The Soul of Samsara Great Qin

Haha, you damn well knew that was a fake imperial edict, and you also controlled hundreds of thousands of Qin's most elite troops. Didn't you immediately lead troops to Xianyang under the slogan of revenge for the First Emperor or something else? You actually had to escape from the golden cicada. Didn't you wait until Hu Hai became the second emperor to rebel? At that time, you won't even have a reason. You will be a rebel. No one in the world will recognize you for your rebellion.

It's written in such a mess that I can't understand it at all.

I'm convinced, the first chapter is unclear 😅😅😅

Speechless, the protagonist has traveled through time and has no memory? You are injured but you still have nothing to do, do you want to die?

I have no idea what I'm writing about, and I'm confused as to whether I can write down the protagonist's short-term route clearly.

The author's pen name has a very familiar feel. Yiwen Jielin seems to be a female character from an ancient Japanese comic "Magic Teacher", which I quite like. I also admire the author's perseverance. Here I would like to give you a personal suggestion. Don't shut yourself up. You can look at the types of best-selling books now, what kind of beginning, what structure, good ideas, how to use jokes, etc... In addition, I would like to recommend a writing guide book that I am reading, "Story" by Robert McKee. There are many similar writing guide books that you can read. Although I am also a rusher, it is because I learned about my shortcomings and want to make up for it. The above combined with your several years of writing experience may lead to different sublimation. Finally, come on, where there is a will, there is a way, and your hard work will pay off!