The Swordsman Who Crosses the Border

I gather, the author is very able to withstand pressure. He has 0 followers and 5 posts. From 2019 to now, he has continued to write single-player work for so long. He is so patient. I would like to give you a recommendation vote to comfort him 😰

I just read the beginning, and I don't understand what the protagonist's situation is like. There are too many chapters in the early stage to set the stage, but after the protagonist comes out, I feel that he is not worthy of these foreshadowings. The protagonist's personality is too weak.

The first world is a two-pronged process. With the protagonist's experience in the world of the swordsman, the memories of the past are slowly revealed. Is that right? But the way you write it is too stream of consciousness. The protagonist has three names, and they keep changing. At the beginning, I didn't even know who was who. With many descriptions of characters, if you don't read them carefully, you won't even know who they are talking about. This requires readers to read carefully, deeply understand the characteristics of each person, and deeply integrate into the world in the book. But also because of the writing method of stream of consciousness, it will be a little difficult for readers to integrate into the world of the book. Because of the constant alternation between memory and reality, the logical chain is basically fragmented. Before a clear enough character image is established, the broken logical chain and the very lack of detailed description of the characters and environment will give people a feeling of confusion. I finally got better after my memory was restored, but I didn't expect that when the second volume started, it gave me a headache again. The author seems to like memories very much. But the review of Kiritsugu's life experience really made me a little impatient, and the subsequent operation of changing the past made me even more confused. Who am I? Where am I? What am I going to do? Ambush writing is a very common writing method, but first you must have a clear enough main line, otherwise it will be difficult to create expectations for the unknown. Then there is the conflict between the duo Hibiki and Mrs. Why the conflict? It's just baffling. Hibiki thought Ilya's body was the result of man-made experiments, but after the two revealed their identities, they were still full of hostility. Without confirming the situation with Ilya, he arbitrarily defined the two as evil enemies. Isn't the protagonist a gentle, kind and gentle person? Why do I feel that this place suddenly became aroused? Another question is, since the protagonist can feel Ilya's physical condition and can even estimate his lifespan, he should also be able to feel Irisviel's physical condition, or at least feel that both of them are artificial humans, right? I only saw the part where the little sun appeared, and I'm not sure if I will continue watching it. Of course I won't tell you. My biggest dissatisfaction is that my king would swing a sword at a child, which is really unimaginable 😡.

Light novels are meant to be simple and easy for readers to understand. Brother, your writing style is good, but your writing is like an artistic novel, which makes readers think a little hard.

I feel like the author's writing is very high-level, but I just can't understand it.

Author, please write another vernacular version. Although your style is very literary and artistic, I am uneducated and can't understand it.

The text is so stream-of-consciousness that I can't understand it.

The writing style is too strong, go for originality!

380,138 Votes. Author: How do you persevere?

A serious fanfic about failure, I finally found a treasure again 🤓

If you are not human, just know that you are yourself. There is nothing you can't let go of. Do you think the wolf boy is a human or a beast? Gods are just arrogant people. I don't know if the protagonist's thinking is too narrow or he is too obsessed. It couldn't be more true that people treat people like ants, just like the emperor.