The Bizarre Adventure of the Immortal Girl

The writing style is smooth and natural in most cases, but some parts need to be refined. There are a few places where it feels half white and half text, which is very disharmonious. Especially in the first sentence of the introduction, the two transitional conjunctions are used inexplicably. But the heroine is quite cute when she talks. The plot is overall reasonable, but the beginning is too bland, lacking intense conflicts, contradictions and crises, or insufficiently exaggerated. Overall, this is a time-traveling and immortality novel that is above the standard but lacks highlights.

The writing is really good, the story is very attractive and very visual. Some places with a lot of words may make you a little irritated, but that's not a big problem. The introduction is not very attractive and the heroine looks like an idiot. It should be changed, right? The above personal opinions, great cheers!

1. The introduction is interesting, and the summary is relatively comprehensive (for the general direction of the story). 2. I feel you are very familiar. Have you seen it somewhere? (The book circle is not big, it seems normal after seeing it, haha) 3. The writing is smooth. I like your description of the character's state! But I feel that the plot is a bit complicated. In short, the characters talk too much, but that's okay. This is just the feeling I got in the early stage. ٩( 'ω' )و 4. It is recommended to divide it into paragraphs. Although there are not many long paragraphs, it is still recommended not to exceed five rows, let alone more than five rows. Long paragraphs, or long paragraphs one after another, will cause aesthetic fatigue, destroying your sense of length. It will also be dazzling to read, or you may read the wrong sentence. If you want to take a break, you have to look for the sentence you just saw in the long paragraph, which is a bit tiring. 5. I wish you 100 first, and I'm looking forward to the next one. I've read about four or five chapters, haha, come on❤️ That said, it still looks familiar...

So well written! I am so envious of this writing style!

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I think my dear, you have quite some ideas in writing this book. Don't stop updating it haphazardly, 555