Tian Ling Has No Way Out

May I ask the author, are you a novice writer? This book is quite well written.

I have read it, this should be classified as fantasy, right?

Very well written, please support me. Come on 😁

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Comment each other politely, some of the characters' actions have no basis and feel a bit inexplicable. The introduction is quite passionate, but the male protagonist in the play is a bit cowardly. You can think that he is more stoic in his heart and create a psychological description to express his loyalty and filial piety, but generally it is okay.

It's very well written, keep up the good work! Received

1. A period is a period. Do not use a period instead of an ellipsis. 2. The first three chapters are unremarkable. After reading the plot of the previous paragraph, you can basically know the content behind it. Nothing new. 3. The segmentation is sometimes good and sometimes bad, which makes people uncomfortable to watch. 4. It seems that the protagonist's cultivation level has soared in two days. Isn't he afraid that his foundation is not strong?

Fire Tongs Liu Ming🤝

The male protagonist is a bit cowardly. Even though my father yelled at me, there was no explanation.

A story of love and protection, come on!

Not bad, worth collecting, cheers for the author!

Recommended by Gomu, I support it.

The plot is exciting and the fighting scenes are magnificent. It is worth watching and encouraging! !

Now, I'm not saying that you should pay attention to your punctuation. Another one, it feels like your plot is straightforward and some of the protagonist's actions seem inexplicable, maybe because there are too few descriptions. For characters, it is not just words that describe them, but their actions, demeanor, and appearance are equally important. Finally, the segmentation needs to be modified. Most of the paragraphs are too long and the reading experience is not good. Okay, this is my review, remember to comment on each other

Don't be deceived by him, he copied this. He just messed up the order. This book is "Xinhua Dictionary"

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The introduction is a bit protracted, but it should be concise and highlight the key points. The beginning is also a bit of a narrative. The beginning must be concise and clear. The first step of everything is the hardest. A good start can retain enough traffic, especially when there is not much traffic in the early stage. It is recommended to modify the beginning, focus on the climactic conflict at the beginning, and lead out the story line. When the point comes, the suspense must be buried to attract the suspense of reading further. This is the top priority. If you can control it, it is recommended to lay a foreshadowing and dig a hole. Come on, come on💪