Online Game: The Immortal True Spirit

The author is a science student and the identification has been completed. The formatting structure is neat, and each link is clearly marked, especially the row of sentences in the first chapter. Oh, I like it. The structure has a kind of momentum! With such a rigorous and meticulous arrangement, there is no doubt that he is a science student. When I wrote the article, I was in the protagonist's position and described a lot. However, the characters have a mosaic feeling, and the inner words are quite attractive. If it is accompanied by actions such as "raising eyebrows" and "curving lips", it will be even more charming! In fact, the description of the character should not just focus on the whole. It would be better to write down the face, big eyes and high bridge of the nose. Key lines ☆/Description does not mean modification. The shape, size, height, color and other physical attributes should be written down. Do not use too many particularly gorgeous modifiers. (=^^=) Apart from these shortcomings, it is actually quite good in part. The two characters who have appeared so far It is very interesting to read carefully, but the changes in the scenes and main characters are a bit abrupt. I think a little description of the environment can be added. Well, it's perverted enough, but it can be better, come on☆ [I wish the author is attentive and the readers are happy (I like it anyway), get it!

New readers, please give us suggestions. I'm a newbie author. The ideas in this book are rather strange. I hope you can give me some advice. It's better for me to hold on.

I really like the character design of this book,😏😏😏

After writing for more than a month, I really felt my own shortcomings. Therefore, in the next half month, I will calm down and study, and seriously polish my writing skills. So I'm sorry to my friends who have been following me. From today on, I will update one chapter every day. About 3,000 words. If you want to raise something, raise it; if you want to abandon it, just abandon it. Don't blame you

It's been great lately. In terms of update speed, I'm impressed!

After reading a few chapters, I personally think it's good. Cheers, author.

Feel sorry. . The world is too huge and I want to calmly organize it, so I will update it slowly. . I'm very sorry, I have nothing to do all day. . Just write novels

Recommended, recommended, recommended, waiting for you to become a god

Nice work! Collected! Come on update! Welcome to visit us again!

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