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Writing Style I like it very much, it's poetic, not procrastinating or burdensome. . . . But the shortcomings are also obvious. In many places, the narrative is unclear, or there are ambiguities that require readers to think about it before they can understand it, which greatly affects the sense of reading [Story] The more innovative disrupted timeline narrative is quite interesting, but There is nothing new about monster killing and upgrading inside - or in the early stage, the charm of the main plot was not reflected in the introduction, and it is difficult to stand out among the massive books Look at other best-selling books [I really don't want to be reborn] [Super Mechanic] [Full-time Master] [Dafeng Watcher] [Legend of the Life Hunter] - The main plot and characters are very distinct, almost impossible to copy or have unprecedented characteristics. This is the core competitiveness of online articles [Characters] Very cute , just a few words and a few actions made me fall in love with the three foodie monsters and the male protagonist Tucao Baobao - but the design of the background of the two is too pale, at least it can't be seen in the introduction and the first few pictures. This is the same as the shortcomings of the story

The writing style of DaDa is very good, it is worth reading. I hope DaDa will continue to work hard and urge you to update it by the way 😁

Coming. I have a headache with this book, uh, because I saw that the author only planned to write 300,000 yuan, and he has already spent so much effort on the beginning. You will probably never adopt my opinion, because it will turn your book upside down. I'll leave a review, but I'll just talk about the flaws I saw In the book title synopsis, there are no big mistakes, but the recommendation for signing is absolutely useless. The editor will never read your setting chapter, and he will drop you at the beginning Using too many jokes will affect the perception and reduce the audience. The author's own complaints are very dramatic. These should have been done by the characters, and there are also a lot of missing subjects. I want to write in a funny style but I can't write it well. I suggest you search for the book "Back Off, Cinderella" online and learn from it In the first three chapters, except for the jokes at the beginning about Tingjun's words and Sheng Tingyi's words that I found interesting, the rest of the story was full of mist. Even though I read all the previous settings, I neither explained the cause of the incident, nor the settings in terms of combat and abilities. I just felt that there was a lot of description, but I didn't understand what it was about after reading it. For those of you who are from Tobi, you should know "Guilty Crown". Your first three chapters are basically equivalent to the first episode of Guilty Crown. After watching it, I immediately asked "What did I watch?", And obviously, you and Fan are incomparable. You don't have girls like Qi Mei to retain. Heart I read Chapter 45, but I didn't read the rest. Well, I mainly read the first few chapters That's it. I see that the author has written several books, and I can imagine that this writing method is a new attempt. I won't say anything more, come on.

The writing is very good. Come on 😁🙏

[Is anyone really watching? Seriously, if anyone is watching, please leave a message below. You can say whatever you want, but don't curse. Even a like is fine... I have almost lost confidence after playing alone for a long time... (Others read classics and history books when writing books, but I just read these...)

I won't talk about the nice things, but only the shortcomings of this book: There are many sentences that don't make sense Some plots in the article are not clear The article is a bit wordy

[Read 50% of the best writers] Personal feeling: It has exceeded the boundaries of ordinary online novels and has been upgraded to a level close to literature and art. From the perspective of the author of the online article: It talks a lot. It would be great if there could be more descriptions of facial expressions, actions and psychology! From a reader's perspective: 🌿, it made me laugh so hard hhhh The above is a comment 😎

Good guy, Tang Shui is on his way out, and it's already updated to over a hundred chapters. It looks like the reviews are good, keep it up ＾0＾~!

Come on, the writing is still very good!

The writing is good and the plot is pretty good too.

Wow🙂🙂

It's actually pretty good 🤭

I haven't read many light novels, so are all light novels like this? The writing is good, the article is very fluent and the language is also very good. Courtesy first, then attack. Here are some suggestions (it may not be regarded as suggestions, I have never read the advice from light novels...). You can add a little bit of scene description appropriately, and the picture may be better. Also, will the stems be a bit dense? You can use one stem over and over again, but there are too many types and I think it might be a bit confusing. The above is a small opinion. 🙂

Cheating, update! Pretty boy, you successfully attracted my attention.

Pretty boy, I, Ban, would like to call you the strongest 😁

Come on, author, keep writing, I'm already feeling cold when facing the physics paper (╥╯╰╥)ง

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