Obviously You Can Support Yourself in Old Age but You Have No Choice but to Make Your Debut

I'm in a book shortage stage, so I read this book when I have nothing to do. I read more than 400 chapters, and the more I read, the more tired I became. The main character has two memories of his life, so I just pretended to take off and it's over? If you keep being hacked and prove yourself, you only need to be hacked and slapped in the face once or twice. There is no need to follow the entire book from beginning to end.

Sorry, I regret that I went to read the book without reading the comments of seniors. The poison everyone talks about is water. Experienced them all. Just wanted to say. Shennong is dead. You can avoid it

You have read Chapter 19 of this book. Well, I can understand the subject matter and concept, which is good. The male protagonist lives at the bottom of life. He has a daughter who has already made her debut as a professional artist. Because of a brief mention one time, she was later targeted and discriminated against in her position due to her humble status. Then her daughter got a chance, and he benefited from it, and then the memories of two lifetimes began to counterattack and cheat. . . Is it right? Actually, you suddenly have these memories of two lives in the middle, and you can quickly accept them calmly and integrate them. Personally, I feel it's a bit deliberate and abrupt. There is a sense of violation that was forcibly inserted, and a hasty paragraph of text ended the integration of the memories of the two lives, without any emotions, emotions, cognitive fluctuations, or other beginnings of familiarity with the memories. Including playing the tune later, muscle memory? Why not get two lifetime memories at the beginning and then slowly reveal them throughout the book? Or you can reveal it to readers at the beginning, and then gradually become familiar with and use this plug-in. . . Many ways. Second, writing a novel is not a commentary. Many words do not require repeated emphasis on the same meaning in different fonts and word counts. When writing about something, do you need to focus on it? If so, focus on one, two, two or three points of people, objects, and scenery to express it, or to highlight it through the atmosphere. Instead of repeating it for a long time and just keep talking about it, it feels like you can't get through it. I know you want to write in detail, okay. . . For example, what I just watched, one webcast led to another webcast, and the same thing was the shock of this song. How long did it take you to mention it repeatedly? What is the role of this network anchor? What about the role of Mango Channel? Does it need to take more length and be more repetitive to introduce? There is no problem with foreshadowing. For some characters, they can be introduced in one stroke. Just like in the unit where the male protagonist worked before, the supervisor had other staff members, such as Manager Li, Manager Liu, etc. I personally feel that this is a passerby character. Given so much space and so many descriptions, is he a very important character? Mainly, repetitive descriptions. Third, this book has reached chapters 19 and 20. The heroine, who is the second heroine? Who is the villain? The villain in the front can be thought of as the one who denounces the hero's daughter as an artist, and a supervisory BOSS comes out later. Even though it is a small BOSS, it can be considered a first-stage villain. The hero also needs to fight monsters and upgrade. What about the second phase? After almost 10 chapters, the competition between the other three artists comes out. This is acceptable, but Piaji inserts two or three chapters of the live broadcast plot at once, which is a bit confusing. How to set the stage like this? Very dramatic. Then let's talk about the heroine and the second heroine. With so much space, it's time for the heroine or the second heroine to show up. At first I thought it was a father-daughter relationship, where the male protagonist's daughter is the female protagonist, but until Chapter 20, apart from a phone call and an introduction to her identity, there was nothing left? This is not like the treatment of the heroine. Then you got a landlady to come out and spend some space to write it in detail. At first I thought this was the heroine, but then because of her identity, piaji, I went from being amazing and excited to being indifferent. Damn, this change is too fast. Then it's not the heroine, and seeing that you've written a lot of space, could it be other female main characters or supporting characters? But then one of them refused to collect the rent for that month, and the reasons in the article were untenable. Is this month's rent a foreshadowing? Or is it just Passerby B who has a hot forehead? The breakdown of roles and roles must be clearly written, including whether the live broadcast will be a female anchor or a male anchor. Even if they are pushers in the beginning, it's not necessary. If it's important, the scenes can be added later, there's no need to start with two chapters! Oh my God, this is the only one with twice-cooked pork on it. The scene, music, and people were all described in detail there, with the encouragement of the mango station person in front of me, and I read the same description twice here. Interesting? Things that can be mentioned in one sentence, a live broadcast, you have explained it clearly. When the peeping anchor comes to Na Fei's live broadcast room, he needs to describe it to Na Fei again, and then repeat it to the peeping anchor. If you're direct, just use Na Fei's live broadcast as the basic scene. The video screen is half-way, and the voyeur can't help but take a few words, and then expose it. Wouldn't it be over for Fei's fans in the live broadcast room to point out his identity in one or two sentences? It's too procrastinating to do the same thing twice! ! !

So far my writing is okay! Come on

It is recommended that the author streamline the content. This is not ordinary water, it is the water of the sea!

No, is the starting point threshold so low now? Can this thing even be sold as an urban boutique?

It's very, very bad. A recorded program can be watery for more than half of it. I've never seen a conversation that can work for several chapters. You can watch it for free, but it's not worth paying for.

How can I put it this way? I feel very angry. The whole world is against the protagonist, and then they are all pretending to be slapped in the face, which makes me a little angry.

The subject matter is very good, but the result is all nonsense... Watery and poisonous...

I feel that if the author sells pork part-time, ten pounds of pork would need to be filled with at least 8 and a half pounds of water.

Colleagues, bosses, guests, and the fathers of three celebrities. There are so many supporting characters who are all mocking and engendering hatred. Are there no good people in the book?

If you want to increase the number of subscriptions, you should first simplify your text. The protagonist and the supporting role should be clearly defined. The supporting role has more words than the protagonist, so it makes sense for people to say that you are the sea water.

[Reasons for the decrease in chapter reviews] 1. It is too watery, the writing is scattered, and it often starts to add private goods, bowl after bowl of Meng Po soup. I've read more than fifty chapters and haven't seen my daughter's show yet. 2. The dialogue in the plot is too childish, and the intelligence is forcibly reduced in order to slap people in the face. If you can't write about human feelings and sophistication, don't sell private goods. Who in reality is so mentally retarded that he opens his mouth and beeps, then stretches his face to get slapped? 3. The character and thoughts of the protagonist can be well shaped, but when combined with the author's own narration and dialogue, it tastes too strange and out of place. I'm really tired of talking, so there are fewer and fewer chapter reviews. Author, don't you enjoy living a good life?

A middle-aged man asked you to write something for a teenager, making him feel inexplicably angry.

It's too watery. Also, you don't need to talk about whether it's okay or not. I'm reading your book just to see a career, not because you wrote about the topic of "the male protagonist is complaining that all the female characters think he's not good enough."

My daughter is already 18 and she doesn't understand the world at all. She keeps making fun of herself. She despises this and despises that. Meituan has millions of employees at Ele. Me. There are tens of millions working in factories. What's wrong? I'm eating your food. I don't have any human rights? Are they all dogs? ? ? Be a human being. Who in society has a hard time living... Don't be too self-indulgent.

I was confused. After watching the free version, I had the same feeling. Did I watch it or not? What did I watch? If you ask me, I seem to know but I don't seem to know. If you think about it carefully, it's like the author wants to describe a flower. But because he wants to write about a vegetable garden, a fence, and a bug, in the end you don't even know what kind of flower he is writing about.

This book is too poisonous. I have read it for more than ten years. Really, this is the only one that I can't help but complain about. Although the setting is flawed, I still want to read it, but it is really too watery and too poisonous. I've read three chapters. Goodbye.

It looked good at first, but it became more and more watery and dragging. I immediately gave up my subscription and didn't persist until I saw it listed on the shelves.

The setting of the book is good, but the author completely ignores the readers' feelings and keeps enjoying himself, flooding the world with water, and ruining a good idea. In the past two years, there have been many authors who have destroyed their brains like this. They have ideas but can't do anything about it.

The biggest problem with this book is that the author incorporates too many personal thoughts and complains about this and that, which is not helpful at all in advancing the plot. There are dozens of chapters in the middle that are well written, not too shabby, and don't contain all kinds of complaints or personal things, and the plot advancement is also very reasonable. As a result, it fell apart again when I looked at it later, and there were all kinds of personal things mixed in, and the plot didn't develop much. I really couldn't stand it anymore, so I deleted the book.

There are so many bloody plots. Shui Cheng is so dead and he still wants people to subscribe. Just dream.

The author's name is soda, and this book is so watery! One chapter can be watered into five chapters. If the water is not enough, add more water! Admire! Admire!

Hiss... I wonder why this book was recommended?

After reading the third chapter, I fainted and retreated in defeat.

I only knew about fantasy water before, but now I also know about entertainment.

Has the author never felt love since he was a child? Is it just disgusting to write a book like this?

The main character was just bragging, but the two most important things, copyright registration and her daughter's contract, were not mentioned at all.

I can only say that I am worthy of being a professional writer. This beginning is so miserable and low-key, and it's so low-key.

The plot is good, but too convoluted and deliberate. There are too many old bookworms now. At the beginning, various villains dress up and slap the protagonist in the face, and there are a group of people admiring and analyzing each other. Too deliberate!