Journey to the West: I'm Just the River God

I feel like the writing is okay. The plot is at least nonsensical. It's just that the power system is too low. That is to say, the low-end cultivation version of Prehistoric is just a little bit better than the nuclear bomb saint version of Prehistoric. Low configuration version of Honghuang

I read 20 chapters, 40,000 words Let me talk about the advantages first. The story is not bad, and the description of the story is also good. However, the characters in the story are not very outstanding, and the writing tends to be slow. There is a lot of popular science content, it's true... A lot. Overall, it is a good book, and it looks pretty good. It is not like an ordinary novice article, so the results may not be that good for the time being, but if you write more, you will always become famous.

Speak your conscience. Creativity. Plot. The writing is still good. But there is still room for improvement. Support new writers ~ add chicken legs to you 🐷🐷🐷

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By the way, the plot of Wuzhuangguan has a big problem. Even if the monkey bar fruit tree is overturned, it is just a trivial matter for Zhen Yuanzi, but the portrayal of Qingfeng Mingyue is obviously over the top. Even in the original Journey to the West, Qingfeng Mingyue scolded Tang Seng and his group, but in the end they just said they would wait until Zhen Yuanzi came back to deal with it, and they did not do anything extraordinary to Tang Seng and his group. After all, the group stole other people's treasures. When people are angry, they just curse a few words, but the protagonist kills them directly. How petty is this? Then the protagonist kills two disciples, but Zhen Yuanzi treats them as if nothing happened. This is something I never expected. Although they are only two disciples, it is acceptable in the wild, but being killed by several outsiders in their own base camp, isn't this equivalent to the protagonist stepping on Zhen Yuanzi's face and Zhen Yuanzi coming up to him with a smile? I'm afraid that all the gods and Buddhas in the world will look down on Zhen Yuanzi. After all, a few so-called destiny people can take over Zhen Yuanzi, so does that mean that someone with a higher level can step on him? Then this Earth Immortal Ancestor is just like that. I hope the author can carefully consider and modify this plot. After all, I think it has no impact whether or not these two people are killed in the subsequent plot. The only impact is that the reader's sense of the book will be reduced.

The main character doesn't have the same personality as the River God in One Hundred Thousand Bad Jokes. It feels a little bit different. I feel like it would be better if he had the personality of the cold River God.

The world view written by the author is too small. To be fair, you are writing about the earth, which does not have the majestic atmosphere of the prehistoric times.

I hope the author can understand the difference between the Golden Immortal and the Saint, as well as the high configuration. Don't have the nuclear bomb saint. He can take ten meters in one step. The Golden Immortal Da Luo can refine the innate treasure, and he has been in seclusion for hundreds of years... Especially the leapfrog killing, which is basically non-existent in the prehistoric era of high configuration. A small realm is a world of difference. No, some low-level heroes are so terrifying that Taiyi Jinxian can counter-kill Daluo Jinxian, and even a quasi-sage who has read a strange book will be drowned by water... And when Hunyuan Daluo Jinxian is reached, I will add the following realm. After that, the normal Hunyuan Wuji Luo Jinxian is also called the Heavenly Dao Mirror. After that, it seems to be the Great Dao Realm.

Why don't you give Calabash Baby a name? The Calabash Baby is called the Big Baby and the Second Baby. I always feel that it's not good. Why don't I give them a name? For example: Because the gourd baby comes out of the gourd, the surname is Lu Lu Chifeng Lu Chengling Lu Jinyu Lu Yu Lu Qinghe Lu Yinglan Lu Zixu

Big orange is the most important thing (o´ω`o)ノ

I think your Journey to the West should be like a higher world. If you want to expand the world view, you should have a detailed world setting. For example, the world includes the Small Thousand World, the Middle Thousand World, the Great Thousand World, the Great Realm of Chaos, the Great Realm of Void, and the Realm of the Upper Firmament... You can try this. In terms of power level, from the very beginning Qi refining, Kong Ming, Golden elixir, Yuanshen, Mahayana, Overcoming tribulation, Void immortal, Earth immortal, Heavenly immortal, True immortal, Golden immortal, Taiyi Jinxian, Daluo Jinxian, Hunyuan Jinxian, Hunyuan Daluo Jinxian (12th level of saint), Hunyuan Wujiluo Jinxian (12th level of Hedao), Chaos Daluo Jinxian (9th level of Heavenly Dao), Chaos Supreme Immortal (the ultimate realm of Heavenly Dao), Dao Dao Immortal King. Dao Xianzun. The Immortal Emperor of Dao... Can also be called the Immortal Emperor of Ji Dao. Actually, I used Realm when I was writing novels. At that time, I only wrote outlines of dozens of chapters for the college entrance examination, so I haven't written any more in the future. You can try to use it.

Personal opinion: God controls the authority of heaven and earth, that is, authority. For example, it can be as small as the change of the four seasons, as big as the six reincarnations, the replacement of life and death. This type of God is God. As for immortals, immortality is the foundation and freedom is the pursuit. You can use the authority of heaven and earth, but you cannot control it. The authority of gods cannot affect immortals.

Name: Jinyun (Snow Phoenix) Race: Phoenix Talent: Summon Ice and Snow Inheritance: Phoenix Heritage Skill: Taiyin Book Weapon: Sun and Moon Essence Wheel Treasure: Snow Phoenix Palace Parents: Ancestor Phoenix Occupation: Snow God Character: Decisive Image: A majestic woman wearing a phoenix crown and a blue-black phoenix robe sitting on a phoenix throne Animal shape: wide wings, long feathers, pure white, exhaling and inhaling with falling snow Cheng Bing Introduction: The Sixth Daughter of Feng travels around the world and meets the male protagonist by chance and discovers that his luck is amazing and wants to follow him to improve his cultivation My brother read it and I will reply, thank you if you can add the essence version {"NickName":"Rushi Muxiao","UserId":335914513}

If you want to become an immortal, then you can become an immortal. You can write about the Three Kingdoms 😅. In Journey to the West, writing about the Three Kingdoms is so unconventional, and you just want to be your river god. You yourself come from future generations, and you think there are some people in the future who have faith. No matter what gods you are, they are all profiteers.

To be honest, Journey to the West is not a calamity, and the follow-up Wu Tian Na Zhen is worse than Fengshen. During the period of the Conferred Gods, Taishang and Yuanyuan agreed to the eastward crossing from the west. It feels like the gods and mounts in the sky are all here to assist the Buddhists in their eastward journey. Without them, there would be no difficulty in 81.

I seem to remember that the timeline of Xian San is much earlier than that of Xian Yi. Ling'er's mother is Qing'er, the daughter of Bai Doufu and Zixuan. .

Was it a little too hasty?

I love this book, and I'll give you half of my daily recommendation votes

Driving my beloved little motorcycle, meow meow meow meow.

According to legend, there is a long river in the universe. It runs through the entire universe and is boundless. Some people say that it is connected to another universe River God: The long river in the universe is also a river.

After reading the latest chapter, the protagonist first got to know Little White Snake, and was kind to Little White Snake, and then a little Xu fell from the sky and wanted to be kind to Little White Snake. If this plot continues to develop, it won't be a bloody routine. I haven't watched many soap operas, but I've heard too much about them.

Everyone suggested that there should be Taiyi realm, so I changed the settings. The new setting is as follows: As the way of heaven becomes more and more perfect, it is difficult to achieve Daluo, so some golden immortals want to change when they are poor, and have another direction of cultivation. Instead of cultivating Daluo Dao Fruit, they instead cultivate Taiyi Dao Fruit and become Taiyi Golden Immortal. However, compared with Daluo, they are inferior.

Author, it doesn't matter what you write, but please don't belittle Cao Cao in such a way. Cao Cao is a great hero of his generation, and his personality charm is naturally amazing. Liu Bei was a wandering man throughout his life. He always paid attention to his own moral cultivation and treated others with kindness and righteousness. In order to invite Zhuge out of the mountain and visit the thatched cottage three times, his caliber was evident. The Shu Han regime was established, and the Han Dynasty was able to continue again. It formed a deep friendship with Guan and Zhang. Guan Yu was defeated and fled to Maicheng. Liu Bei was angry and launched an army to attack Wu. Although it led to the decline of the Shu Han, its friendship was evident. Every time I write about Liu Bei's inability to do anything, he can fight for hegemony in troubled times. How can a man who later stood up against Cao Wei and Jiangdong be so miserable? I couldn't even jump to it. I felt uncomfortable after watching it. I just couldn't stand it. 🙄

Is the Milky Way a river?

The author is writing quite well now.

Friends from Tieba come and cheer you on!

I changed the cover to a new one, but it hasn't been approved yet. I'll send it to you first, haha.

This monthly pass spirit is so powerful. I hope the author will update it more and help me with his words. Otherwise, I might not be able to subdue the monthly pass spirit with my own strength.

I like the subject matter and ideas very much, but the descriptions of the characters are quite toxic to me personally. For example, Tang Monk and Liu Bei are timid and fearful, have a high self-esteem, have trouble with good things, and have a lot of disasters. I really like the wonderful idea of ​​the river god traveling to the west. If you omit this part of the poison, I feel that I can still read it. I still hope that the author will not be so obviously derogatory to a character when writing.

It's so disgusting that I can't read it. Three sentences can't be separated from two words: but but but but but but. I just made up the number of words.