Young Dreams

It's very well written, keep it up. Also, a little suggestion, there seems to be room for modification in your wedge. Everything else is pretty good!

After reading the previous chapters, here are some suggestions: 1. Most fantasy articles go directly to the topic. Most of the parts explained in the wedge can be described through the memories and psychological activities of the heroine in subsequent chapters. Firstly, it is fascinating, and secondly, it can enrich the description of the dialogue. If there is something touching, it will definitely attract a large number of readers and increase readers' interest in reading. 2. Similar to other reviews, the writing style is a little immature and the dialogue descriptions are pale. Most of them are so-and-so and how-to. This is a common problem for novice writers (I was the same at the beginning). The published chapters can also be modified. If you are interested in signing a contract, you must enrich the three golden chapters, get to the point quickly, highlight contradictions and exciting points, enrich the character settings, and lay down the foreshadowing. 3. The number of words in the chapter is too few (generally the number of words in a chapter is 2000+) and the layout of the paragraphs is not reasonable (too much dialogue, too little narration). In short, there is still too much dialogue. The description of the character's psychology, movements, expressions, and appearance can be strengthened to enrich the character's dialogue. In addition, the description of the surrounding environment can also be used to highlight the characters and render the scene. 4. Generally speaking, there are quite a lot of areas for improvement. In the Golden Three Chapters, it is taboo to have pale dialogues and throwaway settings throughout the chapter. Dialogues that have no practical meaning can be written in the form of descriptions. It doesn't matter if there are slow spots, they must attract attention. 5. It is not easy for newcomers to get involved in fantasy, especially fantasy female channels. If you want to stand out, you need to practice your writing skills. You can usually read more works signed by big companies, and you can learn a lot. (The comments are a bit venomous. If you don't like them, don't comment. You can delete them. Newcomers encourage each other.)

Well, after looking at the large works, I will leave you a comment without further ado. Try to tell me what I really feel after watching it. First of all, when female video writers write fantasy, their writing style is much more delicate than that of boys. Emotional description and detailed description are the advantages of female authors. I feel that this aspect is a little lacking. The language in many places is a bit straightforward and plain. However, it is normal for us newcomers to have immature writing. Well, it can be strengthened in a direction. There is also a small problem. I wonder if you have noticed it. There seem to be a few typos in the introduction. Many people will read the introduction first when reading your book. It would be best to change this. Hey, thank you very much for your support (⑉°з°)-♡, let's work together (*°∀°)=3

I've felt it for a while, it's okay, keep going

The writing is very fluent and the story development line is also good. It has been collected 😁

Come and support, come on ＾0＾~!

The previous one was okay, looking forward to the follow-up

The smooth writing style makes it easy to give people a sense of picture. It's very good. Let's work together.

It's very interesting, the description is very delicate, it's easy to get a sense of the picture, and it gives you an immersive enjoyment.

The novel written by the author is very good, and it suits my taste very well. Come on

Come on, keep an eye on you! Votes for you!

I'm kind of looking forward to the next plot.

I feel like the later writing will be more exciting. Come on.

Come on, the writing is great

Here are some suggestions. You can make the introduction simple and attractive, which will make it easier to attract readers.

Don't stop updating, there are two updates every day, it feels like it's almost the end, it's a bit short