The Zombie King of Online Games Defies the Sky

I think the pace is a bit too fast                                                                                                                                     does not feel good. The span is a bit too big, and the details are not kept up. You can write about daily life and add some plot (you can just fill in some interesting plots to explain). I quite like the beginning of this novel, and I hope it can have a complete ending that is more satisfying to both readers and the author.