Guanxin Hall

Hello, author, I have read a few chapters and I feel a little confused. The layout could be simpler. One paragraph is too long and my eyes are dazzled when I read it. I feel that the characters are not standing up. The plot is also abrupt and strange. I looked at it in a foggy way. Also, it wrote a lot of unnecessary descriptions and was too wordy. It greatly affects the perception. It is recommended that the author write more character dialogues, write the character dialogues well, and express the characteristics of the characters. The description of the environment is concise and clear. Also, the story background and time are not explained at the beginning of the chapter, which lacks a sense of immersion. Author, when writing a novel, layout is very important. There is no paragraphing, and one densely packed paragraph makes the reader tired. You can learn from other authors' layout and segmentation, and don't have too many narrations. Readers can make up their own minds. The key is to stand up the characters and express the plot of the story, with conflict points, contradictions, small climaxes, and big climaxes. When readers read a book, what they see is a sense of immersion, the story of the characters, the structure of the world, and the content itself. Words are just a tool to express the story. I can write such a long paragraph and make these suggestions seriously because I see the author's persistence. I hope the author can improve himself and persevere. I hope to see your book on the list one day.

Since starting college and working Busy work or life has made it impossible for me to read books with peace of mind Even if I read an e-book by an author I like, I can't help but glance at ten lines I briefly read the first chapter, which felt like a physical book The author's final words made me feel unspeakably melancholy. Just like the author said, I want to make myself happy at the beginning of writing. I hope that the author will have the joy of starting 70,000 words in the future Come on ✊

This is a book that is easy to read for beginners. I feel a lot regretful about this novel. Now... Looking back, I have a different mood.