The Wen Chai Gong of the Feminist World

It's only six chapters to get familiar with the environment and go to a school? Can you familiarize yourself with the environment quickly? I'm so embarrassed that I feel like having cancer.

It's actually double-opened, is it okay to eat, sleep, and sleep?

It can be seen that the author wrote with great care. If you change it, you should get good results. Come on. 1. The story line described in the article is a bit delayed. Try to finish the world view in the first three chapters. 2. Typesetting, too much description of inner drama. As a result, it looks a bit cluttered and makes it difficult to concentrate on watching. 3. The interaction between characters can be more concise. It is best to finish it in a few words so that there is enough space to describe the details of the characters. For example, the male protagonist is a girl and the younger sister is a boy. The character described at this time is definitely not the male protagonist, but the inner drama and action description of the younger sister. 4. The inner drama of men wearing women's clothing is generally not too much. Try to expand the scope of the worldview in Chapter 4 and reverse some things in the patriarchal world. Finally, I want to ask the author, can the author dress up as a woman? If you don't reply, 👴 I'll ask again later.

If a book like yours is popular, I'll just give it to you by eating ten tons of Oli. The first 5 pictures didn't even mention anything, that's all. Of the five pictures, your inner drama takes up three and a half. How can you be so clever and show off your abilities? I have read so many novels, and your inner drama is the most dramatic I have ever seen. We are not fools. You don't need to write so many inner dramas. All kinds of watery words come at your fingertips. I really can't help but want to scold you. It makes me so angry. What a waste of my time.

Poisonous Weed, brothers, please withdraw. There is really a lot of inner drama. More than half of the chapter is inner drama.

As long as there is no supervision, double opening has a future.

You probably have too much inner drama. We are all not fools. It's okay to wash it out properly. It's very verbose to write so much.

I've read a few chapters. Sorry, farewell.

To be honest, when I saw the dual opening, I immediately wanted to remove it.

One flaw is that the main character's "he" is written as "she"

Well…………~~Come on, brother, goddamn daddy

Author, please keep updating, please keep it up first

What does the latest partial spiritual power mean? If there are too many elements in a book, it will become a hodgepodge. At that time, if you try to write well in all of them, you will end up being unable to write well in any of them. (||๐_๐)

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