Collecting Ghost Stories in Japan

Supporting role video@reader

Name: Yamabuki Sakura Gender: Female Race: Dragon Talent: Wind, Rain, Ice and Snow Priesthood: God of Water and Snow Skills: Summon Wind and Snow, Control Mountains, Rivers and Seas, Exorcise Demons Zhenyao Character: Black belly Human form: Wearing a chrysanthemum golden step, wearing purple and pink, a mixed kimono with a gold bay leaf in the middle, a peace bell hanging next to it, and a pink right sleeve with a golden butterfly. A beautiful girl wearing wooden shoes Original body: a slender body with blue-black dragon scales, a head with coral horns on the back and a tail, a dragon with yellow mane and a pair of flame-shaped manes on the front claws br>Introduction: The last dragon hatched in the end of the law wants to live a long life and have fun. One day, he meets the male protagonist and feels that his temperament matches his personality. He signs a contract with him and adventures together Brother, if you see my supporting role, please reply to me and see if my character can appear? If possible, set it as the essence version, thank you @reader

The first-person perspective has a strong sense of immersion, which is understandable. However, if the later chapters are mixed with third-person descriptions, it will feel inconsistent in comparison. But overall, the writing is good, keep up the good work 🤭👍

After reading the first chapter, I didn't like the first person narrative, so I decided to give up.

The first person version is too easy to explode.

If the story is 10 points, my personal evaluation is: first person -5 points.

Author, your writing is good. I would like to give you a suggestion. Write the story in an infinite flow. It will be popular.

There are too many messy stories interspersed, resulting in the main story being fragmented. The first-person perspective makes the protagonist's weak personality even smaller. There are too many feudal superstitions interspersed in the middle without understanding that power belongs to oneself. The protagonist's weak and passive character causes everything to be driven by events instead of actively promoting events. He fell in love with Platycodon at first and then immediately fell in love with her. It is estimated that there will be repeated love-hate entanglements to force a wave of youth later, and his character is indecisive. It is full of poisonous points from beginning to end, and the author is not suitable for writing online articles at all. This style of writing can only be seen in newspapers, magazines, literature or physical reading books more than ten or twenty years ago, and it exudes a sour smell of the old era. The current results just prove everything. The author is not suitable for writing online articles.

I've read it about once, the Three-Legged Bear novel, and I only like this collection of ghost stories. The horror atmosphere in some parts is sufficient and interesting, but overall there are still many holes that have not been filled in. In addition, the male protagonist has been chasing Kikyo at the beginning, and then turned around to chase the police officer's sister. I thought that the male protagonist was very focused on chasing Kikyo, but I didn't like this plot very much. I hope the author can write more novels about folklore gods and ghosts

The first person view is really weird and uncomfortable, and very distorted