The Most Is the Solution to the Cloud Without Love or Hatred

[Vicious Tongue Book Review] I am an unusually poisonous tongue, so I ask the author to be very prepared. 1. First impression This title of the book is too literary and artistic, so it is taboo! This title of Ning can dissuade 90% of readers. I read other comments and learned that Ning had received the site manager but had not yet sent the contract. I actually recommend that Ning contact the editor to change the title of the book. Ning's title must influence readers to choose the article based on their first impression. I won't mention the cover if you haven't signed the contract yet. After signing the contract, you must have a serious cover, don't use your own DIY one! You can rather read my previous posts to find the description of the cover, so I won't go into details here. 2. Introduction If the title and cover of the book dissuade 90% of readers, then this introduction is enough to dissuade the remaining 10% of readers. It is not easy for readers to click on the title of Ning's book and read it. Is Ning's introduction worthy of them? Don't pretend to be profound in your introduction! Such a sour introduction has no practical significance. You should rather remember that you are writing a web article. Naturally, the first consideration in your introduction is how to attract people and how to be commercial. It is also a fantasy romance, and I recommend a small theater-style introduction like "Ning Xiaoxian's Royal God Record", which is simple and easy to follow. Or a synopsis like "Krypton Gold Fairy" which is not a small theater but achieves the purpose of a small theater can also be used. 3. The first three chapters The rhythm is well controlled and the chapters are broken very well. The third chapter just ended when the heroine asked a strange man about cutting out his heart, which immediately aroused my curiosity. But after reading three chapters, I found that there was something wrong with Ning's punctuation. Ning turned it back and looked at it himself, so I won't go into details. 4. Writing style The writing style is acceptable, not novice, but the beauty is lacking. If all descriptions are written directly and directly, it will definitely lead to the problem of insufficient aesthetic feeling. Rather try to use rhetoric, synaesthesia and other rhetoric. Don't describe it in a straightforward way. In addition, reduce some unnecessary inner drama. The heroine's inner feelings do not necessarily have to be written directly in the impression, but can also be expressed through the description of the scene. All scene language is love language. Taking it all together, the author doesn't have many literary talents. If he practices his writing well, all the above problems will be solved. I would like to ask the author to hold back on the venomous tongue mentioned above and hold it back from me. ——Cheng Yici

Unknowingly, I was attracted by the plot, and the story in the cloud was so exciting, come on

I will revise the first few chapters in the near future. I asked for advice on Zhihu, and found many problems, so I can't take it lightly. 😠😠😠 It does not affect the plot and characters before and after, but adds some more to clearly explain the pattern and background. 🙏

Already invested, the author will give you a lot of support＾0＾~

I'm finishing my application. The ending of the story is that the clouds kill everyone and directly destroy the world. But her current psychology is contradictory. She should be a person who has nothing to argue about and lives in confusion. Ji Ji saved her and saved her with her life, so she would not commit suicide because of this emotion. Besides, she and the living corpse (his mother) were the ones responsible for Ji Jin's death. Although the source can be traced back to Han Xihe, this reason seems far-fetched. Yun Niang is not that kind of person. Everything she loved was lost, and she had nothing to hate. The root of Han Xihe's revenge on her was Jie Yingyue (her predecessor) and Xin He. The former had been solved by her long ago, and the latter would be killed by Han Xihe. There is no doubt that this book, as its name suggests, revolves around Jie Yunduan. When the protagonist loses his role, there is no need to continue the story. Killing Xin He is Han Xihe's revenge story. It's my fault, I don't know how to narrate the story reasonably, I don't have the ability to tell a complete story.