Chronicle of the Assassins of the Sun and Moon Society

Book title: "Ri Yue Hui Ci Ke Feng Yun Lu" (I'll try to see if there is a reason for this word in the title) Author: @GHGK Type: Martial Arts Published: 100,000 words Status: Unsigned Date of drug trial: February 1, 2020 Trial reading chapters: the first 4 chapters. 1. The overall story line is clear and clear. The story takes place in the Empire of fictional history. After the Empire was ruled for more than 500 years, due to the incompetence and incompetence of the "inter" ministers in power, the general Ke Cheng raised the uprising flag in the name of "Qingjun", and the assassins organized the Sun and Moon Meeting to respond to the call. In the process of overthrowing the enemy, the assassins of the Sun and Moon Society carried out the task of assassinating the "Jian" ministers. In the first four chapters, the author has clearly written this main line without any ambiguity, and the three golden chapters are used quite well. The background of the whole story is a bit like the history of the late Ming Dynasty, and the style reminds me of "Dragon Gate Inn". However, the officials and officials borrowed are from the Tang Dynasty. Since it is fictional history, forget it. However, I also mentioned in this chapter that the official rank of the general of the Tang Dynasty is higher than that of the Minister of War, and the Minister of War is a literary official. In your novel, the emperor appoints a military general with a heavy hand to serve as the Minister of War. It feels a bit strange. Or just re-define the officer level yourself, or change the officer name. But then again, maybe most people don't pay attention to this when reading online articles. 2. Highlights: The story is smooth. In the first four chapters, the plot of the story is very compact and there are many characters. The story is told quite well and the basic task of the novel is completed. The description of the scene and the feelings of the characters are particularly detailed. 3. As I just said, there are many characters, but I feel that the personalities of the characters are not established and are relatively flat. For example, Liu Xiao and Li Jiangsheng, are there any differences in the personalities of these two characters? The guard assassin Li Daosong who appears later seems to overlap with the two people in front. It is recommended that the author write a biography of a character and find out what different personalities different people have. When writing, pay attention to the character's language and behavior and reflect them. 4. The background setting is not too complicated. The author explains it in the form of character dialogue in the first chapter. This is a very advisable method and will not make people bored by the long background introduction. However, the tone and wording used in the conversation between the two were a bit unfamiliar, not like what people would say in everyday conversations, but rather like Guan Fang Taoism. 5. Still dialogue. Do you feel that the author is relatively young and a little unsophisticated in dealing with people and things? Some of the dialogues spoken by people in the novel are not very consistent with the identity of the characters, or are a bit imbecile. For example, in Chapter 2, Liu and Li rescued the guest and returned to the camp. The general guarding the camp did not see clearly who was coming, and shouted: "Who is coming! Is he from the Riyue Society!" I was a little confused when I saw it, but fortunately it was really someone from the Riyue Society. What if it was the enemy? Also in the second chapter, although Liu Li supported Ke's uprising on behalf of Ri Yue Hui, Ke was an outsider of Ri Yue Hui after all. Is it appropriate for Li to inform Liu of the personnel appointments and dismissals in Ri Yue Hui in front of Ke? Still in the second chapter, when the guest returned to the military camp, the soldier saw the unkempt guest, and it took him a while to recognize him. The conversation between the soldier and the guest was not appropriate. An ordinary soldier asked the general where he had been and why he was in such a state. The general answered seriously? Things like these are just some details and have little impact on the story line of the full text.

Because this is my first humble work, it is inevitable that there are many things that are not satisfactory. If you have any questions, suggestions, or corrections in the text that you would like to share with me. Please comment here and we will definitely improve it in the future.

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This book is quite nice

Updates so fast👍

I've read a bit and it's well written, but it seems hard to get ahead in martial arts nowadays. I feel like