One Destiny Star

I have read the first four chapters. The writing is good and fluent. I can't tell a general story setting yet. The overall style is a bit biased towards female characters. After reading four chapters, I can't tell whether it is the uncle male protagonist, the nephew male protagonist, or both male protagonists. There seems to be no foreshadowing of the war. It feels a bit like fighting for the sake of fighting... A very traditional fantasy novel.

Damn, after reading your article, I really feel for you. Such a good article should be seen by more people! Your action descriptions and environment descriptions, including descriptions of people's clothing and appearance, I think are simply the best among us little and new brothers. The details are described as carefully as a needle, and the action descriptions are soul-stirring. It is very enjoyable to watch, and the picture is also very rich. The structure of the chapters is also very clever. For example, the Tiandi Sword Sect's army management plan and the marriage issue between the fifth family and the He family are all written very naturally and cleverly. Here is something I would like to suggest~ You can add some psychological activities of the male protagonist. My current impression of him is that he is very powerful and has good martial arts skills, but I am not very impressed with his character. Adding some mental activities will make the characters more flesh-and-blood and vivid. The above is my personal opinion~you can ignore it~ In addition, I am investing~I hope your work will have a bright future~🌹

I skimmed through it and found that the plot was acceptable and the writing was acceptable, not good, but not bad either. However, after reading the whole story, I always had an inexplicable feeling in my heart. I felt that there were some errors in this novel, but I couldn't pinpoint them. ... The whole story is pretty good, at least the plot is sorted out fairly clearly, keep up the good work.

Hmm... After reading the beginning, I feel that the author is very sophisticated, the story flows very smoothly, and the writing style is excellent. I didn't sign a contract, probably because of the market. Like my articles, they don't match the current market very well. If you have already written it before, there is no need to change it. It is recommended that when writing later, the author should respect the market as much as possible without touching the bottom line of creation. Overall, it is a good book. If you like this subject, you can definitely get into it. The first few chapters are basically not poisonous. Big cheers for the author! (look forward to return visit)

The fighting scenes are well described and the characters are vividly created! Come on!

Sorry, I can't stand it It's not that the writing is bad, the writing is actually good, but there are too many descriptions in the opening, and the plot doesn't advance much, so forget it, but there is nothing attractive in the first two chapters. The reader has no interest in spending it with you. It's not that the master doesn't recommend this kind of writing, and the master often leaves foreshadowing in this kind of description. The author did not see these signs in the first two pages of the article, but it seems like he is enjoying himself

The skills, or characteristics, of this book are really a highlight It's like the martial spirit of Douluo, the guardian spirit of Zhenhun Street I don't know how to make suggestions. If I give readers a deeper look at this point and spread out a magnificent and beautiful picture of heaven and earth, I feel it is really a selling point I hope this book will get better and better in the future, come on, the author is great 👍👍👍

Updated, I still like to see this full of ancient fairy tale flavor.

......... The flow is good, I don't know what to say... I know, my writing skills are not as good as yours😂

It's well written. I've already invested in it. I hope you can read "Hong Xiang Luo" and leave a review, preferably the one mentioned in this chapter. Thank you, boss😘

Wow, it's pretty good. The characters are richly described, and the book cover and title are also beautiful.

Come on, the votes for this number are over, I will vote for you with another number - what a little girl

Hmm... I think it looks very good. Anyway, I silently clicked to save it. You can do whatever you want 😃

The writing is very good, and the writing is quite comfortable to read in sections. However, it is recommended that the introduction be greatly revised. The title and introduction are the readers' first impression of a book. The most important thing about an online article is that it is clear at a glance. This introduction cannot convey the excitement and content of the book.

See Chapter Eight. The characters are qualified, and the background and environment descriptions are excellent. Some plot twists have logic problems.

To be honest, I admired the author's generous prose, the character descriptions are vivid and the environment descriptions are also relatively beautiful. But in the first battle, I didn't understand what it was for? There was no explanation of the background, and the fight started for no reason. Was it to create conflicts just to find conflicts? Because I have only read three chapters, I really don't understand who is the protagonist? The author has divided it into large sections, which is very comfortable to read and has a good sense of involvement!

The details are well described and the narrative is grand. For a work like this to only have these recommendation votes, it's a bit of a condescension.

Persistence is victory, I will always support you 🌹🌹🌹

Don't start with a kid on the first chapter, it's annoying, it's like filling up a meaningless chapter with a meaningless word count, and it's useless in attracting readers and editors. Many of you have made a mistake, that is, you don't know how to recall or narrate. Remember that recall must be done when the pig's feet are frustrated in the middle. The main narrative line must be drawn out in the first chapter, of course not absolutely, but it is the case in most cases. The first chapter should be either funny, exciting, or your writing is very powerful. There must be something attractive to make readers and editors continue to read. The book is written for everyone to read, not for yourself. You can have semen, it's up to you.

I read the first chapter. It's okay. 😁 Recommendation vote is given.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group, please update~ If you really don't want to write it anymore, just finish it instead, so that people who invest in you can still get some starting coins.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~