Artist of the Nineties

How should I put it? The author writes as if he is doing homework, and the piling of vocabulary in the dialogues between the characters seems very confusing. For example, "It will remain new as time goes by." This is a very strange thing to say. Replace it with "Some things hurt, and the longer it lasts, the deeper it becomes"... Isn't this a down-to-earth way of life...

The introduction seems pretty good, but the content doesn't seem like that.

The heroine has been saying that her father's character was deliberately developed by his two grandfathers, who raised him crookedly in the process of raising him to support his younger brother. She keeps complaining about the two grandfathers who don't care about their family, and then she herself goes back to please them when she has nothing to do, what kind of masochistic constitution

Good-looking, very good-looking. Comfortable and clean, keep it up! Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

It looks so tiring. Basically, the system, father, mother, and younger brother are all holding back, and the female supporting character next to her probably has a higher emotional intelligence than her entire family combined. In this way, the protagonist's tenth effort will only be effective.

Why do you have to turn a high school essay into a bloody house fight? The house fight can also be a jealous fight for favors and power. As a high school student, I worry about this innocuous thing all the time, maybe it's because I'm mentally ill. This is just a top student, and a top student does nothing every day except flattering and framing an unrelated classmate. The reason is so far-fetched that people don't even bother to say it. The heroine mentioned before is very powerful. The 30-year-old successful person has gone through a lot. Coupled with the enhancement of genetic fluid, such a little girl can't be killed. Isn't it annoying to have her jumping around all the time? Too watery. I just wanted to see how to improve my artistic level and watch the heroine achieve a splendid life step by step, but the result was not as good as watching the best literary battles of the era. Repeatedly emphasizing how good the heroine's high school is, how much the heroine's father is like a brother and mother, and how much he values ​​his brothers and sisters more than his family. I wrote these dozens of times. We are not fools. We cannot remember this thing and keep repeating it over and over again. After reading more than 400 chapters, there really aren't a few sentences related to the author's topic. I gave up writing because I really couldn't keep going. I could still read this book 10 years ago, but now... I can see that I am really patient now, so I thought that the first part was just a foreshadowing, and then I should write about embroidery and calligraphy. The result seemed to be a joke. I'm a little disappointed that a good topic was poorly written by the author himself. It is recommended that the author revise the following, remove those repeated paragraphs, correct the unclear and confusing parts of the narrative, and start the topic as early as possible. It is really possible.

The plot drags on, and it's very tiring to read And one thing or a sentence often pops up in the text, but that's all the author doesn't write clearly, just like adding irrelevant things, the author's word "water" is too obvious.

It's so long-winded. I wrote more than a hundred chapters on the subject of whether to study in a technical secondary school, at different times, in the same place, at home, with the same person, her father. . . . Drunk too

What on earth is the heroine doing?!! After watching her so-called battle of wits and courage with the system for a long time, I couldn't figure out the reason. The heroine has been refusing to do system tasks and is obsessed with making money. Why? Money-making crafts such as sewing bedsheets for women all use female workers. You must know that sharpening the knife does not miss the woodcutter, and using the system to improve female workers can maximize profits. The heroine does the opposite. And it has paved the way for the high school entrance examination in so many chapters. Can you tell me what the heroine has planned for her future??? If the heroine is not talented in medicine and she wasted five years in her previous life, why should she go back to the same path in this life and waste time like this??? Does the heroine think academic qualifications are irrelevant? With the system and rebirth, it doesn't matter if you don't study, right? If not, what is the heroine doing now? Hi! This article made me feel confused and depressed!

The writing drags. Pig's feet are weird