Daqintian

The concept of this book is quite good, but the writing is not that good, but I can read it. Personally, I think the biggest problem is that the layout is unclear. It looks a bit confusing, or there are too many typos, and the fighting scenes are a bit petty. It doesn't look exciting. I will add the bookshelf first and then check it out after a while. Good luck, author!

This is my first time writing a book, and there may be some inadequacies and flaws. You book friends can make suggestions, and I hope you can support me more.

The subject matter is good, and the events should be explained in an orderly manner. The fighting scenes should be easy to understand after seeing them, and don't make people confused. The description should be more atmospheric and passionate, and bring yourself into it. Think of yourself as the protagonist and you will die if you lose. Don't limit yourself to a circle. If the protagonist is stronger than the opponent, the writing style should be concise and concise. For example, when you start fighting, the enemy's leader has fallen. In the future, the forces that oppose pig's feet should be ruthless, and eradicate the roots if they can eliminate future troubles. Don't be soft-hearted and leave offspring for others who will grow up to cause trouble for the protagonist. It's good that you have already started writing the Gambit.