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I was invited to review it, and I was quite surprised to see the ending. It can be seen that this is a story that the author really wants to record. Whether it is real or fictional, it should be a sentiment. I won't comment more from the perspective of online writing. This book really doesn't look like an online writing. I still put him in my review booth, maybe someone will want to read some simple stories.

It took me a long time to read the first chapter, but I found that it is really difficult to understand without some knowledge and accumulation (experience). Some paragraphs are very long and the uncommon characters of people's names can only be understood after looking up them. I've only read a few chapters and it's hard to comment/make comments. . (And most of them are reading online articles recently. I haven't read this kind of literary novel for a long time and it's a bit unfamiliar.) Then it's time to leave a comment. (I'm not a professional, I hope Haihan will give me a review.) The author's writing style and the description of the characters and plot are absolutely no problem. They are quite powerful and solid. This cannot be written without a certain amount of reading, accumulation and experience. There are some problems. I have summarized them in a few points. I don't know if they are correct or not (I have little experience, just for reference): ①The names of some characters are a bit unfamiliar, which is not conducive to readers reading and remembering the characters in the book. ② Some places (paragraphs) in the text are too long and dense to be suitable for online writing, but it is still acceptable for publication in a book. ③The chapter names are too random. For online articles, good chapter names can keep readers reading. If you publish a book, it is equally important. If you publish a book, you can also remove the chapter name ④If you create your own lyrics, you can add punctuation marks, and the emotion may be stronger. (There was once a book about the real-life urban genre that I like very much, and he did it like this; but he put the description of the song at the end of a chapter, and at the end briefly stated the protagonist's sadness. I don't know if it's right, but it's just for reference) ⑤ Some descriptions are not very good, (I took out several classics from the bookshelf and compared them, [Yu Hua's: Resurrection, Xu Sanguan] , brothers/disqualification in the world, etc.]) It seems that there is no better way to express the emotions that the author wants to express. It may also be that I am not familiar with things in the past few years. In short, I have no sense of substitution (maybe I have no experience) —————— Finally: In short, this is a book worth savoring, very realistic, and worth reading again and again. However, if the author continues to write this kind of book in the future, it is recommended to submit it to newspapers and periodicals to avoid a good book being buried! ! ! 🥺😭😭😢

It is better to divide the paragraphs into paragraphs. If it is too long, it is actually not comfortable to write visually, and it is generally difficult to read.

It's very broad. I like the foreshadowing that was brewed at the beginning, but I was almost persuaded by my name to quit 😅

Your introduction looks uncomfortable, it's too long.

With support, come on! 🙂

Received. Welcome to visit again. Come on, author

A very good work, we need to savor it carefully, like wine. It is worth recommending. I look forward to future updates. Come on, the author 🙂👍

DaDa is still very powerful. Other DaDa have already given their suggestions, so I won't make any unreasonable comments. Come on, I still like this kind of work. There are too many words, so I will read it slowly.

To the point, it's acceptable, keep going😊

The author's writing style is very solid, and his storytelling ability is also very strong. However, the many names in the first chapter seem really tiring, and it is easy to persuade him to quit. I believe many people will feel the same as me. I suggest that DaDa avoid this problem in new books in the future. I look forward to opening a new book and keep up the good work!

Traditional literature is not very popular in Qidian's market (●°u°●)​" It's very well written, keep up the good work

I would say it is a really good novel. It's just that it's not popular at the starting point [there's nothing you can do about it]. There is nothing to say about the plot or characters. I have no difficulty reading in paragraphs. Hahaha🤭🤭🤭Can I be more arrogant?😏😏I only have one comment, that is, some characters' names are in unfamiliar words, which may be difficult for some readers. Others are great! ! !

Suggestions: 1. The paragraph is too long. 2. There are many traditional Chinese characters and no phonetic notations (don't expect readers to understand them all) 3. One chapter feels like a book to me, it's too long. 4. The author's writing style is very good, but this is an online article and not a physical book. You have to divide the length into paragraphs according to the way readers read on mobile phones. (Of course, if the author just wants to record something as a souvenir, just pretend I didn't say anything)

Collected, I feel it is a rare piece of serious literature!

This book is still very informative, and you can see the author's intentions. If the author wants to open a new book, here are some suggestions~ As a family, don't be surprised First of all, there are many uncommon words in the name. Secondly, you should pay great attention to segmentation. It will be tiring to read a long paragraph like this. Finally, it is best to write the dialogue concisely and clearly. If you explain the background, you can directly use narration instead. Dialogue does not require too much written language, just be straightforward. In a long dialogue, readers can easily lose focus. Come on, look forward to the new book.

It feels quite real, I'm looking forward to the new book.

It's really not easy to write this kind of book. It can be published by publishing. It's really... The author's writing style is smooth and natural, and the plot is novel, but it is estimated that it will be difficult for online readers to bear the patience to read it. If this book is used as a published reading, there is no problem. However, if it is used as an online article, you must pay attention not to make a paragraph too long. If it is too long, readers will lose interest in reading. Come on!

Divide it into paragraphs and give a concise introduction. I am also a newbie, so please encourage me!

This book should not be called an online novel, but a novel. Internet articles are different from novels. Internet articles are articles for entertainment, while novels reflect what the author wants to express. I am an online writer, albeit a deadbeat. Novels are not within my ability, so I won't make any evaluation on writing. After reading it, the sentences are very careful. If you like it, you might as well try different flavors.

Is this the wrong place to send to the starting point? Are you sure this paragraph is appropriate?

Bro! You've signed a contract, why don't you write more and make money by putting it on the shelves?

Being persuaded to quit by names, it's true ~ the cultural level is too low, I don't recognize many names 😅

Savor life👍

In fact, this book is more suitable for physical publication.

Dear author, Kang here, you have made a fatal mistake~ That is: you submitted to the wrong site. The starting point is not suitable for this kind of article. You need to find a suitable website to submit suitable articles. At the starting point, I basically focused on Shuangwen Xiuxian, etc.~ Then there are too many words in each paragraph in the early stage. It is recommended to control each paragraph to between two hundred and three hundred words~ This is a very good article, both in terms of the smoothness of the writing and the plot of the story, it is a very wrong article! It's a pity that it was buried because I submitted it to the wrong site. Dear author, please come on! !

Already voted, looking forward to your next book 👍👍👍✊✊✊ This book is very beautiful, even if you chew it, you must finish it! !

Added it to the bookshelf, but unfortunately there are no recommendation votes today, so I had to post a post to encourage the author. Have you ever considered trying traditional literature? Such a good writing style...