Shang Qiong

I read a few chapters on the website and here are some suggestions: 1. The first name at the beginning should be the protagonist or an important role. I have said this in the group. 2. There are too many dividing lines, the perspective changes too frequently, and there are too many characters. This is a great test of the author's ability to portray group portraits. At present, I can only recommend that you reduce the change of perspective. 3. Is the setting a battle royale? I don't understand. Can you explain the situation a little bit? 4. That's all for now, if there are new suggestions, I will continue to leave messages here. Come on!

After roughly reading it, the first and most important thing is to suggest that the author needs to learn the transition method of scene switching. The large number of dividing lines makes the text very fragmented and the rhythm is disrupted. Secondly, there are quite a lot of characters appearing, so it is recommended that everyone's portrayal be clear, after all, some names are similar. Occasionally, they get together to talk. If you don't look at the names carefully, you will feel that they are a group of faceless people who can use anyone's name. Finally, come on, author!

Belated test of poison, hello, I'm here. I didn't expect that I would still be on the first floor! The whole text is a bit messy, and it is always divided into large paragraphs. It would be better to break it into smaller paragraphs. The story is quite good and attractive, but the plot development is a bit abrupt and not well connected. Thank you so much for letting me try the poison, come on (ง •̀_•́)ง