether it is the protagonist's corresponding reactions and actions to different situations, or the more detailed inner descriptions, a good portrayal can always be achieved. But it still needs to be noted, because it has been pointed out in the shortcomings, so I won't go into details. Generally speaking, since this novel is the first work, the quality is not considered to be of high quality. But the most important thing is to persist, and the most important thing is to change. The work has been making progress inadvertently, although the author may not have paid much attention to these progress. But comparing the beginning and the end, the difference is very obvious. (Due to a lot of things lately, this review, which has been promised for a long time, is only now available. I will read the novel below, but it is probably another time pull.) Don't give up. When I was writing the novel, I saw you speaking on the assistant. Two months after I delayed updating, I came back again, and you were still here. Don't give up, I'm still waiting for you to help me when you become famous.

Come on! I'm back for a visit! Sorry, I haven't left a comment before

I came from the assistant's side, and I support my friend who is the assistant's friend.

Hahaha, "Open your eyes?" Then I think it would be more exciting if you wrote it as a suspense thriller! I don't know much about Eastern fantasy

The passion of the city and the struggles of little people. Here you sit down on the ground and stand upright, there you stand upright to the sky! What kind of wind and rain did you go through along the way?

I want to eat fat. The passion of the city and the struggles of little people. Here you sit down on the ground and stand upright, there you stand upright to the sky! What kind of wind and rain did you go through along the way?

I'm just curious why there is that LV1 if I didn't sign a contract

Hahaha, I actually think it's quite good. Each story is a bit short, but there is a sense of humor hidden in the horror, just like watching a horror movie but the background music is Good Luck. To put it nicely, it has a unique flavor. I don't know what others think, but I quite like it. As a new writer, I would like to support you. If you have time, you can come and comment on my novels. It would be polite.

One is "I want to eat fat", you are "pretty and want to gain weight"... I want to be tall, square and handsome

Come on, you must write an ending.

It's well written. I'll keep it in mind. It would be perfect if it could introduce a little bit of horror.

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After a quick glance at the first few dozen chapters, I feel that there are still areas that need improvement. However, there are many merits, and overall it is still very good. I just don't have enough time recently, otherwise I would have read it together with several other movies. After I finish watching this movie recently, I will give a more complete review, but there may be some shortcomings, so I hope you will bear with me then.

A word of complaint, after someone replies to the end review of a single chapter of the novel, the system does not prompt me, which is very sad. 😭