Save a Demon

After reading the five chapters, you can draw some conclusions based on the introduction. First, the story of the female fairy asking people, the passing fairy arguing, and the plot of Can Ye giving compensation in the third chapter: in the form of dialogue, the article is concise and does not bring in too many irrelevant plots (that is to say, the word count is not exceeded). So I can sum up a rule: if it is not helpful to what you want to write, don't write it (regardless of word count). Second, In the first chapter, the strength of the two male immortals is set: top (very awesome). The fighting scenes of the two male immortals and the damage caused by the fight were also described in the later period. This shows the strength of the two male immortals, which also reflects the previous strength setting. This is worthy of praise. Personally, I think: The fighting scenes and the damage caused should be described more richly, otherwise after reading it, it will always make people feel like this is the battle between two "best in the world"? Summary rules: The description should keep up with the settings as much as possible (the settings should not crash). Third, I have doubts about the creation of two characters, The first one is the female fairy, Mo Chen. Two male immortals fought over her (the kind that resulted in severe punishment for losing) But she only tried to persuade them a few words, and finally fell asleep... And finally spread rumors to seduce the emperor... Judging from her behavior, an irritable reader can just curse: "Bah, **". The second one, the emperor, has a black face. In heaven, the emperor was bullied by three people. On earth, the emperor was beaten by a mortal protagonist again. This... Is the aura of this protagonist so strong? The dignified emperor is so miserable? For example: Zhang Heimian was frightened when he saw Mr. Can? ? ? Writing about Old Man Liu or others being frightened can also highlight the character of the boss It is said that he is also the person who manages the heaven, Oh no, it is a fairy, When being beaten by the protagonist, it is better to use some fairy power to block it, or it is better to write a black face to pretend to be in pain. In addition, I am still a little confused about the protagonist, Protagonist: Feng Chenzi, Fengqing Yang. (The two identities should be guessed correctly, right?) The change in the protagonist's personality gave me the feeling that he is not Feng Chenzi, but more like Lingxizi. Although I don't understand how the author set up these three characters, as a passerby, the reader did see these... Summary rule: The behavior of the characters should correspond to the identity of the characters as much as possible. (Don't weaken the protagonist or a supporting role to undercut others) Overall, this work is good. Personally, I feel that the plot at the beginning is unattractive, which may be the reason why I don't often watch Xianxia. Okay, that's it. I won't go into other small details. I know that the author is a newbie and can take his time on many things. I am just talking on paper. It is quite good among so many new authors. I will save your book and read it when I have gained some weight. Finally, I wish the author's work will be a hit and he will become a god soon!

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I just figured it out, if I want to put it on the shelves by the end of the month, I will have to write at least 4,000 words a day from now on... Four thousand is not enough...