Stand Back and Let Your Husband Come

The author should update soon, I look forward to how it develops next!

Be bold. The mighty heavenly dragon, the World Honored Ksitigarbha, and the Prajna Buddhas. Great Law Mantra, Diamond Flame

Let me tell you my opinion. After reading Chapter 15, I feel that everything the protagonist does is very smooth. Moreover, this novel should be a White Snake fanfic, but from the chapters I have read, the scenes between the protagonist and Bai Suzhen are still a bit less. Also, does the protagonist's plug-in "Three Worlds Mission Book" have no confidentiality mechanism? After all, he is a person with super authority. Liu Chenxiang, a mid-level person, saw it as soon as he came. It was still when the protagonist was not around. Fortunately, Liu Chenxiang was a child I watched grow up, so he didn't have any bad intentions [funny]. The rest were just some minor problems, nothing serious. The following are the comments I would like to make, and I hope they will be adopted. The first point is the part about the white snake. According to the original work, it seems that Bai Suzhen was going to become an immortal, but she didn't know why she couldn't become an immortal. She went to ask her master, Old Mother Lishan, who still had an unfinished life with her. After doing some calculations, she remembered that someone had killed her many, many years ago, so she came to repay her kindness, and then lived a happy life. She became an immortal only after passing through this calamity. The second point is White Snake, which follows the first point. In fact, you can do it like this. The protagonist takes Fahai's bell and rushes home. When they get home, Bai Suzhen comes out to greet them. Because the author's setting is that they just got married, it should be Bai Suzhen who comes out to greet and puts her hand on the protagonist from top to bottom. The outstretched hand, and then the bell was triggered by the transmission of some evil spirit, and the bell rang. Bai Suzhen was accused, and Fahai was about to arrive. The protagonist was a mortal, so he had no feelings. When the protagonist was about to explain, Fahai arrived and said, "Donor Xu, don't be afraid to let the poor monk accept her." Then Bai Suzhen Suzhen looked at the protagonist and thought, "I didn't expect you to be such a person." She was disappointed, and the protagonist was also confused. Then when Fahai was about to accept Bai Suzhen, the protagonist realized that with the help of "Check-In", the protagonist stood in front of Bai Suzhen, and then said something domineering and disgusting. If you click, (I don't have a girlfriend so I don't know what is good), then the protagonist repels Fahai with the help of the "Three Realms Mission Book". When the protagonist goes to help Bai Suzhen, he is dragged into the "Peach Blossom Dream Picture". In reality, Bai Suzhen watches the protagonist faint and is full of curiosity about the protagonist. Then write down some small details in life and remember to match the era. Later, when the protagonist went on a mission with Liu Chenxiang for the first time, he and Bai Suzhen either went out for a few days to have something to do, and then opened the door to greet them when they came back. This time they could hug each other, which happened to be in contact with the previous ones, or they didn't tell her. As soon as the protagonist came home, Bai Suzhen hurriedly hugged the protagonist, and the protagonist looked confused, which made the protagonist feel a kind of feeling in his heart. It feels very happy, and then the protagonist thinks about why Bai Suzhen is so kind to him when he and Bai Suzhen have not been together for a few days (so the protagonist is single, and girls are so inexplicable), so the protagonist regards Bai Suzhen's kindness to him as Bai Suzhen's love for the original owner of his body, and lays a foreshadowing in the protagonist's heart. Later, you can write that the protagonist misunderstood and then left, and Bai Suzhen went to find it again. This kind of chapter can be used to spread dog food. The third point is about the setting of the "Three Realms Mission Book". As I said before, the confidentiality of this thing is too poor. Also, I can't understand how they did the "Peach Blossom Fantasy Picture". You can change the "Three Realms Mission Book" so that no one else can read it without the owner's permission. After reading it, it will be blank. There is also a "Peach Blossom Fantasy Picture" that allows others to enter or kick people out, as well as a blacklist. The fourth point is the world view. Compared with the world view, the world view of "White Snake" has not yet become a fairy. Compared with "Journey to the West" and "Primordial World", it seems too weak. Also, the protagonist starts with the saint's skills at the beginning. Will there be a feeling that the step is too big and it is easy to make nonsense. The fifth point is, is there something wrong with the character of the protagonist? The above are just my personal opinions. I hope they will be adopted. I hope this book will get better and better.

The results are so bad? Just four posts