Start from Tianlong and Travel Across the Rivers and Lakes

In my personal opinion, if today's martial arts novels want to be popular, the protagonist must be decisive and egoistic in killing. If you write about a protagonist who is selfless and has the world in mind, as you have done for decades, you will definitely not become popular.

There is no need to admire Zha Baoyi. Of course, his writing skills are not bad, and his ideas were not vulgar at the time, but he personally carried too many personal things, such as the role of Xiao Longnu. Moreover, most of the righteous characters in the book are disgusting. For all the villains with backgrounds, the heroes are defeated but do not kill them, and continue to harm others. Where is the chivalry? On the contrary, it is not as good as Gu Long. It directly satirizes the heroes. The main characters never hesitate to kill the enemies they want to kill.

This author has no social experience, he is just a kid who grew up in a greenhouse! The author comes out and let me ask you, do heroes in the martial arts world rely on reasoning? See when Qiao Feng is being reasonable? Martial arts and martial arts rely on martial arts and are obtained by killing. Qiao Feng's reputation as a hero was earned by leading the masses to resist the Liao and Xixia countries. Only when you kill people so that they are afraid of you, will anyone be able to reason with you! Everything depends on force! For example, a three-year-old child goes to buy something on the street with a few hundred yuan. Without surveillance, most vendors will just grab the money and run away, or just throw it to the child to eat! Don't say that my heart is too dark. This is society, and human nature is so evil! The heroes in the martial arts world are all killed until they are riddled with corpses and no one dares to offend them. Only then are they called heroes by a group of fearful people! To put it bluntly, even if a group of people can't beat him and are afraid that he will kill them, they give him the title of hero. This means to tell the world that we have given up and don't come to fight us. You are already a hero. Beating us will insult your title of hero! But once the character of this hero collapses, those who compliment him will immediately jump out and trample him to death! So, heroes are the most useless! Among all the time-travelers written by the author, there are almost no heroes, because they are useless in the first place, and no one wants to read them. Everyone still prefers heroes like Cao Cao! Those who follow me will prosper and those who go against me will perish. Only then will I live up to my rebirth!

The protagonist is a bit stupid. A few beggars. Luo Liba chatted for a long time. It's not like we have to fight for a long time. If you win, you will be justified. No matter how much you say you can't win, it's bullshit. The time traveler takes care of this and that. If you still care about changing the plot, why not just commit suicide as a time traveler? You will change the plot by traveling through time.

The protagonist is afraid of changing history, so why doesn't he commit suicide? After he died, the earth still rotates like that? The author's thinking is so childish, and it's so funny that he still wants to do it for future generations.

I only read Chapter 20, and I really couldn't stand it anymore. I traveled through time, the whole Madonna, my martial arts skills were terrible, and I couldn't be a good person in the world.

Do you know why almost no one writes about Tianlong nowadays? There is no way you can get around Xiao Feng! Heroic! Pathetic! The martial arts is considered one of the top figures among Tianlong! The most important thing is that he has a smooth journey from the bottom! How do you write?

I really can't stand it anymore, and I still sympathize with the four villains

The first chapter is really poisonous. The inner drama stops halfway through. Then, the following chapter starts again. The inner drama takes up two-thirds of the first chapter. I am hit by an arrow in the back but I don't feel it. I heal myself, but I blink my eyes and ask where we are. Then the system dings and then you have mastered the martial arts. Shouldn't it be direct? Ding, you have mastered the Beiming Magic? Yang Hao suddenly felt a warm current surge inside his body, sucking the warm current from his vest into his chest. Can you master passive suction? Duan Yu's lack of mastery is the one who passively attracts people from time to time. Okay, here he dug the biggest pit for himself. Instead of misunderstanding that he is from the Xingxiu sect, he just said that he picked up a copy of the Xiaoyao sect's martial arts and it is the Taoist Beiming Shen Gong. It is not a great method of transformation. Are you still afraid that Qiao Feng will kill people and cheat? Or are you afraid that Qiao Feng is a villain? Destroy yourself? Either don't expose yourself 😅 The person who carries you calls you Brother Yang, that is, he knows you, but he rashly asks where you are and what year you are. He also says that you are blind and did not recognize the other person. Brother Yang, am I Qiao Feng? Brother Yang, it seems that you have not recovered from your serious injury. When he finished speaking, he pulled (grabbed?) Yang Hao with his left hand, and his right palm fell into the air. , Shouldn't it be Brother Yang, I'm Qiao Feng? Brother Yang, I am Qiao Feng? And don't let yourself get involved too much when you talk. Qiao Feng is such a majestic and heroic person, but his dialogue is one sentence at a time. It's unimaginable, and it feels so cute 😅 Shouldn't we first understand why we are chasing him? Didn't you understand your doubts through dialogue? Yang Hao then remembered that he must have absorbed Qiao Feng's internal energy when he learned the Beiming Divine Art. This made Qiao Feng suspicious, so he waved his hands repeatedly. Why are these words so awkward for readers? If you have two words in a row in one sentence, the following one (this) should not appear. Either you add a period after the last paragraph and you can't even make a sentence 😅 The first chapter is really painful to read. I dug a lot of holes for myself in the first chapter. No wonder your grades are not good. You are the only one with good grades😅

If you traveled through the world of Tianlong and learned the Beiming Divine Art, would you actively expose your ability to absorb people's inner energy without much ability to protect yourself? Anyway, I won't...

Please author, please block me. I don't want to read books like yours in the future.

To be honest, this book has a lot of bad points at the beginning. For example, when being chased by Xixia Yipingtang, the protagonist acted like a dead man, which was just to make it more difficult for Qiao Feng. The protagonist also felt that he had no emotional intelligence. He knew clearly that the Eighteen Palms of Subduing the Dragon was a secret skill that was not passed down by the Beggar Clan, but he still asked for it, not to mention that he had a system. You will lack these special skills. After absorbing Qiao Feng's inner power, when questioned by Qiao Feng, he only concealed his secrets in order to arouse Qiao Feng's suspicion. I think it would be better to say it openly and say that there are other adventures that are better than yours. Even if he reveals everything about Beiming's magical skills, Qiao Feng's character will never let you suffer, let alone kill people to seize treasures.

Ice Poison Palm, Flame Hand Knife, tsk tsk, just look at the introduction and you will know that the author is not very good and the writing is rubbish.

Ah, Zi is just trash. If you meet him and kill him, it's over.

I can't stand it anymore, it's poisonous, and the reputation in the world is gained through killing. Traveling is for change.

This author is still a kid, too young

Why does the protagonist cry whenever he meets Xiao Feng? Isn't this a bit too much?

I'm drunk, and I'm speechless just looking at the introduction. Are you so senior and sworn sworn brother to Qiao Feng? You must be sick... If you say you don't care about seniority, then what seniority are you talking about?

There are too many flaws to complain about, it's extremely toxic

I hope you Shennong people will just say the words Shennong or poisonous when they see something poisonous in the future, otherwise all you will see in the comment area are some comments that are there or not. It's highly toxic, don't look at it!

There is something in this introduction that will directly brush off most readers who have any brains.

The author lives under the red flag of socialism and is a person who lives in an ivory tower. If you live in a foreign country. . . .

The more poisonous points there are, the more controversial they are. The key is how you arrange these poisonous points into each character. As a reader, you not only want to watch Tianlong Babu, but also arrange other martial arts dramas. Well, when writing a systematic text, it is best to enrich the entire story and look at the story from the perspective of a pig's feet. For example, who is the heroine? Is it a system? Or the person behind it? Since the story begins with Tianlong, what about The Legend of the Condor Heroes?

There are too many typos, the character dialogue is too wordy, and the writing style needs to be improved. Take a closer look at the writing level of the four classics and the art of writing.

Suppose you traveled to ancient times and became an emperor. Will you lick those historical celebrities and civil servants?

The introduction is good, it saved me reading the book😊

I don't know much about saving Ah Zi, repaying evil with kindness

What social issues are there to read in a novel? I'm already tired from work. I read novels based on whether the plot is reasonable, whether the logic makes sense, and whether the author can justify himself. The key is whether it suits your taste. This novel may not be to your taste. Also, your understanding of the "hero" in the novel is not so much a hero as a hero from the Water Margin, right?

Although I don't like it. But I hope that the author will continue to work hard, and I hope to see your new works in the next book.

Never give up and only live in other people's stories. I hate being a superfluous person who is not needed to point fingers.