Doomsday Enclosure Retirement Care

Analyze the poisonous points (different from person to person): ※Attention! ! ! It's really not a lie. I analyzed it very carefully. I typed it out word for word after repeated thinking. There is no nitpicking! ! ! 1. The heroine's parents are too kind and do not conform to the real society. According to the author's settings, the heroine's parents are definitely not cannon fodder at the bottom. They can climb to high positions without being stupid. 2. The heroine is either mentally retarded or a doormat. There are too many mentally retarded characters, which affects the reading experience. Although it can highlight the heroine's wisdom, it feels like too much force is used. 3. Supporting characters have no memory points. Characters in good works will make your first reaction when you see the name be "Oh, it's her." For example: Eri Yi in "Dragon", when you see the name, the first reaction is "little monster" instead of "protagonist cp". This work lacks memorable points, so please try your best. 4. There are too few decisive personalities. Although the progress is not delayed, the overall feeling is not comprehensive. The heroine is not a decisive personality. She has no thoughts about her parents' decisions and is somewhat mechanical. 5. The supporting characters are mixed. Under normal circumstances, there are only 15 to 20 supporting characters around the protagonist. This is a more scientific rule of remembering supporting characters that is most popular among readers. If there are too many memory cannon fodder in the first part of the novel, the readers will be unable to remember or misremember the characters, resulting in mismatch between the image and the characters, which will reduce the number of readers. 6. There are too many details, and some things that can be written in one stroke are written in detail, giving people the feeling that they want to have a good number of words but are not very skilled. Finally, let me reiterate, it's not a bar! ! DaDa is a new writer, and it is normal to have some shortcomings. What I point out does not mean that I don't like DaDa's books; please don't make comments like "I'll give you the pen, you can write if you have the ability." Tea drinkers don't necessarily need to know how to make tea. I just gave a general introduction to some points to pay attention to when reading online articles. There are many missing points. Welcome to add. The above explanation is purely disgusting because of being scolded by trolls, do you understand? ? 😅

Very well written, cheers to the author＾0＾~

Come on, 🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

I don't have any books to read, so I can only come to the girls' circle to see if my poison resistance will improve even more.

Dad, I invested in you, but you must keep writing, I dare not pay attention to you in this life (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

Why is it so messed up! No life in the world is spared! ! ! I'm going to vomit blood! ! ! Ah! ! ! 😭😭😭

Very well written, keep it up🌹🌹🌹

How should I put it... I thought this was a light-hearted post-apocalyptic novel, but it turned out not to be the case. If I was looking for a book with a dark style to read, I don't need to read a female channel. The character of the protagonist is very procrastinating, and the writing style of wanting to save but not willing to save will make readers tired. Some supporting characters waste too much pen and ink, leaving readers with a conflicting feeling. For example, the woman who cheated, the woman who was cheated, and the rich man, you don't need to use so much pen and ink to describe them. If you write too much, it will leave an impression in the readers' minds. Then no matter whether they live or die, some readers will be unhappy. On the contrary, you have briefly mentioned some important supporting characters, the car modifier, and the protagonist's parents and friends. This is not good, and there is a feeling of unclear levels.

Chapter 66: The mentality of just watching the fun and having fun is getting colder at 70? You changed too quickly, you were caught off guard

Author, where have you been? Come back and write a book soon.

Everything else was good, but the ending was too rushed and rubbish.