Bai Ranchen

Yes, it's okay, but I personally think it's a bit of a problem. The pace is too slow. If it's the master Platinum, I don't care. Bai Wuchen is the protagonist in the first few photos, but why is he not the most powerful? Maybe the powerful part has not been written yet, but the three most powerful people in the back have already come out, so what development and hope does the protagonist have? Readers, you have read five or six pictures and still haven't seen where the protagonist's hope lies? The emperor of this country is the most powerful, and the most powerful person has such low taste? He is actually obsessed with imperial power, and under absolute strength, who is stronger and who is more powerful? Why would the three masters obey the emperor's orders? If it is for all living beings, it is nonsense. No one will hurt himself for others. What practitioners cultivate is themselves. You are the only one. How can a cultivator who fights against the sky obey the orders of the emperor's organization? It doesn't matter if he is not strong enough. He can destroy a city with one punch. Such strength is basically comparable to that of a monk in the transformation stage. Do you still need to obey the emperor's orders and be the emperor's dog? Like Battle Through the Sky, the protagonist and the old man appeared at the beginning. Although he is a waste, there are new shoots on the old tree and hope is still there. Your book has too many plates at the front, and you can't even see the hope of the protagonist. It may be exciting at the end, but readers don't have the patience to read on. Of course, if the plot can continue to be exciting and the protagonist gradually becomes stronger, it will probably be made into a TV series. Of course, no one will read the novel "Qing Yu Nian", it is just a TV series. Only when it becomes popular can everyone know about it. The forms of expression in novels and movies are different. Novels should let readers see hope, focus on the protagonist, and let readers see that the protagonist has hope. Only in this way can readers feel happy and not be too depressed, and then they can continue to follow. After all, you are not platinum or a master. The video is different. Even if you don't see the hope of the protagonist, you can still watch it with gusto.

I feel this book is going to be popular, the writing is quite good! Decided to invest in it, author, come on!

After reading two pages, I think it's okay to write, so I'll look at the follow-up.