Black Wings V

I came here in response to a certain author, and I plan to raise it first. Come on, author (✪▽✪)

At the request of an unscrupulous author, I came here to check in

I have one thing to tell you. I will go out to work in a few days. I don't want to study anymore. There are some problems at home, so I have to go out to work to earn money to support my family. I won't rush into the novel update, but! The update may not be that fast, please understand.

I heard that women's clothing is being distributed? Can it increase the heat? Really? 😅

Here, set up a new floor If there are any problems with the novel, please point it out if you have any suggestions! I will read them one by one Then I will make some arrangements when I have free time and then find time to revise But I will also keep some things The writing will also take the time to revise after reaching a certain number of words! Which chapters are written strangely, or seem awkward or illogical Remember to point them out, I will take notes and take the time to revise them, thank you

It's very well written, keep it up!

Are you still a junior high school student? I came here from the forum, and someone said that your novel idea is good, but your writing style is about the same as that of a girl's Mary Sue Xiaobai. I came here specifically to take a look. Well, I want to say that it is indeed true. I don't mean to tell you to give up. I just think you should mature in a few years before writing. I don't mean to hurt you. I am also an author, but I am a eunuch. I can give you some small opinions as an experienced person. Don't write anything randomly, and don't let anyone you know know if you write it! Otherwise you will definitely regret it later! I am now 20 years old. I just read a few books before I suddenly thought of writing online articles elsewhere. I also wrote tens of thousands of words a day and wrote hundreds of thousands of words. Now that I read the content I wrote before, I want to go back in time and beat myself to death 😭. Looking back, it is all black history 😭. The key to writing novels is to read more. First, read for a year or two to broaden your horizons. After accumulating some things, start trying. Don't start writing just after reading a few novels. Here to cheer you up! Speaking of which, can you post photos showing your face in women's clothing? (Private 😁)

To put it simply, there is a problem with the description of your book. Your long paragraphs of rhetoric are not good and concise enough. You can revise it, or try to use the most straightforward sentences to express what you want to express in your next writing. After all, online articles are not prose. What you are reading is a story, a plot, not a gorgeous vocabulary. This is my personal opinion.

Someone maliciously reported me and blocked several chapters. They also specifically warned me that otherwise the book would be blocked, so updates were suspended The book I wrote recently has not been published. When will the ban be lifted and when will I continue writing!

The starting point collection monster came here and has collected it.

I always feel that the title of this book has a strong chuuniu flavor. Is it an illusion? 😂

The third person description is good, but the scene changes are confusing and the dialogue is awkward.

Come on, come on, 😌😌😌 The idea is very novel, I give you a thumbs up, come on, it's only 160,000 words, there's still a lot of room.

Don't be embarrassed by other people's good deeds, okay? Newcomers just have good data, and making themselves better is more important than anything else.

Long time no see now that it's over. I really like what the author wrote. The writing style is good. I will support the next book when it comes online. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

I didn't read the book in place, but I just went to slander others. What kind of operation. Read more, be thoughtful, and don't say people have low emotional intelligence all day long. Who is hehehe?

The first part is completed 🤭 The launch time of the second part is to be determined! It may be that the first part is completely rewritten and reprinted It will be released directly and then the second part will be picked up. Thank you for watching❤ Xin Majia is preparing to write the plot of a book he bought 🤭 so stay tuned After the work becomes stable, three books will be updated at the same time