The Old Friend Can Return Home

At the author's request, I started reading it from Chapter 39. I forgot to mention a very serious problem yesterday. Ning can't tell how to use "", "" and ""! This is a common problem of 80% of online article authors, but as far as I am concerned, as long as the author can't tell the difference, no matter how good the writing is, no matter how wonderful the plot is, I will not read it. Because the basic level has been lost. Readers spend time and even money reading articles just to see authors who can't even distinguish what primary school students are learning. For example, the second paragraph of Chapter 1: The entire surrounding area is warm and bright. It should be "got" instead of "of". Paragraph 5: Stretched quite lazily It should be "" instead of "". Ning say it yourself, I came to write a book review, but ended up teaching the author how to use three des. Isn't it funny? Back to the article, all of Ning's scene transitions are accomplished by drawing dividing lines. Just draw Ning. Why draw such a long dividing line? I saw Ning's dividing line occupying three lines on my mobile phone, and it's not just once in a while. Is the word count low? Ning's writing must be responsible for the readers and Ning's own work. If you want to use a dividing line to complete the scene transition, an ellipsis or a dash is enough. Why did Ning use three lines of dashes? Furthermore, it is okay to use dividing lines occasionally, but using dividing lines for all scene transitions will appear stiff and lead to a poor reading experience. How to complete scene changes or time alternations, very few authors have the power to describe them directly. But for ordinary authors, a narration is enough. Let me give you an example: Zhang San yawned and lay down on the bed to sleep. At the same time, Li Si is playing games. What I wrote is a very simple way to change scenes, using only the four words "at the same time", but I personally think it is much more reliable than Ningla's three-line dividing line. Continue to say, judging from the title of Ning's book and the content, it seems that what Ning is writing is not a simple essay. If not, please note that what Ning is writing is ancient Chinese. Why are there so many modern vocabulary? It seems very funny to me. For example, the "roommate" who appeared in Chapter 39. Following the above, I feel that Ning's writing is not a piece of writing. Then a unified writing style is very important. Ning's writing style suddenly changed in Chapter 40, such as "give him a zhizhang look", "I'll go", etc. Also, the first sentence at the beginning of Chapter 40 is "What!!!!!!" Me:??????? Ning was so shocked that this sentence had six exclamation points in a row! Since Ning is not a novice, he should not have repeated punctuation, and there are still six at once! Combined with the dividing line above, does Ning really want to beat the number of words? Furthermore, Ning's articles are basically filled with dialogue, which makes me look hollow. Articles without description cannot give readers a sense of picture. I would rather practice my writing. I haven't watched the entire plot, so I can't comment.

[Vicious Tongue Book Review] I am not generally a venomous person, so I ask the author to be prepared. I am really tired today, so I apologize for not doing an overall analysis. Let me talk about the biggest problem. The author really likes to amuse himself when he writes the article. I felt like giving up after reading the first chapter. In the first chapter, I thought about enduring it, maybe it was setting the stage, but when I read the second chapter, I was still confused. I really didn't understand what he was writing. Maybe I looked at it too quickly and didn't take it seriously. I don't understand the psychological description of the heroine in the first chapter at all. When describing the character's psychology, you can use colons alone or colon + quotation marks. There is no way of using quotation marks alone without adding a period. Ning Zhen didn't get the essence of the three golden chapters at all. I was originally quite curious about Three Years of Sleep, but Ning's more and more inexplicable narrations and descriptions made me confused. Good foreshadowing is not about writing a bunch of words that readers can't understand, but about echoing them back and forth. In addition, looking at the comments about the ability of large environment rendering, I mentioned similar points of attention as many authors mentioned before. As the saying goes, "all scenery language is love language", Ning knows how to render the environment, which is much better than many authors. However, I hope that Ning can make the scenery no longer an isolated scenery, and let the scenery become the external expression of the protagonist's emotion. This is the blending of scenes. There are also problems with segmentation. Go watch "Nuanjun" by Xianting Luohua. The segmentation skills are very strong.

I read the first six chapters, because this type of writing is not my favorite type. Let me tell you my feelings first. Although the author's descriptions in the first one to three chapters are very delicate, I was a little confused and confused. Personally, I feel that sometimes from the reader's perspective, the writing can be better. For example, the words are simple but extraordinary, which makes people feel bright. There is no need to pile those good words together. In addition, the author's foreshadowing is pretty good, and so is the overall story concept.

The writing style of this article is very ancient. I especially like the ancient style and the sense of pictures. The plot is very novel. Come on.

The writing style is very delicate and the descriptions are on point It would be even more brilliant if the intersection could be described in depth and depth.

I am impressed by the author's writing style. I really like DaDa's rendering of the environment and description of some details. Worth learning🙏

Great writing, come on, duck

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I read it. The writing is very good and the plot is also good. Come on.

The exquisite writing is worth learning I hope you can write more, keep it up~ If you have more words, I will invest~😌

After reading the first few chapters, the author is really good at rendering the environment. In comparison, I am really too rough... But there are some places where I don't have to describe every thing with words, which is a bit much. Maybe I don't usually read this kind of genre so I feel this way. After reading the author's book, I feel that I need to add some knowledge reserves. I am so rough.

I just finished reading the author's first book, so I'll leave my mark on New Book Six 👣

Already invested, go for it💪

Bookmark it and read it slowly, keep updating, welcome to visit again!