The Legend of the Heroes of the Bian Song Dynasty

The gaze from the big eyes.

You have big eyes, I'm here to watch you

The gaze from the big eyeball of the abyss's law of causality weapon

I came here from Big Eyeball to visit. Because I had to go to work this morning, I only read the first few chapters. I admit that I like to find faults a bit. The following opinions are not necessarily correct. They are just a peaceful exchange as a book lover. I hope the author can stand up for his bad taste. ——————Dividing Line—————— First of all, the phrase "the brave will win when we meet on a narrow road" in the introduction is too dramatic. When writing about historical background, you can make some innocuous bugs like "There were no peppers in the Song Dynasty" or "There were no stirrups in the Qin Dynasty". After all, most people are not obsessed with research. Some modern Chinese vocabulary is also allowed, but you are not required to write directly in ancient vernacular. However, if there is a line like "When we meet on a narrow road, the brave one wins," which is too strongly imprinted on the times, it would be a bit off-kilter. Although this sentence is generally believed to be derived from the "Historical Records" "The road is long and dangerous, just like two rats fighting in a hole, the brave one will win.", But most people know that this sentence refers to leaping thousands of miles into the Dabie Mountains or shining a sword. If a non-transcendent barbarian king suddenly says a sentence, it will be very dramatic (unless this is a group crossing, and the author has laid a foreshadowing at the beginning) I think it is best to learn from Jin Yong in writing style for this kind of subject matter. Jin Yong's novels are also written in vernacular, and there are still many small bugs, but they read very smoothly without skipping a beat. The lines of various dignitaries, intellectuals, and rough men all have their own characteristics. Jin Yong is the pinnacle of popular novels and a great treasure trove for learning to write novels. His writing style can reach 30% of Jin Yong's level. Even if it is only similar in appearance, it is still very useful. The second issue is the naming issue. Chang Xiaozhang is still a bald man, so he must be playing on the Chang Kaishen joke. There is no problem. But there is something wrong with my daughter's name Chang Xiaoxiao. Since ancient times, China has been very particular about respecting the names of the venerable. The names of younger generations are generally avoided to be repeated or have the same sound as those of their elders. Only Wai Guoren can include eighteen generations of ancestors in the name. If you don't pay attention to the excuse, you won't pay attention to it. When it comes to historical background, this is also a jumping point. I haven't started reading yet, but martial arts + farming are still very novel. Come on, author＾0＾~

If you are sucked by the big eyes, come back and take a look in two months. If you are not sucked to death, please read the content again. Her big eyes and poisonous breasts are famous for her skills.

The big eyes suck at you, come and watch 😁

This time I am here to praise the author and share his writing methods. It is better for the author to use historical figures or well-known literary images - yes, I am talking about Wu Song. By the way, who is Master Zhu? Zhu Wu and Wu Song are not familiar with each other - it's just a glimpse, which doesn't steal the protagonist's role but also maintains the strong character. It is very difficult to insert historical figures in novels. First of all, you must not steal too many scenes, otherwise it will become like Water Margin 🤭 Secondly, historical figures must have a sense of existence when they play small roles. Even villains must have their strong character and charm (such as Zhu Yuanzhang and Chen Youliang in Yitian). Wu Song's role in the front is well written, and among the Water Margin characters in the back, there should be Chai Jin and Ruan Xiaoqi who have potential. Let's see if they will appear. If you don't have a front-facing role, it's a good idea to use it as a background or clue mission. For example, Yue Fei in The Legend of the Condor Heroes and Yuan Chonghuan in The Blue Blood Sword (we will only discuss the novels and not the history), although they do not have even one second of scenes, they can be said to be the soul characters who set the tone of the whole book. So one of the characters I care about more is Yue Fei. In the historical background of the Jingkang Disgrace, Yue Fei has already emerged. It seems unreasonable to simply regard him as a background emperor. But Yue Wumu's popularity is too high. Once he appears, it will inevitably affect the protagonist's brilliance, and it is impossible to let a national totem-like figure work for the protagonist as a younger brother. So how will Yue Fei appear later and how will his plot be arranged? I wonder if the author has an outline for us to share?

There are typos in Brother's introduction! Change it! This gives people a really bad impression

You are now being stared at by big eyes. What should you do?

I ran out of books to read, and I just happened to see the big eyes that made you happy. Come and watch 🤭

Congratulations on the eyeball breasts 👍

Raise your hands after following the big-eyed guy who came over with a mouthful of milk

The author should hurry up and finish the next one. He obviously has some writing skills. There is no need to die in this abyss with multiple protagonists.

The fat protagonist's personality and behavior are a bit unlike a time traveler. This is quite similar to the indigenous people who have never seen modern times or have access to the Internet.

It's hard to have multiple protagonists, I don't like it, I don't feel involved

Debuff: Eunuch's Eye's Gaze

Come on, don't cut it in half. This is a very good book. Depending on the author's ability, it can be said to be a fairy tale if it is written without any unfinished results.

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