The Demon King of Douluo

After reading more than twenty chapters, the pace is too fast. In order to be a dog for the protagonist group, the Soul Saint level body can't even carry 250 kilograms. After a while, I said that I need to be low-key. How low-key is it to the sky? Is taking the initiative to cause trouble also called not causing trouble?

What a running account. Who did what, who wanted to do what. After one chapter, the protagonist develops (some) new skills, the heroine (strength/combat experience) grows, Shrek wins (the game), and then the next chapter continues. I burst into tears... The description, characterization, and storytelling are there, but they are insufficient, very insufficient. This is what is commonly referred to as writing style. (But I still read it because it's free) Action description is a very useful thing, you can try to add more. Example: Xiao Wu pulled Tang San away. [As usual, Xiao Wu only had eyes for her third brother. She skillfully wrapped around Tang San's arm and pulled him forward. Tang San originally wanted to say hello to Zhou Ming, but without checking, he was staggered. He had no choice but to wave his hand to say goodbye. ] This example may not be very good, because the author's main description should be on the protagonist Zhou Ming. It may be out of this consideration that he took away one thing in just one sentence. However, this also has a negative impact, that is, it will make the supporting character eclipse, and it will be over once the action is completed, and it will not let the reader feel that the character is a person. Especially when the protagonist is a cold and ruthless character, the supporting character will be eclipsed, which will have a devastating impact on the interest of the article. Fortunately, there is an original work, so everyone knows more or less what the supporting characters are like. The breath of life is not enough. This is a pity, as the description skills still need to be improved. Although readers mostly assume the role of the protagonist, the interaction in the spiritual world does not really need to be clearly expressed (name the cat). Meow asked if he could add some details when dinner was ready. Luo Xin'er replied that he could add details if he hadn't yet. The protagonist who was watching from the side could also add details. Where? Why not add details?

The protagonist has no sense of existence, licking the master all the way, not to mention the details. It's really uncomfortable to watch.

It feels like a running account, are you giving a lecture?

Okay, don't argue anymore. What are you arguing about here? We read whatever the author writes, and if it crashes, we just abandon it and that's the end of it!

Just got out of a drug pit. As a result, I fell into another drug pit.

Support, the heroine must be added, otherwise it will be too boring. The heroine must be Zhu Zhuqing. Let Dai Mubai die! He is not worthy of Zhu Zhuqing

Write a fanfic. If you don't split the cp and still call it a fanfic, make one.

Well, Shrek's character design is basically fixed. Can you change the heroine? I'll write a passerby who is in the original novel. …

Make a heroine, a single heroine would be great, or make an accident with Zhu Zhuqing, I feel she is the most pitiful, not having a heroine would be bad, right?

I couldn't stand it after reading hundreds of chapters, so I summarized these poisonous points.

Brothers, please quit! I'm not saying this book is indeed poisonous. The protagonist must be a dog if he wants to be alone. I was quite speechless about having to lick Tang San. In addition, I suddenly felt that the three views of the protagonist in this book were not very correct. It's almost the same as Tang San in the original work, and it's also very double-standard.

This book is actually the author forcibly adding a person of his own imagination to the original work, and it remains almost unchanged. A person who can threaten Titled Douluo is still there to maintain the original plot. I saw the story about eating fairy grass and felt that the author's writing was very strange.

A lot of people are poisoned. I said it was not a good thing about Wuhun Palace and Tang San, but some of them ran to Shrek and said they looked down on the master, but they still ran to lick them. 😤😤

A licking dog is a licking dog. No matter how big the problem is, the licking dog can still be saved.

The master doesn't want you to go to Shrek, but you shamelessly stick to it yourself. I was really speechless when I saw this.

When writing Douluo Tongwen, no one is willing to read it without Zhuqing Qian Renxue. Xiao Wu won't say it anymore. Most people don't have this idea. There are not many people who like Ning Rongrong. Zhuqing, Xuexue and Dongdong, these three are definitely needed. After accepting Dongdong, Nana can warm the bed. This is the basic framework of Douluo Tongwen. Also, you can write random things, but you can't follow the original work.

After Chapter 50, you won't be able to watch it lightly (I thought it was too cheating before, but it's barely acceptable). At 15 years old and level 75, you still tell me that you're not a cheat. Why, it's called cheating when you become a god at the beginning? Moreover, I always follow the group. If I don't follow the group, I won't have a substantive plot of my own. I'm not Shen Nong. I only represent my personal views. I'll leave it to you to criticize me.

I feel that the author made "gods" too powerful. Generally speaking, gods are just cultivating to level 99 and then inheriting a god position. Of course, such "gods" shouldn't be very strong, and when a soul beast reaches a million years old, there is only one god position difference between it and a god. In other words, when a soul beast reaches a million years old and cultivates by himself, Refined, I personally feel that it is really no weaker than a second-level god or even a first-level god. Closer to home, the protagonist here has a million-year soul bone, seven hundred-thousand-year soul rings, a hundred-thousand-year soul bone, and a super bug skill in the Soul Saint City. I feel that he can kill gods, but why can't he defeat Emperor Tian here? Emperor After all, Tian is just an 800,000-year-old soul beast. In Douluo II, he is on the same level as Munn. Munn's soul rings are only yellow, yellow, purple, black, black, red, red. Just this, he can match Ditian. The protagonist (during Soul Saint) has such a terrifying soul ring that he can't beat Ditian. Even the gods can poke and poke. To be honest, "god" is just a high-end version of a 100-level soul master and a million-year-old soul beast. Anyway, I feel that the author exaggerated the "god" and ferocious beasts such as Ditian. Generally speaking, a soul master with a soul ring of black, black, red, red, gold, and gold can kill gods (excluding soul bones). I feel that this is a bit exaggerated.

There are hundreds of millions of poisons, but it's not a big problem, and I don't know how many times I broke my defense before I even finished reading 10 chapters.

I feel like it's just a running account. There's no plot, no process, no dialogue. If you're writing a paper, just give it a title and what to write about. It's just like reading a paper. You'll just go through the battle in one go. I've read hundreds of chapters and the whole process will be gone through in one go. What's the point?

This is the system traveler who acts as Tang San's dog. It's really funny. Nanny Wenguiye crawls.

The author graduated from Hengshui Middle School?

Is this protagonist worthy of the name Mo Jun? When did licking dogs have the title?

I just read Chapter 6. The author is completely unclear about the setting of the original work. There are too many setting errors.

It's too messy. It's super dissuasive. It's messy in every sense. I wrote about adding points before upgrading, but the second time I saw it, the initial soul power was still at level eight. Also, when I upgraded to the meditation method for the first time, I used 27 energy from the basic to the intermediate level, and I was promoted to the advanced level with 13 energy. Where did this energy come from? The protagonist only upgraded to the first level with fifty points in six years.

I have been interested in more than a dozen chapters. The pace is too fast. In the blink of an eye, I am over 40 levels. In one chapter, there is a great soul master, in one chapter, there is a soul master, and in one chapter, there is a soul sect. If you write it like this, you will become a god in no time.

Invincible is too fast, but it doesn't feel satisfying

Douluo travels through time and becomes a soul beast

The combat power collapsed too quickly, but the rest is okay! Mainly because the protagonist's level changes too quickly