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This kind of online game that can control your memory can pass the review. In real online games, the safety of players is the first priority. Who can accept an online game that can control your memory?

Does it look good? I think the beginning is poisonous. Is the protagonist licking like that? People don't like the protagonist and treat the protagonist as a companion, but the protagonist still remembers her when he dies. To put it nicely, it's called devotion, but people don't like the protagonist. Doesn't the protagonist only like her because she is beautiful? Love at first sight, love at first sight. There are so many people who like her, so it's better to be the protagonist!

It looks good, but the updates are a bit slow, there are too few chapters and too few words.

Come on, author, but I hope there will be more if the writing style is stable and the author has enough time. It's not enough.

I will definitely go back to American comics when the time comes. I just hope that Carter can be the male protagonist. Bucky is enough for the American team. As for the AOE skills, it is much worse to give a dual-sword style. It feels bad to give specific skills. It is too obvious, as if it is what is missing. If the male protagonist is given dual-swords, there is room for self-training and room for self-creation. It can also improve combat power and can also be used as a killer. It can be a small AOE.

There are a few questions, whether the protagonist is in a virtual world or it will be proven later that this is the real world, and where he is sparring with that woman. The dynamic vision mentioned earlier can capture the trajectory of the death dust. Why can't he beat the woman? Everyone is being beaten in slow motion. . Is it a bug?

You can't be a eunuch anymore, can't you, can't you, can't you?

Everything else is fine. It's just that your description of the characters' emotions is too much. It's not that you over-write, it's description, it's narration.

But as far as I'm concerned, I still hope that my girlfriend in the real world can be the one that the male protagonist still likes.

I went back and looked at it and found that the protagonist lacks telekinesis or telekinesis. Even if the ability is racial mutation, he should still have it. This is also the case in the movie. So I think the author can consider this,