Walking Alone Beneath the Starry Night

First, the problem of paragraphing. It is recommended to split paragraphs that exceed 4 lines into 4 lines or less, subject to the APP. Paragraphs that are too long will be tiring for readers to read. The popular perception now is to let readers read from top to bottom instead of from left to right. In the fast-paced world, everything is fast. Second point, regarding the opening map issue, in addition to the timeline, it is best to lay out a city-level map instead of proceeding directly to the community. Readers do not know what this community looks like, and which area or city this community is in the world. Until the road names and office buildings mentioned later, without map descriptions and environment descriptions, can you imagine where in the city it is located and what it looks like? Third, the setting of the protagonist, my personal opinion is that after the protagonist dies once, he is resurrected. Although his performance is scary, it gives the impression that he quickly accepted the setting. Is this the performance of a dead person after he is resurrected? He was instantly frightened and calmed down in an instant, and then he was talking and laughing with the person who resurrected him. Shouldn't there be some more writing to make the protagonist's character a little fuller? The next plot of finding the murderer is the same. If you are looking for the murderer, wouldn't it be better to investigate in private? If you tell the secret to others, wouldn't it be easier for the person who heard the secret to die? Since the murderer has already killed someone, he shouldn't care about killing another person. Is the protagonist the kind of person who would drag unrelated people into danger? What's more, it was exposed. I feel that even if the plot requires it, it should be stable enough considering the age of the protagonist. Overall evaluation, the writing is online and the plot is acceptable. Personally, I suggest that it would be better to flesh out the character of the protagonist, and then it would be much better if the plot arrangement was more rigorous. (ง˃̀ꄃ˂́)۶ Come on!

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The subject matter is good and the writing is solid. Pay attention to paragraphing and characterization. Sometimes it is not necessary to write clearly what color socks the character has. Sometimes it is enough to give the character an action. You give her a characteristic and make a fuss about it. This way the characters will be full. Your scenes are written with great care, come on! Let's encourage each other!

After reading the first few chapters, I can say that the writing is quite good, the details are handled very delicately, and the paragraphs could be shorter. Overall, this is a very good article.

I have read the first three chapters. The writing is good, the writing is smooth, and the writing style seems to be serious... The details are very good, as if it is a traditional literary book. I just don't know if it is a hard science fiction. The first three chapters are not particularly attractive to me. Come on!

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I really like some of your sentences.

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