Super God Academy: The Visitor from Afar

After reading 85,000 words, I personally feel that the emotional scene with Qilin was not well written. I have lived in her house for 18 years and I am said to be childhood sweethearts. However, you did not write the tacit understanding of childhood sweethearts. Then there is a shortcoming that it is very cool. There are more than 40 pictures of the main character whose abilities are unclear. I don't know anything except that she has a pair of wings made of contraband. As for the heroine, for the time being, there are Qilin and Ahri (hopefully not an angel, it's too cliche). The plot is okay.

Author, women's clothing, we want to see you women's clothing

Let's briefly talk about the relationship between Ah Li and the protagonist Su Feng. After Su Feng became an adult, he moved out of Qilin's house and returned to his parents' apartment. After a period of time, he met Su Xiaoli (12 years old). After getting to know each other, Su Feng took Ahli back to his home (don't ask Ahri about his mother, if you ask, he ran away and lost Ahri.) And doted on her as a biological sister. Because Ahri didn't want to go to school, and Su Feng doted on her too much, many things were left to her. Coupled with the assets left by Su Feng's parents and government subsidies, Su Feng felt that he could support Ahri, so he didn't care too much. Gradually, Ahri began to rely on Su Feng. A year after they met, Su Feng introduced Ahri to Qilin and her parents. Because Ahri looked too fairy-like, it even caused a misunderstanding like a child bride. Four years later, Ali, a stay-at-home girl raised by Su Feng at home, started to get involved in live broadcasting because her family's funds were somewhat insufficient. Fortunately, at the beginning, with her extremely beautiful appearance, she attracted a large number of fans and even people with bad intentions. In an accident, she was attacked by gangsters and was rescued by Su Feng and Qilin, who had just become police officers. After that, Ahri began to cover her appearance during live broadcasts and never went out alone. Whenever she went out, she was accompanied by Su Feng. And at Su Feng's strong request, she covered herself up tightly every time, like a rice dumpling. Gradually, Ahri's dependence on Su Feng unknowingly turned into love, but Su Feng always regarded Ahri as a younger sister. Ali also didn't realize that when she looked at Su Feng, she was no longer looking at her brother like a sister, but looking at the person she loved. (So there will be no more Monkey Brother stuff later!!!!)

Let's see how many of them are for Ahri to come and see 😁😁 The problem is... This line is a bit difficult to write now... But it is impossible to send it safely, but it may be a little weird😥😥😥

1. The title of the book has a clear theme, that is, a fanfic about the Super God, which directly demarcates the readers. This can be considered as screening out some people in advance, but it cannot be said that it is not good. Players who have not understood the Super God Academy are probably less likely to come in. 2. The introduction is very rough. It can be said that there is no difference from not writing an introduction. In addition to knowing that this book may be a bit poisonous, what other information can readers extract? What are the highlights? The highlights are written directly. 3. The paragraphing and narration are okay, and it is relatively comfortable to read. The writing style is still a bit immature and can be improved slowly. Come on ٩(๑^o^๑)۶

Qilin

Keisha is still beautiful

I changed the cover to see if I can "cheat" a few people into it.

Let me tell you, the heroines are Qilin and Su Xiaoli, I don't believe in you who are here to see me.

I just saw the paid chapter and I'm still hesitant to continue reading. Some people say that this is the text version of Super Seminary, which is just a dispensable person added to the anime plot. I think the biggest change caused by the protagonist so far is that the precious metals brought by his plug-in are taken advantage of by others... The other previous changes are only the emotional drama between Qilin and the protagonist. In addition, I don't know why some passages such as Sun Wukong beating up Liu Chuang, Ge Xiaolun and Qiangwei's confrontation with Bo were not written or passed over in one stroke... Maybe it's the author's preference for some characters? This author's writing skills are somewhat good, at least better than many fan authors, and the flow of the plot is not bad. It's water, not just water for spending lines, but water for dialogue.