My Senior Brother Shouldered the Apocalypse

Everyone, how do you like this book? Interesting? Xiao Shui felt unsure. . .

I have read this book from Demon Emperor, and I have read more than seventy chapters. I really can't help but want to make a comment. It has nothing to do with the setting or the outline. It is mainly about the author's writing style, and I want to talk about it in detail. I don't know if the author has ever thought about why the protagonist in Demon Emperor had good grades before becoming an immortal, but suddenly collapsed after becoming an immortal. The first few dozen chapters of this book did not perform as well as Demon Emperor. I personally feel that this has nothing to do with the setting, but because the Demon King has a strong story in the early stage. From a reader's perspective, reading novels is actually reading stories. A good novel should allow readers to immerse themselves in it, and this immersion largely relies on stories. Various elements in the novel, characters, environment, ability settings, etc. Are all connected by stories, and then form a logical and self-consistent system. The stronger the story, the more realistic and detailed the description of the elements, the stronger the reader's sense of involvement. The Demon King is pretty good in the early stage. Under the general system of the country and the rivers and lakes, with the imperial city as the main background, the environmental elements involved include government departments, schools, armies, assassin organizations, sects, brothels, etc.; The character elements include emperors, concubines, civil servants, generals, students, assassins, monsters, immortals, etc. Then you construct a suspense, which is the identity of Xia Ning and the protagonist, and use this to unfold the story, and it has a certain level of hierarchy. This story connects all environmental elements and all characters. The feeling given to readers is that a painting is unfolding, and we can feel that a real world is constantly expanding. Because you provide a self-consistent story logic, readers can use their own imagination to deduce the next plot, so we will discuss it and there is room for imagination. But there will be no more after becoming an immortal. Your plot completely revolves around the protagonist, or you have cut off too many elements, whether it is the environment or characters. It is like playing a stand-alone game, where the protagonist is alone, doing his own thing, only practicing and fighting. What's even worse is that you let the protagonist hide behind the scenes, and now even the excitement of the battle is gone. The protagonist is completely disconnected from the surrounding environment, with no interaction and no story. So we feel that it is beginning to collapse, because readers have no logic to rely on for self-deduction, because the battle process only requires the author's self-determination. Those novels with good reputations have huge differences in writing style, but most of them have one thing in common, that is, they are written carefully. Because of the details, the world described in the novel is real, and the storyline is complete, so readers can relate to it and make their own associations. This actually has little to do with the background setting. What impressed me deeply was the first third of "Release the Witch". Ermu basically set the story in a small town and the surrounding lands, but because of the detailed writing, he wrote the feeling of a big world. I think the author really doesn't need to pay so much attention to the setting issue. In fact, most readers don't care what your system is like, because the author can explain it himself and set it at will, so that's not really the point. You may change your outline over and over again, but in the end you still have to focus on the story. The battle process is important, but it is not as important as imagined, because for Shuangwen, most battles can be simplified into three sentences: The protagonist uses Kung Fu A; The enemy uses Kung Fu B; You can see if all the battles are simplified, can the remaining parts still interest the readers? I think the first half of Demon King is doable. As for this book, I can't think of too many. The main reason I write so much is because I feel that if I keep writing like this, it will be a pity for Xiao Shui's writing style. Your writing is good, the battles are well written, and the setting is fresh, but there is no story, not many clues, the logic is too weak, and there is no rendering. After reading dozens of chapters, I don't even have much impression of the country of the White Dragon King. Again, the problem is that the protagonist is on a single machine, and in your novel, because he has to be a "hermit", the sense of being on a single machine is even stronger. For a novel, this is truly fatal. So the author can really take the time to think about how to better integrate the background setting into the story, and how to show the world in your mind better and more carefully, instead of worrying about what kind of world I want to set. But after all, I am not writing novels, and I don't know if I have made it clear. I am just commenting purely from the perspective of a reader, hoping that it can really inspire the author. No matter what, I still hope this book will get better and better!

It feels like the author is framed by Wudi Why do I read Wudi's article? In one word, cool. Background, world view, even characterization and plot are not that important, because this is not my appeal. As long as the main character pretends to be cool and slaps me in the face, that's fine. So if this book is judged by the standards of invincible flow, I think it is unqualified because it is not enjoyable at all. What is the attraction of this book? Suspense in the story. What exactly are strange powers and chaotic gods? What does the proximity of two planets mean? Is that planet the earth? Wait The plot routine I thought at first was that the protagonist actively or passively solves events one by one to collect clues and decrypt them. So I have always felt that this book should be labeled as fantasy, suspense, and Cthulhu. Your explanations of the answers in the two chapters completely confused me. Did you give me a way of showing all your identity cards at the critical stage of Werewolf? Let me make a suggestion. If you start a new book, first determine the direction of writing? In other words, decide what kind of readers you want to attract. Then determine where to spend more time. As for Invincible streaming, I feel that the current mainstream ones are anti-routine, cautious and courageous, relaxed and funny. Anyway, there is not much emphasis on the world view and background.

The book is too ingenious and lacks soul. I will overturn it tonight and update it tomorrow. Don't worry!

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Shennong: "Teacher! Nowadays, the human race is newly born, and it is different from the beasts in wisdom. I am also a member of the human race. The Chao clan taught the humans to build a place to live, the Zhenyi clan gave the humans things to keep warm, and the Suiren clan gave the humans fire to live in. However, people from my clan often died from the green things on the ground, and some died from hunger. There is a lack of food in the tribe, and I want to find food for my clan to survive." Xia Yuan: "The techniques taught by Chao, Zhenyi, and Suiren were all observed and made by them. Wild animals choose holes to take shelter from the rain, and we can also build holes to shelter from the rain. Wild animals use fur to keep warm, and we can also make fur to keep warm. Thunder from the sky strikes trees to produce flames, and the flames roast the bodies of wild beasts to form cooked food. We can also make them through There are other ways to create fire, and beasts can convey information through howling and urinating. We can also convey information through speaking and writing, so Cangjie created characters. You want to find food for your people, what can you observe? " Shennong: "I observe that wild beasts live by eating green things on the ground. I call these kinds of things grass, and some people in the tribe have died eating grass, which shows that this grass has advantages and disadvantages. I want to taste the grass all over the world and distinguish the edible and inedible grasses." Shennong: "Although I died, my clan survived, so what if I die? Back then, my teacher taught Brother Chi You how to defeat the gods, but my brother led the tribe astray. Although my brother died, he left hundreds of soldiers for the tribe's use. From then on, the tribesmen did not need to run away from the beasts, and one person could fight them. Did the brother leave with a smile before his death?" Xia Yuan: "The Yellow Emperor had the Xiong clan cut off the heavens with one sword. There will be no immortals after that. Gods are also mortals. If you die, you will never be resurrected. My teacher will not advise you, so just go!" "I will never forget the kindness of my teacher! There will be no more time to serve the teacher. Please forgive me! I'm going!" Shennong paid Xia Yuan the gift of master and apprentice and left without hesitation. Her dedication to her people made her small body feel tall. The previous human lifespan was about 500 years, but it was extremely fragile. Due to the rupture of the heavenly path, the spiritual energy gradually decreased, and the life span was generally only more than a hundred years. After Shen Nong said goodbye to his master, he began to eat grass around the tribe. She named the grass she tasted for the first time "", and she began her journey of tasting herbs... She walked for a long time, during which she encountered many wild beasts and sang many harsh things, but she survived. As of today, she has tasted 998 kinds of herbs and collected many samples. She has walked around and arrived at her tribal settlement. She has taught the tribesmen about these herbs and medicines. After the teaching, she went to the master's residence. I confided to the Master many, many incidents, various beasts, trees, herbs, food, and mountain peaks. Not seeing her for many years, she has grown a lot, but her eyes are still clear. After tasting nine hundred and ninety-eight kinds of herbs and foods, her body was extremely thin, probably due to poisonous weeds. Today, she found a kind of grass she had never seen before in front of her master's door. She asked her master, but he didn't know what kind of grass it was. As a grass taster, she took the grass home and studied it for a long time, and decided to eat it. As soon as he swallowed it, Shennong fell to the ground and died. The people in the tribe were horrified and knelt down in front of Shennong and cried bitterly. After a long time, they named the herb "Broken Heart Grass". The toxicity of the gallbladder is not likely to kill people, but Shennong accumulated too many toxins in his body. The gallbladder was a primer, activating all the toxins at once, and Shennong died as a result. . Finished! A small fan may not write well ('-ωก̀)! Please bear with me ( .ớ ₃ờ)ھHehehe. Please add more details~✿◔‿◔✿Hey hey hey {"NickName":"Shearing Water II","UserId":311438099}

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[Must read: Because this is a fanfic, and it's my first time to write a novel, I wanted to write about Ning Bao's experience that is different from the one in the main text, so I spent a whole article talking about Ning Bao's home. Please feel free to comment. The winter in Donghai Kingdom a hundred years ago was several months longer than in previous years, and the snow was heavier than in previous years. Kyoto, Town King Ning Zhenhai stood in the yard looking at the heavy snowfall and couldn't help but sigh, said, "This heavy snowfall has lasted for so long this year, and all walks of life have been affected. Even the coal reserves in Kyoto are now running low. If spring doesn't start, I'm afraid it will have a big impact. Ah." As soon as she finished speaking, a woman with a graceful and graceful temperament walked from the hall to Ning Dinghai, swept away the snow on her shoulders and body, opened the cloak on her other arm, put it on Ning Dinghai carefully and tied it up At the same time, she said, "Your Majesty, tomorrow is the day. The court meeting is held once every half month. Why don't the marquis make a memorial and ask the emperor to order local government offices to provide relief? At the same time, the Qintian prison has the ability to observe the celestial phenomena and let them see when winter will turn to spring. That's right, but Madam is pregnant now, so you don't have to worry about the affairs of the court anymore. Now you just need to take care of yourself and our child." This woman is Han Mengyao, the princess of the town. She is seven months pregnant. Her bulging belly cannot be seen because she is wearing a cloak. Han Mengyao nodded shyly and asked, "Does the prince like the prince or the princess?" Ning Zhenhai smiled and said, "Whether it is the prince or the princess, as long as he can grow up safely and protect himself in this court. Okay, madam, you are pregnant now. Although you have the second level of heavenly lock, it is not good to stand in the snow for a long time. My husband will accompany you back." After that, he accompanied her back to the house. The next day, before the sun has risen, Donghai Kingdom's half-monthly grand court meeting is already ready to begin. This is a court meeting that must be attended by officials of the third rank and above in Kyoto and its surroundings. After kneeling down, the emperor's chamberlain said, "If you have something to do, please leave the court if you have nothing to do," the court meeting officially began. Ning Zhenhai immediately stood in the middle of the hall and said that he had something to report. At the same time, he took out the memorial written yesterday and handed it to the emperor by the chamberlain. After reading this, the emperor nodded and said, "The king of Zhen is worthy of being the white jade pillar of our East China Sea country. He is always concerned about the country and the people for me. I am right!" The person came to draw up an edict. Due to the cold winter disaster, all walks of life were suffering, and the people's livelihood was difficult. As for the person responsible for the disaster relief, since it was the King of Zhen who asked for it, then the King of Zhen should be responsible, I can rest assured. " As for the Qin Tian Jian's observation of celestial phenomena, he did not mention it. Ning Zhenhai saw this and said, "Your Majesty, what about the Qin Tian Jian's observation of celestial phenomena? " The emperor looked at Ning Zhenhai, wondering what he was thinking, and said, "That's right. "Ning Zhenhai thanked him and stepped back. The disaster relief matter has come to an end for the time being, and the next step is for other ministers to report. However, Ning Zhenhai is an upright man and is dedicated to serving the country and the people. Therefore, if there is anything inappropriate in the matters reported by other ministers, he will immediately point it out, causing dissatisfaction among the ministers, but those who support Ning Zhenhai will stand up and replace him. He spoke, so the meeting ended in a commotion. Returning to the palace, Ning Zhenhai told Han Mengyao that the emperor had ordered him to provide disaster relief. Han Mengyao said with a smile, "I know your prince's temper. Even if your majesty doesn't give it to him, he will still fight for it. So I will go and pack for him now. It will take a long time for him to go, so you must be careful." The prince and I are waiting at home for the prince to come back. " Ning Zhenhai nodded seriously, and Han Mengyao went to pack her bags. Soon the traveling convoy was ready and arrived at the gate of the palace. Han Mengyao also packed her bags and handed them to the servants. She stood at the gate of the palace She looked at the carriage in the distance and waved her hand until it disappeared. It happened that the snow that had been falling for several days stopped. She looked at the wheel marks left by the carriage on the snow, waved her sleeves, used her true energy to erase the traces, and returned to the palace. The horse passed by the window, the cold winter has finally passed, Ning Zhenhai has been gone for four months, today is the day of the great court meeting, and it is also a big day for the Zhen Wang Palace. The Zhen Wang Princess gave birth to a princess for the Zhen King The whole palace is here. Happy about this, Han Mengyao looked at her daughter lying next to her, touched her face, and said to her, "Daughter, your father is so happy to see you when he comes back. If you count the days, your father should be back in a few months. It will be great to reunite the family by then." " "The Princess of the Town, Han Mengyao, came out to receive the order!" At this time, a sharp shout came from outside, accompanied by the clash of armors. Han Mengyao called the servants to ask what was going on? The servants said that the chamberlains and imperial guards from the palace were coming. After all, Han Mengyao was at the second level of the Heavenly Seal. She was not as weak as an ordinary woman after giving birth. She got up and came to the front yard, knelt down and said, "The Princess of the Town, Han Mengyao, is coming." "Edict". I saw the eunuch opened the imperial edict and read, "The king of Zhen Ning Zhenhai swallowed up relief money and grain during the disaster relief period and accepted bribes. He was exposed. After investigation by Jin Yiwei, it was found that he secretly made weapons and hoarded them." Two taels of silver, intending to rebel! But because he had made great contributions to the country, he abandoned his cultivation, was banned from the palace for life, and was demoted from the prince to a commoner. 80% Of the family property in the palace was confiscated! All the servants had to be dismissed. If anyone resists the order, the whole family will be executed. I appreciate this!" After saying that, he handed the imperial edict into Han Mengyao's hands and waved his hand. A group of forbidden soldiers pushed Ning Dinghai in, who was in a cage and was unconscious and embarrassed. Han Mengyao looked at this and couldn't believe him. She knew what Ning Zhenhai was like best. She wanted to say It was absolutely impossible for him to rebel. At the same time, she also understood that the most important thing now was not that. She took a deep breath and shouted, "The daughter of the people accepts the decree!" After speaking, she raised her hands above her head and respectfully accepted the imperial decree. Everyone in the Zhenwang Mansion left. Everyone knows that from now on, there will no longer be the Palace of the King of Zhen, there will no longer be the White Jade Pillar that the emperor calls the sky, there will no longer be the King of Zhen who serves the country and the people with integrity, and there will only be Ning Zhenhai who is left with the charge of rebellion! [I am very grateful if you can see this, Because this is my first time writing a novel and it is a fan creation! So I wanted to create a different Ning Bao, so I spent nearly two thousand words telling the story of Ning Bao's family. I know there must be many shortcomings, but I will work hard to improve it. Thank you again for reading this.]