Jin Yunlu

This is unspeakable. Ahem, let me tell you a little bit first! The writing style is considered to be above average, which is pretty good. Character portrayal, well, this is not bad, the character setting is not broken, it's pretty good. (We haven't watched much of the plot, so I can't say that I'm afraid of being criticized by "die-hard fans".) Then there are shortcomings. Author, you have to know that details determine success or failure! Foreshadowing determines the god! First of all, look at your details. I remember you said earlier that the face of the fairy sister is covered by a veil. Author, you seem to have some misunderstanding about the veil. The veil is worn on the face, which can make a person's face appear virtual and real. And what you wrote is that the fairy sister can eat and have sex across the veil, but also smile across the veil. This is extremely poisonous. There are also foreshadowings, there are too few! More, more! There are two types of foreshadowings: one can be revealed by talents, which is called actual foreshadowing, and the second type cannot be revealed by talent, which is called hidden ambush. In summary, I've said it all, it's up to you to do whatever the author wants.

I just sit back and wait for this book to be published in the Hall of Fame, and then earn a wave of starting coins. . 😍😍😍😍🙂🙂

On the surface, this book reads similar to other novels, but if you read it carefully, the author's own characteristics are revealed in the words. It will definitely become a masterpiece in the future. Let's support it together!

Thank you for your recommendation votes and for the motivation you give me

The writing in big letters is really good, but I wonder why I chose another world instead of history or martial arts... Emmmmm, come on, come on!

Come on, you are a hit, with writing and plot, come on

From the perspective of a person who also writes novels, the author's writing style is delicate and has formed his own style. The layout is huge, but tight and uncluttered. It is really a rare masterpiece, and additional investment has been made. If you think it is good, please leave a comment for the editor to see, so as not to bury the good book. Please pin it to the top.

Interesting! Collect! Come on! Exchange visits!

If there are book friends who want to add their names, just leave a message and add them after reading the plot.

Come on, brother😁

Already collected, it's very interesting, but when I see the surname Sima, I always think of some strange things.

I'll go. . I'm not qualified to vote for recommendation. . Feel sorry. Agree to help each other. .

By the way, my recommendation vote was swallowed?

The day before yesterday, I voted for Snow Demon Emperor's book. Yesterday I was indifferent. If you chat with me today, I will vote for you too. If you don't want to chat, I will vote for myself 😒

Man, I wrote 100,000 words, but my application for signing a contract was like nothing 😭

That's right, I'm here again. I'll come over every now and then to take a look. I am so envious when I see that your book has reached the signed word count. Stop talking, I'm going to read your book.

Dear readers, does this song "Jin Yun" suit your taste? The answer is xxx How should I put it, the desire to destroy myself will never die. Jin Yun is preparing to appear again at a better time. Jin Yun just changed his body. The war of the Nine Kingdoms has not yet started a prairie fire, so how can he retreat easily. If it weren't for the universe to control everything, drinking in a boat would be a romantic affair.

Damn it! I haven't come over to see you for just a few days and you're so confused! So I decided to have a py with you regardless of whether you agree or not 😏

Go ahead, brother, how can you write faster than {"NickName":"Snow Demon Emperor","UserId":214777637}? Unlike me, I just want to be a salted fish.

It's full of martial arts flavor. I recently watched "Swordsman in the Snow" by General Manager, and it's very similar but similar in approach. Looking forward to this song of great separation being played again. One more comment😁😁

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง, looking forward to your new work

1. Overall story: In the Kingdom of Wei, after many wars, the Sima family of the Jin Dynasty became powerful. The story begins on the birthday of Sima Wuji, the father of the King of Jin. At that time, Bai Yu, the eldest son of Sima Shanren, returned from practicing cultivation, but he was a playboy who did not care about the family fortune but only wanted to wander around the world and live a happy life. The Great Wei Dynasty is about to rise, and this eldest son must have great achievements in it. Added the word "presumably" because that's what I predicted based on the chapter title. This story is slow, really slow. The first seven chapters only cover so much content. It's classified under fantasy, and there aren't many fantasy shows at the moment. Judging from some details, it should be a big story. I hope the plot will advance a little faster. 2. Speaking of details, this characterization is a great advantage of this book, but I personally feel that the display of some details is a bit cumbersome, which affects the advancement of the overall story. I think it could be more refined. Is it actually necessary to write four chapters about Bai Yu's return home? The details revealed are full of baggage. Bai Yu's beautiful master, the gym where he practices, the gap between Bai Yu and his father are all pitfalls, and it seems that the Jin Palace is also involved in a power dispute? I wish the hole could be dug bigger so it would be more fascinating. 3. Bai Yu's personality portrayal, why do I think it looks a bit like Jia Baoyu? No, a bit more solid than Jia Baoyu. Anti-heroes are quite new now, but they are also very difficult to portray. The acceptance of anti-heroes in China is not as high as abroad. Pay attention to the scale. If it is too high, it will cause disgust. If you write this person well, you will be very brilliant.

If you can't sign the contract, can you just finish the book? If that's the case, then you are very responsible.