Start as a Black Cutter

The description is too procrastinating. Half of the text consists of inner activities plus self-exclamation. There is very little real information, and skipping the page will not have much impact. The supporting dialogue is too long, even if it is used to arrange the subsequent plot or to set off the protagonist to show off, it is too long, and the desire to watch is reduced by more than half. As for ability shortcomings, it is best to state them at the beginning, otherwise it will lead to a psychological gap. For example, in the first few chapters, there is no prompt about abilities and cooling time in the front, but a cooling time setting is suddenly added in the back. The difference between before and after is too big, which is poisonous. The protagonist's reaction in some situations is too exaggerated, giving some readers a very embarrassing feeling. The author had better pay attention to it. As the protagonist, don't yell and yell at every turn. It is better to be more steady. This is not a novel with a large proportion of bullshit, and even in sandbag novels, such situations rarely occur. Some characters are given too many adjectives, which gives a deliberate feeling. Generally, two or three adjectives are enough to describe the image of a character, but sometimes the author can write a long paragraph just for the image. The protagonist should not show too much care for some female characters with whom he has no deep or even no relationship. This will only make readers feel that the protagonist cannot move forward when he meets a woman and is hopeless. Emotions such as anger and fear are best not to appear in the protagonists of cool novels. Readers only want to be happy. Plots such as incompetent rage or anger after being plotted by the enemy will only make people feel suffocated. Not everyone has the patience to read the rest. In most cases, when they see the unsatisfactory plot, they will just delete the book and leave. To sum up, the theme of this book is creative, but the plot and the author's writing style are not polished. There are not many points of dissuasion in the early stage, but they are not much less. There are not many poisonous points, but they still exist. The most obvious ones are the sudden cooling time in the early stage and the large amount of water in the text. (Although the author may feel that his writing is not watery and thinks that all the descriptions he writes are necessary, in fact, this is water, and water is scary. There are too many "necessary" descriptions)

I just finished watching the latest one today, and I think it's okay. It's just that the processing of some paragraphs is very slow. There are too many things to explain about the background and character movement. It's so annoying. These places should be simpler. When I first start writing the setting, I feel like I have to jump several pages to see the plot. I personally don't like it. There are no other problems. I personally like the whole plot. The easy development is very interesting. I also like the fight of the Valkyrie. Personally speaking, even if you have a lot of daily life, don't talk too much about walking and the like. Keep it simple For example, I won't cut off this paragraph later. It's so long! Intersperse, don't tell the readers dryly, I jumped directly. I know you are talking about the background, but is it important? It's not important. It seems to be just a temporary copy at the moment. It doesn't need to be told dryly to the readers with such a complete background. This kind of paragraph tests the readers' patience too much 😭

The most fearful thing about writing novels is self-pleasure, touching the author himself and disgusting the readers.

The transmogrified weapon has a cooldown, right? Then cool it down slowly. I will come back to you after ten or twenty years.

There is no problem with self-pleasure, but the author's approach is too depressing. When others say something about you, you can argue with them or ignore them. Isn't it just for your own happiness or money to write a novel? (People must be self-aware) If you write well, will so many people dislike you? Think about it. The subject matter is a good one, but if you do things without thinking, you really can't save it. A good hand of cards is played badly.

Qidian's books are getting worse and worse. I really want to go back to the period from 2012 to 2017, when the heroes were competing for hegemony, and see what they are writing now.

The author's writing is OK, but the setting is not. ​​​​ ​​The protagonist should be set to be indestructible. An indestructible broken sword is the most attractive.                                                                       The protagonist can be smashed in the next chapter, because he really can't do anything. If others can't defend something like an artifact, it will be destroyed and destroyed. When the illusion cools down, the holder can no longer defend it, and the protagonist will be gone. And the focus is not on him, but on the supporting characters who hold him, and what will happen after these supporting characters get the protagonist. Only an indestructible and powerful artifact will cause everyone to fight for it, instead of a hammer that can smash it after the cooldown of the transmogrification ends. Do you think that a powerful artifact is now a broken sword? What happened to him? Why no one knows? Why did an artifact become like this? Who has he fought with? Has anything been forgotten in history? It's already so strong now that it's damaged, how strong will it be after it's repaired? Then the holder will help the protagonist gain blood in order to repair it. Isn't this the plot coming?         ，，

Write more about the male protagonist's perspective, don't hit here and there with a hammer, what's your word count? Before subscribing, at most the number of readers will decrease. After subscribing, it is guaranteed that most of the remaining readers will watch pirated copies or the author is a eunuch.

Why is it always so weird? He obviously relied on the system to become a black cutter. But before, he couldn't even think of looking at the system. He had to be melted soon before he even thought about the system. It's just baffling, where were you doing before? Incompetent and furious? Do you have to burn your butt before you think of running away?

The writing is okay and it looks quite natural.

This is a book that belongs to the author alone. We are not worthy of reading it. What our eyes still want, listen to me and don't read it. In Starting Point, whenever there is a book that turns into a weapon, the owner of the protagonist must be a woman. How disgusting. The author made me sick to my stomach. I don't deserve to read your book. Thank you. Goodbye. The writing style belongs to the third grade of junior high school. The compositions I wrote in high school were better than yours. Thank you.

The beginning is amazing, but as it goes on it becomes duller and more watery. The fighting is limited by the writing style and may not be very enjoyable to watch, but this can wait. The alien story has a strong flavor of the LOL game, which makes it uncomfortable to watch. By the way, everyone should also complain about the settings, because as a gambling dog, there is Black Cut at C level, and there is Demon Breaking Red Rose at B level. When you save enough lottery tickets, no one will leave the single A level reward without drawing, and go for a C level 10 company, and a D level 10 company, which is purely wasteful and stupid. I can't accept this kind of behavior. Gaining blood value itself is a pure benefit without origin. Don't go for high-end games, just look for treasures among a bunch of junk items. It's heart-wrenching to watch So, goodbye😄 By the way, the plot is too much, so if you want to enjoy it, pick it up and hold it in half. This is probably one of the reasons why there are so few monthly tickets for this book.

If you have any suitable weapon templates, please share them here. The author will adopt them as appropriate. Thank you very much.

Weapons should just be weapons. Transforming into a human is too poisonous for me. The reason why many novels about transforming into monsters and beasts will focus on the non-changing person in the introduction is that readers of such books regard human transformation as a poisonous point. Moreover, the character of the protagonist is unlikable, exaggerated, and his emotions remain on the surface. The description of the protagonist has no depth and cannot attract others. There is no such idea as "I would be the protagonist"

There was a problem with the setting at the beginning. You started with Broken Sword and resisted n attacks from a Sky Knight. Later, you strengthened yourself successfully three times, and then the properties of Broken Sword didn't change at all. In this case, why did you use the strengthening stone?

The subject matter is okay, but the writing is a bit immature. The female general of the empire was like a novice with little experience. It feels like you get to the top by force and family background. I'm curious. Is it difficult for wars in this world to rely solely on force? Otherwise, there is a question mark as to whether this person can lead the army well. Come on.

Oh ho

These chapters are written inexplicably, and I am not familiar with this loli, so why should I be so caring?

It doesn't look like a novel, it looks like a composition 🙂

The TMD cracked and it was cut like this? At least give me some reaction! Just say it if your grades are not good! Asking for votes, what is the point of cutting it without saying a word?

To put it bluntly, the male protagonist can transform into a demon-breaking red rose, which is a permanent demon-breaking equipment. However, the close combat with the opponent's magic boss does not change. After the boss retreated from the forbidden magic area, it transformed into an elite monster. Then it took three chapters to kill this elite monster. What a nb. The original advantage was directly dragged to the balance by the opponent's big boss, and suddenly a transformation was added that only lasted two hours 😄

I couldn't stand it anymore. It felt like the male protagonist had never been in love in eight lifetimes. I was overwhelmed by how nervous he was when meeting this Pikachu.

The idea of ​​this book is good, but the writing style is not good. It is like a running account. The characters in the play have no characteristics and the protagonist feels dispensable.

This book of yours is unreasonable After reading fifty chapters, I feel like a middle school student who relies solely on lol and conjecture to write nonsense If you don't understand ancient military and fighting, why don't you go to Bilibili to read it? So many real-life soldiers fighting, Benzi Kendo, analysis of famous battles in ancient times. . . Ha It's okay to just write nonsense and turn it into a cool article. This pile of nonsense, are you killing your comic memories? Before taking action, let's have five and ten episodes of black and white memories? Dirty Eyes, what kind of crap are they pushing in the recommendation column?

I keep watching but the more I watch, the more disappointed I become. I always feel like something is missing. Gradually it becomes disappointing.

It's really good at watering, but it's not good at watering at the beginning. Others only add water later.

Sometimes the author is really disappointing. If you don't follow suit in the future, maybe write an outline, fool around with it, and then it will be gone.

Comments ⑧ 1: The description of the battle is too poor, 2. What is the protagonist doing with a sword and following a woman all the time? Shouldn't the development mode go to the war zone to harvest blood? Three: Weapons do not determine a battle. For example, if you give a red rose to a person who cannot shoot, what is the use? An ax? An unpopular weapon, Finally, let me say this for a moment Ha, the weapon does not require a host, you can follow whoever you want, the protagonist is a bit of a licking dog. She has the characteristics of a virgin, a blow to the bald head is directly wasted, and she will die if she saves a servant. If you don't do anything directly, to be honest, the Valkyrie can die in anything. The right way is to change the host more and kill more people and get the health value lottery to upgrade.

That's Xia Luo's character. If the author hadn't deliberately given it a halo. Otherwise, you will never be able to compare to Elena. I really don't know why I'm writing about this woman. Might as well read the length of Elena. At least there's more drama

Did you see my apprenticeship title? Did you see my comment? There are many people who read silently. Those who don't like it just leave, and those who like it silently pursue it. To be honest, those who want to say a few words are mostly attracted by the subject matter and creativity, but they deviate from their cool points. After all, this kind of subject matter is niche. You can name an author who "gave up". Then this author most likely started writing novels out of interest. After all, he does not make a living from novels. But what you want to describe is your own fantasy, what does it have to do with others, like to see, not like to leave. You should also consider some good ideas and suggestions from readers to better improve your world. Those who are purely looking for trouble should be deleted or blocked, no less than a few cents.